Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "All Prejudices Placed Aside"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke A fine tribute to your adult daughter. our grown- up children still need to know how proud of them. Your play around with the words is a delightful read. LOL Gaye
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Hi Brooke A fine tribute to your adult daughter. our grown- up children still need to know how proud of them. Your play around with the words is a delightful read. LOL Gaye
Comment Written 06-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Gaye. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I loved the words written here and I feel a mothers love is very strong within the words written.
Wonderful creative words written.
I hope all goes well for your daughter.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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I loved the words written here and I feel a mothers love is very strong within the words written.
Wonderful creative words written.
I hope all goes well for your daughter.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Annie. It is great to hear from you :-) Miranda is fine - she just had the blahs for a day :-) Brooke
Comment from unbridledspirit
What a nice poem for your daughter. I bet this brightened her day. Well written and great message that you convey. Well done. Give your daughter a hug for us all.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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What a nice poem for your daughter. I bet this brightened her day. Well written and great message that you convey. Well done. Give your daughter a hug for us all.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Thank you, unbridledspirit - You are most kind :-) Brooke
Comment from beadyredeyes
I like the adaptation of the triolet. The repeated lines propel the poem forward without being redundant.
The end rhymes are strong "confide,aside, pride" without becoming too much like a nursery rhyme.
Its a very playful and loving poem.
Nice work!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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I like the adaptation of the triolet. The repeated lines propel the poem forward without being redundant.
The end rhymes are strong "confide,aside, pride" without becoming too much like a nursery rhyme.
Its a very playful and loving poem.
Nice work!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Thank you, beadyredeyes. I'm glad the rhymes worked for you in this triolet :-) Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
Wow! "All Prejudices Placed Aside" is OUTSTANDING Brooke!!! Beautifully written and said with perfect rhythm and rhyme throughout. Bravo!!!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Wow! "All Prejudices Placed Aside" is OUTSTANDING Brooke!!! Beautifully written and said with perfect rhythm and rhyme throughout. Bravo!!!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Well, isn't it delightful to hear from you, especially when you come bearing exceptional ratings! LOL Hope you're well - I'm still suffering Stan withdrawal. It's good Jada keeps me supplied with men to drool over, but I'd dump them all for Stan!
:-) Thank you, Brooke
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Aw, thank you so much! I want to work on the sequel too. :)
Comment from Lynne
Well that must have helped your daughter's blahs. I guess I'm guilty of the same prejudice-My awesome kids ! They never cease to amaze me... My little boy had this response when told Mommy was going to rehab: "You going to weehab ! Mama, I so pwowd of you !" Won't forget that anytime soon, my little Elmer Fudd. I enjoyed this and your notes immensely ! D~
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Well that must have helped your daughter's blahs. I guess I'm guilty of the same prejudice-My awesome kids ! They never cease to amaze me... My little boy had this response when told Mommy was going to rehab: "You going to weehab ! Mama, I so pwowd of you !" Won't forget that anytime soon, my little Elmer Fudd. I enjoyed this and your notes immensely ! D~
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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thank you, Lynne, for your review and for sharing that adorable story with me. Brooke :-)
Comment from flygirl254
This is a very good poem, and a sweet dedication to your daughter. As far as what to call it, triolet or just a poem, well, I'll just call it a great piece of poetry! You may have stumbled on some new form if you look through it carefully for a new structure. Your poem does have solid iambic tetrameter. While the triolet lines are not exact copies, it does lend itself to having a rhyme scheme that keeps it interesting. The only little thing I have about the poem is that the word "prejudice" and its different forms is repeated a lot. I think it wouldn't be a sticking point, but that's just one of those words that I don't hear that often, and when I do it has negative connotations, even though I definitely understand the positive way you've used it. I love the sentiment to your adult daughter, and hope that others can as well. It's a wonderful feeling to see children who have grown into the kind of person you hoped for, or have become even more than that. Great work on your poem, my friend!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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This is a very good poem, and a sweet dedication to your daughter. As far as what to call it, triolet or just a poem, well, I'll just call it a great piece of poetry! You may have stumbled on some new form if you look through it carefully for a new structure. Your poem does have solid iambic tetrameter. While the triolet lines are not exact copies, it does lend itself to having a rhyme scheme that keeps it interesting. The only little thing I have about the poem is that the word "prejudice" and its different forms is repeated a lot. I think it wouldn't be a sticking point, but that's just one of those words that I don't hear that often, and when I do it has negative connotations, even though I definitely understand the positive way you've used it. I love the sentiment to your adult daughter, and hope that others can as well. It's a wonderful feeling to see children who have grown into the kind of person you hoped for, or have become even more than that. Great work on your poem, my friend!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Three of the prejudices are because they are in the line that gets written three times in a triolet, and when I considered if it was overkill to add the fourth time, I decided I liked the way it fits in. Then again, I rarely seem to mind repetition as much as most people do :-) thanks so much, my friend, for your attentive and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
I think this is a lovely trio-kinda-let, Brooke. ;) haha
We, as mothers, can often put our prejudices aside and think -- even if she/he weren't my son/daughter, I'd feel she/he is spectacular. :)
I love the soft, gentle feel of this poem.
I'm sure Miranda's blahs were erased from her mind after reading such a beautiful pick-me-up.
Nic
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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I think this is a lovely trio-kinda-let, Brooke. ;) haha
We, as mothers, can often put our prejudices aside and think -- even if she/he weren't my son/daughter, I'd feel she/he is spectacular. :)
I love the soft, gentle feel of this poem.
I'm sure Miranda's blahs were erased from her mind after reading such a beautiful pick-me-up.
Nic
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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trio-kinda-let - I think I like that!!! :-) Seriously, I'm rather good at doing that separating. I can tell you right here and now Miranda might possibly be worse at math than many children in the "slow" classes. And the time she danced in the chorus of L'il Abner at a summer arts consortium, well, she was the one going left every time the others all went right. LOL So when I tell her she is brilliant at the things she does brilliantly, I truly mean it!! :-D thank you, my friend. Brooke
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My pleasure!! :D
Comment from laurelp
Prejudice has taken a bad rap over the years. It is seen as wrong, evil and basically bad. Yet the prejudice mixed with the love of a mother is the most healing and wonderful feeling in the world for the child who has a loving mother. It brings a tear to my eyes as I no longer hear my mother's words of love and her prejudice for me. Thank you for the read.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Prejudice has taken a bad rap over the years. It is seen as wrong, evil and basically bad. Yet the prejudice mixed with the love of a mother is the most healing and wonderful feeling in the world for the child who has a loving mother. It brings a tear to my eyes as I no longer hear my mother's words of love and her prejudice for me. Thank you for the read.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Laurel - yes, a mom's prejudice is prejudice of the highest, most benevolent order :-) Thanks so much for this generous, gracious and perceptive review :-) Brooke
Comment from flyboy130
This is a wonderful poem you wrote. My favorite lines in the poem is
My heart swells up with pride frome you,
I pay respect to all you do.
I am glade you wrote this for your daughter. She must be very proud of you.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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This is a wonderful poem you wrote. My favorite lines in the poem is
My heart swells up with pride frome you,
I pay respect to all you do.
I am glade you wrote this for your daughter. She must be very proud of you.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, James - it's pretty great when moms and their children love each other :-) Brooke
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Your welcome.
