Cocoon
Repose and Renewal115 total reviews
Comment from boberto
Hi, Amada. I'll go along with this philosophy. I'm an introvert wrapped in extrovert skin. I do have a comment--
Well wrapped
In a cocoon
This seems repititious to me. If something is in a cocoon, they are well wrapped. When cocoon is used as as a verb, that is how it is used.
Just me thinking.
boberto
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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Hi, Amada. I'll go along with this philosophy. I'm an introvert wrapped in extrovert skin. I do have a comment--
Well wrapped
In a cocoon
This seems repititious to me. If something is in a cocoon, they are well wrapped. When cocoon is used as as a verb, that is how it is used.
Just me thinking.
boberto
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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Thank you boberto for reading and commenting in this work. Me thinking i wanted to emphasize the feeling of a security blanket.
Comment from SamanthaD.
Wonderful poem! I feel this way many times and you expressed the need for introspection so beautifully. The only suggestion I have is that it seems that "a slow motion old mechanical reel" doesn't quite fit with the softness of the cocoon imagery. Just a thought. I love this poem!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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Wonderful poem! I feel this way many times and you expressed the need for introspection so beautifully. The only suggestion I have is that it seems that "a slow motion old mechanical reel" doesn't quite fit with the softness of the cocoon imagery. Just a thought. I love this poem!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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Thank you SamanthaD for giving me your opinion in this reel. it makes me think......
Comment from The Guardian
Nice to read a verse that speaks volumes about how I feel today. I'd like that type of cocoon to hide within, to help me to weather the day-long stress, and to hide within until I feel strong enough to fly again.
This is simple in design yet rich in emotion and experience.
Nicely done!
Merle
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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Nice to read a verse that speaks volumes about how I feel today. I'd like that type of cocoon to hide within, to help me to weather the day-long stress, and to hide within until I feel strong enough to fly again.
This is simple in design yet rich in emotion and experience.
Nicely done!
Merle
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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Nice sentiments. I was planning to include the image of a butterly fying out of the cocoon. Then I thought, leave all blank, how I was feeling that day. No wantings and no needs. Thank you for catching the drift of my work.
Comment from bnd-writenow
I know that cocoon. It's so comforting and healing...
With so many demands on me recently - as well as the flu - I want to disappear into one now, and can't.
Your simple words say so much.
I love:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock
Thanks for writing a poem so meaningful to me!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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I know that cocoon. It's so comforting and healing...
With so many demands on me recently - as well as the flu - I want to disappear into one now, and can't.
Your simple words say so much.
I love:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock
Thanks for writing a poem so meaningful to me!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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It was great to read such a positive and uplifting review.
Comment from Catherine Somerton
I can certainly relate to this. That's why it caught my interest right away. I spent most of my early life inside a cocoon just like the one you described. That proved to be both an advantage and disadvantage when I became an adult, but I have no regrets.
I especially liked this part:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock.
Everyone needs that from time to time. Excellent writing, thank you.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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I can certainly relate to this. That's why it caught my interest right away. I spent most of my early life inside a cocoon just like the one you described. That proved to be both an advantage and disadvantage when I became an adult, but I have no regrets.
I especially liked this part:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock.
Everyone needs that from time to time. Excellent writing, thank you.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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There is no wrongs in being an introvert. The best times.
Comment from knowledge
I know how you feel. At time I just want to find a cave and get away from this crazy world that we have created by our stupidity.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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I know how you feel. At time I just want to find a cave and get away from this crazy world that we have created by our stupidity.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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I am with you, Knowledge. Much trouble out there.
Comment from leesm
This really captures that feeling that most people, I would think, have from time to time. It's a nice place to go, just to mellow out for a while. NIcely done, and the poem frames the feeling quite well.
Peace,
-lee
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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This really captures that feeling that most people, I would think, have from time to time. It's a nice place to go, just to mellow out for a while. NIcely done, and the poem frames the feeling quite well.
Peace,
-lee
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you Lee for liking my work and the artwork as well.
Comment from fionageorge
Hi, I love your style of free verse poetry, and the words give the reader a feeling of wanting to curl up in that cocoon, away from life's turbulence, just to exist inside that wonderful warm and protected place.
Warmest regards
Marijke
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Hi, I love your style of free verse poetry, and the words give the reader a feeling of wanting to curl up in that cocoon, away from life's turbulence, just to exist inside that wonderful warm and protected place.
Warmest regards
Marijke
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you for liking my style and free verse! And for telling me about it!
Comment from salmonandpartyrings
Thank you very much, I like the way you have placed the word 'Closed' on it's own - effective reflection. I like the way there's no clear rhythm mirrors how the writer is in control of time: 'and see it all as if through a slow motion old mechanical reel.'
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you very much, I like the way you have placed the word 'Closed' on it's own - effective reflection. I like the way there's no clear rhythm mirrors how the writer is in control of time: 'and see it all as if through a slow motion old mechanical reel.'
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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That's was exactly my idea, to write it all as following a very slow and narrow reel. maybe I should change to black and white now that I think about it.
Comment from missy98writer
amanda,
Beautiful written poem. Excellent imagery. Your poem is great without use of art work. The lines I enjoyed the best:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock.
The need for being alone and enjoying your company wrapped in a cocoon is how I've always been. It gets harder with family to get alone time but we all need solitude. Excellent self empowering and improvement poem
Melissa.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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amanda,
Beautiful written poem. Excellent imagery. Your poem is great without use of art work. The lines I enjoyed the best:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock.
The need for being alone and enjoying your company wrapped in a cocoon is how I've always been. It gets harder with family to get alone time but we all need solitude. Excellent self empowering and improvement poem
Melissa.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Melissa!
