Cocoon
Repose and Renewal115 total reviews
Comment from joemass
G'day amada
This is a comfortable little poem though i thought the stanza 'Let the world...reel' got a little cumbersome; perhaps you were trying to fit too much into the one stanza.
"Just contemplate" - my kids tell me that's all I do these days :-)
Good job!
Joemass
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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G'day amada
This is a comfortable little poem though i thought the stanza 'Let the world...reel' got a little cumbersome; perhaps you were trying to fit too much into the one stanza.
"Just contemplate" - my kids tell me that's all I do these days :-)
Good job!
Joemass
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you Joemass for the great review to this poem.
Comment from Thesis
I think you've hit the target with this poem. Sometimes it has to be about you. We all need time to reassess and regroup.
I like your cocoon analogy. It's a nice, tight, safe place to hide. - Thesis
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I think you've hit the target with this poem. Sometimes it has to be about you. We all need time to reassess and regroup.
I like your cocoon analogy. It's a nice, tight, safe place to hide. - Thesis
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Hi Thesis. I like what you say here. "Sometimes it has to be about you."
Comment from Amicus
I like this well crafted free verse poem, amada. It is smooth flowing and well paced due to the non intrusive but consistent background rhythm and it effectively conveys your recognition of the importance of solitude to self knowledge and growth. Cocooning has long been my preferred way of self repair and inspiring self improvement so it is good to see a poem endorsing it.
Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I like this well crafted free verse poem, amada. It is smooth flowing and well paced due to the non intrusive but consistent background rhythm and it effectively conveys your recognition of the importance of solitude to self knowledge and growth. Cocooning has long been my preferred way of self repair and inspiring self improvement so it is good to see a poem endorsing it.
Well done.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Oh yes, thank you for liking the idea of cocoing. it's great for mind and soul.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
INTROVERT: LIVING IN ONE'S OWN WORLD!
I liked self-improvement poem. I enjoyed the flow of thoughts, clear state of message, soft order of language, good structured, expressive word orders, and candid conviction. It was an easy read.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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INTROVERT: LIVING IN ONE'S OWN WORLD!
I liked self-improvement poem. I enjoyed the flow of thoughts, clear state of message, soft order of language, good structured, expressive word orders, and candid conviction. It was an easy read.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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You caught me so well. I am an introvert person and love solitude. Thank you for reading this poem.
Comment from Adri7enne
Oh, I loved that! It's so simple and real, yet the message is so complex. A moment of realization is the highest occurence in nature. You write well about it. Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Oh, I loved that! It's so simple and real, yet the message is so complex. A moment of realization is the highest occurence in nature. You write well about it. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you Adri&enne for reading and reviewing this work.
Comment from Sandy P.
amada, I loved your poem and it's title. In a few words you managed to capture a feeling that many of us, I'm certain, would love to experience ourselves. Just having time to "sit" and contemplate life, unhurried, would be a welcome change to many. Very well done.
Sandy
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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amada, I loved your poem and it's title. In a few words you managed to capture a feeling that many of us, I'm certain, would love to experience ourselves. Just having time to "sit" and contemplate life, unhurried, would be a welcome change to many. Very well done.
Sandy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you Sandy for reading and reviewing this work.
Comment from fictionwriter
There are times it would be easier just to hide inside ourselves that's for sure. I enjoyed this little look at that feeling. WEll done.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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There are times it would be easier just to hide inside ourselves that's for sure. I enjoyed this little look at that feeling. WEll done.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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So true! It's nice to hide ourselves in a secure place.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Amada ...
I rather like the idea which you have developed in this free-thought writing .... that, for a while at least,
you would like to withdraw into yourself - away from all that is going on around you - to just have time to be peaceful and to contemplate and to observe from a distance.
This is what we should all do from time to time. I like to think of it as 'resting in God.'
Thank you for sharing this with us. I like it.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Hullo Amada ...
I rather like the idea which you have developed in this free-thought writing .... that, for a while at least,
you would like to withdraw into yourself - away from all that is going on around you - to just have time to be peaceful and to contemplate and to observe from a distance.
This is what we should all do from time to time. I like to think of it as 'resting in God.'
Thank you for sharing this with us. I like it.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Hi Nanette Mary. I love reading your comments about what i write. Thank you for revieiwng my work.
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
Reflects how I am currently feeling in this midst of this winter storm. Nice flow and imagery, especially the old mechanical reel bit. Hugs!
~ Steven
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Reflects how I am currently feeling in this midst of this winter storm. Nice flow and imagery, especially the old mechanical reel bit. Hugs!
~ Steven
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Hi Steve. Wishing you well in that winter storm!
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I will do.
~ Steven
Comment from rhymer1
My visual is the author hunkered down in a large cardboard box, peeking out at a dark and dirty alley and deciding to stay in the box.
Slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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My visual is the author hunkered down in a large cardboard box, peeking out at a dark and dirty alley and deciding to stay in the box.
Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Exactly, a cardboard box would do just fine1
