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Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "The Invasive Roots"A halarious adventure with misery, but always joy!
7 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hi Mike. A very interesting chapter ... sex and drugs. The only thing missing is how teenage boys devour food every five seconds.
Just a few corrections...
We'll(Well) I always called what you listen
the Pastor was grateful that we were(weren't) hurt
What the hell is this shit!(")
I was informed that I have(had) been retired from the fireworks business by Mom.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Hi Mike. A very interesting chapter ... sex and drugs. The only thing missing is how teenage boys devour food every five seconds.
Just a few corrections...
We'll(Well) I always called what you listen
the Pastor was grateful that we were(weren't) hurt
What the hell is this shit!(")
I was informed that I have(had) been retired from the fireworks business by Mom.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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I loved this review and not only your enjoyable statement about food and teenage boys, the muchies made it even worse. LOL But not as bad on my parents as the next year when I started bodybuilding. What a contrictary hint! I thank you very much for the compliments, corrections and this review. Mike
Comment from Judian James
Whoa Mike!! This chapter was exhausting!! Between the drugs and the pursuit of sex, I was spent by the final paragraph. Phew!! Have you or have you not lost your virginity yet? lol Happy Val's Day to you.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Whoa Mike!! This chapter was exhausting!! Between the drugs and the pursuit of sex, I was spent by the final paragraph. Phew!! Have you or have you not lost your virginity yet? lol Happy Val's Day to you.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Now, you have to stay tuned to every chapter of the book for now on to find that out. In sooo many places it seems that I will, but the situations totally erode to what became humorous long after the atempt. To preserve the progression of the book, I really can not comment too much. What do I say about this review? Wow! Jude, I not only thank you for it and the compliments. I thank you for the Happy Val's wish. I wish you the same. It was quiet on the home front. LOL Not only do I hope you have a happy Valentine's day as well, but that you have a great week ahead! Mike
Comment from Max Edon
I read both chapters back to back, so I will review them together. I really enjoyed the tale about jumping into the water. It had such an innocent, natural feel to it. I admired your courage in describing the drug use--it is hard to be honest abouyt such things!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I read both chapters back to back, so I will review them together. I really enjoyed the tale about jumping into the water. It had such an innocent, natural feel to it. I admired your courage in describing the drug use--it is hard to be honest abouyt such things!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I thank you very much for you compliments and the review. We'll I decided long about to be honest, the problem is if I try to lighten or sugar coat things, a lot becomes lost down the line. Mike
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You are welcome!
Comment from tammipratt
This by all accounts is quite an amazing series of events, and somehow I wonder if it is real - could it be? I bet it coud. Frankly I enjoyed it. I thought these lines pivotal:
This getting high, was actually a point of diminishing returns and slowly I realized the impact it had on me.
Well done, I was thoroughly entertained. How this one chapter isn't an entire book thought, I don't know!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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This by all accounts is quite an amazing series of events, and somehow I wonder if it is real - could it be? I bet it coud. Frankly I enjoyed it. I thought these lines pivotal:
This getting high, was actually a point of diminishing returns and slowly I realized the impact it had on me.
Well done, I was thoroughly entertained. How this one chapter isn't an entire book thought, I don't know!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I thank you for sharing with me you favorite line, the compliments and this review. It is the truth, luckily for a year, but my adventure through life doesn't diminish. Most of the previous chapters are about love and highly entertaining. Have a great week ahead! Mike
Comment from Marathonwriter
Hi Mike,
I found this an interesting take on drug usage. I have a few suggestions.
~At a prior scout meeting, we saw a film of intravenous drug users with their sad lives and attitudes were tracked, including their emergency room visits, with their ODs and having their arm sliced up to find one good vein. (This sentence is too long. I'd break it down into at least two sentences.)
~This did not hold my interest very well. I think it would be better if you wrote scenes with dialogue. You have enough material here to write many stories.
:0)Chris
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Hi Mike,
I found this an interesting take on drug usage. I have a few suggestions.
~At a prior scout meeting, we saw a film of intravenous drug users with their sad lives and attitudes were tracked, including their emergency room visits, with their ODs and having their arm sliced up to find one good vein. (This sentence is too long. I'd break it down into at least two sentences.)
~This did not hold my interest very well. I think it would be better if you wrote scenes with dialogue. You have enough material here to write many stories.
:0)Chris
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I can't expect all reviews to enjoy every aspect of this book. I thank you for the suggested correction and taking the time to review this. Mike
Comment from gypsycaravan
I think the information that you want to impart to the readers is excellent. Your story line seems to be fragmented and disconnected. Your sentences and paragraphs need much work. I think, with work, it could be an interesting and informative piece. Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I think the information that you want to impart to the readers is excellent. Your story line seems to be fragmented and disconnected. Your sentences and paragraphs need much work. I think, with work, it could be an interesting and informative piece. Good luck with it.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review this. I don't think you have reviewed many chapters, so it is hard to relate it to you. There are different aspects of parallel themes and events and personally, I think I have done a pretty good job at organizing them. While, I consider all reviews, I feel that I can't completely rework something, based on one chapter. With this, I know that I will take many hits. Miike
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
The simplicity and very easy writing style is appreciable. This is something that anyone can enjoy. The font size is too big try to resize it. I loved it right from the start when till the end.
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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The simplicity and very easy writing style is appreciable. This is something that anyone can enjoy. The font size is too big try to resize it. I loved it right from the start when till the end.
k
Comment Written 13-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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I will fix the font size. The editor here, doesn't alawys do what I would like it to. We all nick-named it Evil Eddy. But quietly so. I try to match the writing style with the developement. In one chapter, I was poorly rated for exactly the opposite, the Pakestani felt that the dialog should be in high English. I respectfully declined as it wouldn't be an accurate representation. We were all closser to Mark Twains, "Huckleberry Fin," then Shakespear. I thank you very much for reviewing this and the compliments. Have a great week ahead! Mike
