Swirling Snow
first try at a lovely new form103 total reviews
Comment from Helvi2
Hi Brooke,
Nice job with your Florette. You always have such lovely flow within your poems.
You nailed the syllable count for the Florette and the rhyme scheme. I don't know about you, but I had trouble with the last line in each verse trying to get the eighth syllable to match the "B" ending rhyme.
The imagery you created of swirling and glittering snow
was beautiful in my mind's eye. I could picture myself in the midst of all that sparkle. Loved It!
Good Luck in the Contest
Helvi :o)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2010
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Hi Brooke,
Nice job with your Florette. You always have such lovely flow within your poems.
You nailed the syllable count for the Florette and the rhyme scheme. I don't know about you, but I had trouble with the last line in each verse trying to get the eighth syllable to match the "B" ending rhyme.
The imagery you created of swirling and glittering snow
was beautiful in my mind's eye. I could picture myself in the midst of all that sparkle. Loved It!
Good Luck in the Contest
Helvi :o)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Helvi - yes, I found that final line difficult to construct, too, but we both figured it out! :-) Good luck to you, too, in the contest, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from samandlancelot
This so perfect and beautiful. We can never thank God enough for all He does, but praise Him for the gift of writing He's given to you.
Patricia
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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This so perfect and beautiful. We can never thank God enough for all He does, but praise Him for the gift of writing He's given to you.
Patricia
Comment Written 01-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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Thanks so much, Patricia, for this most gracious and generous review - I truly appreciate it. Brooke :-)
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - Didn't I just read a florette poem of yours about the seashore? This one about the snow is pretty good, too, with the imagery you conjure up of the snow. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Charlie
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Brooke - Didn't I just read a florette poem of yours about the seashore? This one about the snow is pretty good, too, with the imagery you conjure up of the snow. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Charlie
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Yes, you did. LOL I wrote this one for the contest a couple weeks ago and then today, I wrote the seashore one. Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke
Comment from ulster3
Hello Brooke.
This is a fine testament to both nature and God. Snow is a great example of ceaseless change and we've had plenty of it falling here to spend time watching it. This is my favorite verse:
I cannot pay the debt I owe
for boundless beauty God bestows,
so poetry I'm left to write
to praise the Lord for this delight of drifting snow.
Best to you in the contest. Rebecca
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Hello Brooke.
This is a fine testament to both nature and God. Snow is a great example of ceaseless change and we've had plenty of it falling here to spend time watching it. This is my favorite verse:
I cannot pay the debt I owe
for boundless beauty God bestows,
so poetry I'm left to write
to praise the Lord for this delight of drifting snow.
Best to you in the contest. Rebecca
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Rebecca for your thoughtful review and your kind contest encouragement. This form enchants me :-) Brooke
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me too I think. I'll have to give it a go one of these days.
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I look forward to reading one from you :-)
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Thanks. When I get around to it I only hope it will be a good one.
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I have a hard time believing it would be anything else :-)
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
This is a lovely form, I might have to have a go at that myself if I can summon up that muse wherever she is vacationing at. LOL Ahh I do wish for you some spring time weather to get you out of the snowy wintry writing. Although you do a great job with them. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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This is a lovely form, I might have to have a go at that myself if I can summon up that muse wherever she is vacationing at. LOL Ahh I do wish for you some spring time weather to get you out of the snowy wintry writing. Although you do a great job with them. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Jo Lynn, so far it is my one and only use of the form.
Yeah, I'm wishing for spring more than you can ever know - soon I'm going to go from pretty snow poems to homicidal maniac poems. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Jarlsbane
These winter related poems are marvelous-- I so enjoy reading them as they capture the pristine beauty and charm of snow and they make you forget the cruel and sometimes deadly nature winter storms can take on... (I was stranded in a ditch for two hours last night just three miles from home.. but way out in the country where I had to call the local road commish to send a plow to get me out- I'm ok but it wasn't fun being buried in a five foot drift..) Anywho- love the poem! -michael
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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These winter related poems are marvelous-- I so enjoy reading them as they capture the pristine beauty and charm of snow and they make you forget the cruel and sometimes deadly nature winter storms can take on... (I was stranded in a ditch for two hours last night just three miles from home.. but way out in the country where I had to call the local road commish to send a plow to get me out- I'm ok but it wasn't fun being buried in a five foot drift..) Anywho- love the poem! -michael
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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I hate all that stranded in ditch stuff which is why I stocked up on groceries Monday and have no plans to go anywhere again any time soon! Thank you, Michael - glad you're safe :-) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork it s perfect for your poem
Your poem was a light as snow with a strong messagse within it.
The poem is very deep it gave a reader something to think about.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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I love the artwork it s perfect for your poem
Your poem was a light as snow with a strong messagse within it.
The poem is very deep it gave a reader something to think about.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Miss Cookie :-) I'm so glad you found meaning in this :-) Brooke
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your welcome, have a nice day.
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke Confusing yes but you've nailed it. You poem is great and shows a winter picture. Hard you me to imagine just now. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Hi Brooke Confusing yes but you've nailed it. You poem is great and shows a winter picture. Hard you me to imagine just now. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much, Gaye - I'm glad you enjoyed my first attempt at this pretty form :-) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
another poetry style i have no clue on. florette, eh? hmmm ...
nicely done on snow. made me smile. the pic is great too. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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brooke,
another poetry style i have no clue on. florette, eh? hmmm ...
nicely done on snow. made me smile. the pic is great too. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 08-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Barbara. this is a brand new form, near as I can tell - certainly my first attempt at it :-) Brooke
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brooke,
my first sighting of this type was the day i wrote all these reviews. there were three people writing them so that's when it got my attention. i will definitely be trying it out.
love,
barbara
Comment from Xuders
This form becomes you! I like very much what you've done here--the poem flows nicely despite the difference between 8 syllables and 12, which doesn't always make for smooth rhythm.
Terrific.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2010
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This form becomes you! I like very much what you've done here--the poem flows nicely despite the difference between 8 syllables and 12, which doesn't always make for smooth rhythm.
Terrific.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Redux. It is an extremely interesting form - I'll have to write another :-) Brooke
