At Last
It just didn't seem possible77 total reviews
Comment from Shirley B
Oh how sweet. I love your story. How great you still feel that way about your wife. You are both so lucky. I hope you both have a great Valentines Day. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Oh how sweet. I love your story. How great you still feel that way about your wife. You are both so lucky. I hope you both have a great Valentines Day. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Hi, Shirl! Thanks for the nice words. I am one lucky guy, I can tell you that...Bob
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a great love story very beautifully told. The events you described are not extraordinary, but the mode of narration added a pep that heightened it. You missed the ending quotation mark after the proposal proper. kudos
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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This is a great love story very beautifully told. The events you described are not extraordinary, but the mode of narration added a pep that heightened it. You missed the ending quotation mark after the proposal proper. kudos
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Perp. I appreciate your interest and review...Bob
Comment from Lynar
I enjoyed seeing the lead, Lynie from your perspective. How how much you loved her, by details. (her black dress, heels; perfume). The dialogue was smooth flowing, sensual and seductive that kept the love aspect alive. (Kissing in Limo, hugs, cuddling etc.) The first surprise, Geja's Cafe, where the decorum of violin music enhanced the love mood. The imagery was easy to follow in my mind.
Surprise number two, Bill knelt on his knee for the marriage proposal. Lynie accepted the 1/2 carat engagement ring. However, the real surprise was that Lynie was in a wheelchair. It was an unexpected twist in the story that made me want to clap with the crowd. Your story goal was met. The story, At Last was believable Romance fiction suited for a Valentine's Entry. I would recommend it to my friends. No adverse comments.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I enjoyed seeing the lead, Lynie from your perspective. How how much you loved her, by details. (her black dress, heels; perfume). The dialogue was smooth flowing, sensual and seductive that kept the love aspect alive. (Kissing in Limo, hugs, cuddling etc.) The first surprise, Geja's Cafe, where the decorum of violin music enhanced the love mood. The imagery was easy to follow in my mind.
Surprise number two, Bill knelt on his knee for the marriage proposal. Lynie accepted the 1/2 carat engagement ring. However, the real surprise was that Lynie was in a wheelchair. It was an unexpected twist in the story that made me want to clap with the crowd. Your story goal was met. The story, At Last was believable Romance fiction suited for a Valentine's Entry. I would recommend it to my friends. No adverse comments.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Wow! What a wonderful review, Lynar! Very detailed and the six was such a plus! Thanks again...Bob
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Your very welcome, Mastery.
Comment from highlander104
What a wonderful story. If your wife hasn't heard the words you felt on that special night, now could be a good time to wrap this story up in a Valentine card. Somehow, I think she already has heard them many times.
Happy Valentine's Day to you both.
Jean K.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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What a wonderful story. If your wife hasn't heard the words you felt on that special night, now could be a good time to wrap this story up in a Valentine card. Somehow, I think she already has heard them many times.
Happy Valentine's Day to you both.
Jean K.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Well, thank you, Jean. I am most grateful for your review...Bob
Comment from MizKat
Bob - What a romantic you are. Your wife must be thrilled. Your story was tender and touching. I really enjoyed reading it. Kat
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Bob - What a romantic you are. Your wife must be thrilled. Your story was tender and touching. I really enjoyed reading it. Kat
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Kat. I appreciate you and your review...Bob
Comment from Tallteller
Perfect timing to propose on Valentine's Day and a perfectly sweet little tale of romance. Only one adverb (finally), you have certainly stuck to your guns in that regard. Full stop needed after melody in my heart, as if that matters all that much. Always a smooth read and an impeccable style, oodles of it! It is a joy to read again that keyboard dance you do.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Perfect timing to propose on Valentine's Day and a perfectly sweet little tale of romance. Only one adverb (finally), you have certainly stuck to your guns in that regard. Full stop needed after melody in my heart, as if that matters all that much. Always a smooth read and an impeccable style, oodles of it! It is a joy to read again that keyboard dance you do.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Hi, Les. LOL...I sometimes think you have forgotten me or is it the other way round...I must go check my "fandom" list, posthaste. Thanks so very, very much for the wonderful compliments and your support.(A six! whew!) Bob
Comment from The Guardian
You know, Bob, you always capture the critical emotions and details of a scene. I love hearing it from the male perspective especially how nothing else mattered except those moments with her. From a female perspective, it sometimes surprises me to hear that men experience the same sentimentality as women. I don't mean to sound like a curmudgeon, but each time I hear a man describing a moment with a woman he loves in such romantic and sensory detail, it's a delight and a surprise.
A beautiful story and especially love the author's notes. Didn't realize you've only been married for eleven years.
Hope that you're well.
Merle
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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You know, Bob, you always capture the critical emotions and details of a scene. I love hearing it from the male perspective especially how nothing else mattered except those moments with her. From a female perspective, it sometimes surprises me to hear that men experience the same sentimentality as women. I don't mean to sound like a curmudgeon, but each time I hear a man describing a moment with a woman he loves in such romantic and sensory detail, it's a delight and a surprise.
A beautiful story and especially love the author's notes. Didn't realize you've only been married for eleven years.
Hope that you're well.
Merle
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Merle. Surprising what we learn about one another on here, huh? I appreciate your wonderful remarks as always...Bob
Comment from sugardog
Ah, this is absolutly the most romantic love story! I thought it was wonderful and tender and so emotional. The characters are so real and clear. Crisp writing and smooth dialogue make this story flow beautifully along. I really enjoyed this flash fiction love story-happy endings are the best :) Good luck in the contest, Dana
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Ah, this is absolutly the most romantic love story! I thought it was wonderful and tender and so emotional. The characters are so real and clear. Crisp writing and smooth dialogue make this story flow beautifully along. I really enjoyed this flash fiction love story-happy endings are the best :) Good luck in the contest, Dana
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Diana. I appreciate your time and your wonderful review...Bob
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You're welcome-Dana
Comment from Amicus
Wow, this is a classic romantic tale, Bob. You must have had a wonderful time in the sun, my friend. :>) The perfect proposal scenario is described here and reminds the rest of of us blundering bumbling oafs how lucky we were to succeed with our chosen mates given our imperfect goofy efforts.
Good tale; well told...warm fuzzy stuff. Best wishes in the competition.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Wow, this is a classic romantic tale, Bob. You must have had a wonderful time in the sun, my friend. :>) The perfect proposal scenario is described here and reminds the rest of of us blundering bumbling oafs how lucky we were to succeed with our chosen mates given our imperfect goofy efforts.
Good tale; well told...warm fuzzy stuff. Best wishes in the competition.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Amicus. LOL I am so grateful for your acknowledgement of my "Warm, fuzzy stuff.) LOL...Bob
Comment from Wild Flower
This is really beautiful Bob. Did you go all out like that for your Lynie? Great job on this. It's sweet and romantic. Ha, your female fans are going LOVE it. :-)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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This is really beautiful Bob. Did you go all out like that for your Lynie? Great job on this. It's sweet and romantic. Ha, your female fans are going LOVE it. :-)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Jo. I am particularly glad YOU liked this one. I met Lynie on the computer on Love AOL. LOL
