Those Flying Men
Admiring those flying men at the Olympic Games151 total reviews
Comment from Ancientmemory1
Congratulations on winning the contest. Well deserved. Nicely contructed and presented. The artwork couldn't have fit any better. You have truly captured what it is to be a skier.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Congratulations on winning the contest. Well deserved. Nicely contructed and presented. The artwork couldn't have fit any better. You have truly captured what it is to be a skier.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Thank you Ancientmemory1 for the awesome review!
Comment from Deejharrington
Those dare devils are really amazing. I'm just glad I'm not they're moms watching from below. Congrats on winning the contest. You have certainly captured the essence of the sport.
deb
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Those dare devils are really amazing. I'm just glad I'm not they're moms watching from below. Congrats on winning the contest. You have certainly captured the essence of the sport.
deb
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Thank you Deb for the awesome great congratulaions.
Comment from Colin Douglas
Well done. The aerials are truly impressive.
I loved "Unfolding awe" and
"Arms emulating soaring wings
Poets of gravity"
Wonderful phrasing there.
"In the Olympic Games" I thought was irrelevant to the general thought behind the poem.
Also, "They fly upside down and twirl six feet up" seemed a little flat.
Overall, well done. Congratulations on the win. Keep writing.
Colin
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Well done. The aerials are truly impressive.
I loved "Unfolding awe" and
"Arms emulating soaring wings
Poets of gravity"
Wonderful phrasing there.
"In the Olympic Games" I thought was irrelevant to the general thought behind the poem.
Also, "They fly upside down and twirl six feet up" seemed a little flat.
Overall, well done. Congratulations on the win. Keep writing.
Colin
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the comments. "They fly upside down and twirl lide a child." Reading your comments that phrase came to me. if you have time, what do you think.
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Much, much better. If you can, then, change the first part of the sentence to something that is also what a child would do, that would be perfect.
Comment from Hitcher
I love the rictameter style of poetry Amada and you did it proud here friend, this is an excellent example of what can be achieved, well done and congratulations!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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I love the rictameter style of poetry Amada and you did it proud here friend, this is an excellent example of what can be achieved, well done and congratulations!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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I really like your comments in this rictameter, the first one I wrote. Now, if I could only write a rhyming poem!
Comment from Phil Kitom
How well you have captured the essence of
these athletes who perform so brilliantly
upon a sheet of white and who have the
ability to make the viewer hold their
breath in wonder. Well done...
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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How well you have captured the essence of
these athletes who perform so brilliantly
upon a sheet of white and who have the
ability to make the viewer hold their
breath in wonder. Well done...
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Thank you Phil for reviewing my work.
Comment from honeytree
Very creative words written here. I loved the way how the writer has written these words and very worthy of the first prize within the competition.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Very creative words written here. I loved the way how the writer has written these words and very worthy of the first prize within the competition.
Honeytree
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Thank you Honeytree for reading my work.
Comment from Arkine
Nicely done. It's amazing the things that they can do. I always liked to watch them as a kid, but I don't think I'd ever be brave enough to try some of the stunts they do! ;)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Nicely done. It's amazing the things that they can do. I always liked to watch them as a kid, but I don't think I'd ever be brave enough to try some of the stunts they do! ;)
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Ha! I couldn't jump either, my hairdo could get messy! Thank you for the fun review to my review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Probably everything has already been said about this, but I just wanted to ad my two-cents worth--nice imagery.
Roberta
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Probably everything has already been said about this, but I just wanted to ad my two-cents worth--nice imagery.
Roberta
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you Roberta!
Comment from Charlene0513
To amanda,
A Rictameter poem that addresses the Olympics. The dare devil stunts and acrobatics of some and the speed of others and grace in others that they carry themselves make them all champions in their own right.
Charlene
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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To amanda,
A Rictameter poem that addresses the Olympics. The dare devil stunts and acrobatics of some and the speed of others and grace in others that they carry themselves make them all champions in their own right.
Charlene
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you for commenting!
Comment from azwildrosa
I love how you compared the poetry to the skier. The pic is beautiful. It fits the poem beautifully. Thank your for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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I love how you compared the poetry to the skier. The pic is beautiful. It fits the poem beautifully. Thank your for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you azwildrose for reading and commening in this work.
