My Firefly
whimsical shadorma87 total reviews
Comment from CammyCards
You caught well a falling star. Your poem is very nice. It flows well with sort of a surprise ending. Thank you for using my art to illustrate your work.
CammyCards
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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You caught well a falling star. Your poem is very nice. It flows well with sort of a surprise ending. Thank you for using my art to illustrate your work.
CammyCards
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thank you, CammyCards :-) Your work is gorgeous, and I'm always so grateful we have such lovely work made available to us by the gracious artists of Fan Art!! :-)
Comment from SamanthaD.
This is the first shadorma type poem I have ever read. I've never even heard of that type of poetry before. Your poem is very well done- I love the imagery of fireflies as "wonder from the sky. Very creative!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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This is the first shadorma type poem I have ever read. I've never even heard of that type of poetry before. Your poem is very well done- I love the imagery of fireflies as "wonder from the sky. Very creative!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Samantha. I only learned about the form last week. Brooke :-) Brooke
Comment from Charlene0513
To adewpearl,
A poem that has a class of wonderment to it.
The many stars would certainly be put at a disadvantage when not being able to shine wheels around the constellations. LOL
Charlene
PS.Brooke I would like to ask a question:
In the Haiku, Naani and Senryu poems epecially, others if necessary:Can any words such as couldn't-could not or doesn't- does not, didn't-did not to name a few, would they be classified as one or two syllables if you used the short form of it in your poems for the contest times.
I would greatly appreciate your help in this matter.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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To adewpearl,
A poem that has a class of wonderment to it.
The many stars would certainly be put at a disadvantage when not being able to shine wheels around the constellations. LOL
Charlene
PS.Brooke I would like to ask a question:
In the Haiku, Naani and Senryu poems epecially, others if necessary:Can any words such as couldn't-could not or doesn't- does not, didn't-did not to name a few, would they be classified as one or two syllables if you used the short form of it in your poems for the contest times.
I would greatly appreciate your help in this matter.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Charlene - I appreciate your review. As for your question - even the contraction form is 2 syllables because it is said in two beats, not one. Listen to the way they sound - could/ent does/ent did/ent. It's impossible to say any of them in just one beat. On the other hand I'm or They're are one syllable contractions because you say them all in one beat. Brooke
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Thank you ever so much for your words of wisdom. I certainly needed someone lke you to set me straight with your honest and precise words.
Thanks again,
Charlene
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpearl,
The line count is correct. The theme is good. The flow is nice. The descriptive words are very well chosen.
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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adewpearl,
The line count is correct. The theme is good. The flow is nice. The descriptive words are very well chosen.
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Oatmeal. I'm pleased you enjoyed this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from despiser
brooke
i know im an ignoramus when it comes to poetry rules, but why have a syllable count without a set rhyming scheme? just a thought. incidently, nice rhyming scheme ;)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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brooke
i know im an ignoramus when it comes to poetry rules, but why have a syllable count without a set rhyming scheme? just a thought. incidently, nice rhyming scheme ;)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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I have no idea how the different forms' inventors decided to make them rhyming or not rhyming or optional rhyming! LOL Lots of forms are so old nobody even has any idea anymore who invented them or just when, so it will all remain a mystery!
Thanks, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from Patricia Crandall
Indeed, a whimsical poem and a pleasure to read in silence or aloud. It flowed well and the rhymes blended. It presented strong images of fireflies (I can see them on a July night). Nice work. Pat Crandall
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Indeed, a whimsical poem and a pleasure to read in silence or aloud. It flowed well and the rhymes blended. It presented strong images of fireflies (I can see them on a July night). Nice work. Pat Crandall
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Patricia. Glad you enjoyed the whimsy :-) Brooke
Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
Enjoyed the work and the lesson on "shardorma". I had not heard of this form. It's interesting, and you've done a great job with it. Your content is familiar and comforting. elaine
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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adewpearl,
Enjoyed the work and the lesson on "shardorma". I had not heard of this form. It's interesting, and you've done a great job with it. Your content is familiar and comforting. elaine
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Elaine. I'm glad you enjoyed this form :-) Brooke
Comment from smileycloud
hey
Brooke
great idealistic wisdom
you have captured the profound uselessness of capturing and concealing something wonderful
have a smiley day
lorraine
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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hey
Brooke
great idealistic wisdom
you have captured the profound uselessness of capturing and concealing something wonderful
have a smiley day
lorraine
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Lorraine. :-) So glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
I love fireflies! And how hasn't tried to capture them in a jar. I look forward to those warm humid summer nights when they all come out! A lovely addition to the group.
deb
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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I love fireflies! And how hasn't tried to capture them in a jar. I look forward to those warm humid summer nights when they all come out! A lovely addition to the group.
deb
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Deb. Catching them is a recurring great childhood memory of mine :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonqueen1983
you have a cool poem here. it reminded me of a movie i saw some years ago about a star that fell to earth. anyway you poem is well written
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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you have a cool poem here. it reminded me of a movie i saw some years ago about a star that fell to earth. anyway you poem is well written
Comment Written 25-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Dragonqueen. I'm so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
