Cocoon
Repose and Renewal115 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
I like this poem very much
because it is sur-real
I love the way you express the need to be alone for awhile
I have had a few of those moments myself.
this is a good write.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I like this poem very much
because it is sur-real
I love the way you express the need to be alone for awhile
I have had a few of those moments myself.
this is a good write.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you misscookie for reviewing mywork.
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your welcome,have a nice day.
Comment from sparky123
I enjoyed your poem very much.I , liked the way you worded 'well wrapped in a cocoon', and 'closed from wantings and needs'. You put the message over well that it's great to have some 'me' time.Thanks.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I enjoyed your poem very much.I , liked the way you worded 'well wrapped in a cocoon', and 'closed from wantings and needs'. You put the message over well that it's great to have some 'me' time.Thanks.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you sparkly123 for reviewing my work.
Comment from amel
A very clever writing, amada! well done written verse. An uplifting poem you have penned.
Well wrapped
In a cocoon..
I love this line the most. A very thought provoking piece. Blessings to you, amel
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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A very clever writing, amada! well done written verse. An uplifting poem you have penned.
Well wrapped
In a cocoon..
I love this line the most. A very thought provoking piece. Blessings to you, amel
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you, amel.
Comment from Werdy_Nerd
Loved your use of visually squishing the words into a confined area (like a cocoon...:P). I thought your references to mechanical objects (the mechanical reel and the inner 'clock') was also interesting, as a cocoon found in nature, is organic. Nice juxtaposition.
Werdy
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Loved your use of visually squishing the words into a confined area (like a cocoon...:P). I thought your references to mechanical objects (the mechanical reel and the inner 'clock') was also interesting, as a cocoon found in nature, is organic. Nice juxtaposition.
Werdy
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you for liking this work. Much honored!
Comment from Sally Carter
A charming little poem, which I for one can readily identify with. Oh, the need to be on my own sometimes, no questions, no responsibilities, no duties. You have really nailed that feeling.
Some lovely alliteration and assonance - world/swirl, old/slow/motion, all the c's, honor/complex/clock, etc.
The final stanza ends with the simplicity you crave in the stanza above.
A pleasure to read and review.
Sally
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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A charming little poem, which I for one can readily identify with. Oh, the need to be on my own sometimes, no questions, no responsibilities, no duties. You have really nailed that feeling.
Some lovely alliteration and assonance - world/swirl, old/slow/motion, all the c's, honor/complex/clock, etc.
The final stanza ends with the simplicity you crave in the stanza above.
A pleasure to read and review.
Sally
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you Sally for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from Earthlover
I love your poem and the title "Cocoon" I understand your feelings expressed in this well thought out verse. I often feel so overwhelmed by everything in this life that I wish there really was a Cocoon to crawl into.
Great job expressing your feelings into poetry.
Thanks for sharing.
Earthlover
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I love your poem and the title "Cocoon" I understand your feelings expressed in this well thought out verse. I often feel so overwhelmed by everything in this life that I wish there really was a Cocoon to crawl into.
Great job expressing your feelings into poetry.
Thanks for sharing.
Earthlover
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Happy to provide a cocoon for you, if only for a couple of minutes. Take much care.
Comment from mermaids
I can relate to the feeling your create in this poem. Sometimes I need to be by myself and not focus on anything else. I like the image of a cocoon,excellent description.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I can relate to the feeling your create in this poem. Sometimes I need to be by myself and not focus on anything else. I like the image of a cocoon,excellent description.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you mermaids for the great review to this cocoon work.
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Interesting idea, if only we can have the things that the wish, poetically powerful piece of work, very well done Good insights, and poetic flow, very enjoyable, There were no errors. No typos and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next One ,Alexander QQ...
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Interesting idea, if only we can have the things that the wish, poetically powerful piece of work, very well done Good insights, and poetic flow, very enjoyable, There were no errors. No typos and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next One ,Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you Brooklyn Poet QQ.
Comment from HAWordsmith
Nicely said and I really like the simplicity and elongated way you have written this...as if in a cocoon. The imagery of it is great. Thank you for this posting.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Nicely said and I really like the simplicity and elongated way you have written this...as if in a cocoon. The imagery of it is great. Thank you for this posting.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you for reading and revieing this cocoon!
Comment from rama devi
I know the feeling. While the simile is not new, the voicing is al your own and well expressed. it induces the very mood it describes (though i was heading in that direction anyway).
Maybe I will close down the computer now and just relax.
LOL
Lovely free verse flow with pace to match the tone and tenor of your theme.
I onjoyed your use of continual consonance with C sounds.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I know the feeling. While the simile is not new, the voicing is al your own and well expressed. it induces the very mood it describes (though i was heading in that direction anyway).
Maybe I will close down the computer now and just relax.
LOL
Lovely free verse flow with pace to match the tone and tenor of your theme.
I onjoyed your use of continual consonance with C sounds.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Oh no! Relax in the midst of my review? No way. Thank you so much for stopping here and read my work.
