Letter From a Distant Battlefield
A soldier's message to a never-forgotten love.37 total reviews
Comment from foxtale
wow.
Evokes the poetry of the 'Greatest Generation'
back when people knew how to write letters.
Autobiographical perhaps, or as Stephen Crane, simply empathy for the spirit.
Either way well done.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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wow.
Evokes the poetry of the 'Greatest Generation'
back when people knew how to write letters.
Autobiographical perhaps, or as Stephen Crane, simply empathy for the spirit.
Either way well done.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for your review. You are most encouraging.
Comment from Jay Squires
Your meter and your message is near-flawless. During my military stint in Tripoli, I remember my heart's empty pit when I got a "dear John" from my highschool sweetheart. And that was during peacetime. How much more intense must be your pain.
My prayers are with you, friend. And, may you and your love reunite.
Blessings,
Jay
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Your meter and your message is near-flawless. During my military stint in Tripoli, I remember my heart's empty pit when I got a "dear John" from my highschool sweetheart. And that was during peacetime. How much more intense must be your pain.
My prayers are with you, friend. And, may you and your love reunite.
Blessings,
Jay
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for your heartfelt and sympathetic comment. I never meant to confuse anyone, but I often "play a role" when I write, attempting to go inside the head of a different person, just as an actor would. This was purely from my imagination. I am a storyteller. Thank you so much for your sensitive review.
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Really! I thought the picture was of you.
Jay
Comment from AlvinTEthington
An extremely poignant poem. We often perform acts of passion that ruin the good aspects of our lives. You illustrate that well. Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. The story behind the story of the tragedy of war is also quite effective. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem. The imagery in the last stanza is extremely sad.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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An extremely poignant poem. We often perform acts of passion that ruin the good aspects of our lives. You illustrate that well. Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. The story behind the story of the tragedy of war is also quite effective. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem. The imagery in the last stanza is extremely sad.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for your great review. I appreciate your comments and understanding words.
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You're welcome. Congratulations on your win.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Wow!
This is good.
And powerful.
I love the image, and the visual presentation.
What a story.
I like the rhymes.
I like the 2 last stanzas the best.
Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Wow!
This is good.
And powerful.
I love the image, and the visual presentation.
What a story.
I like the rhymes.
I like the 2 last stanzas the best.
Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
Kathryn
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for your comments and kind review, Kathryn. I love your name.
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You're welcome. And thank you.
Kathryn
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a poignant poem comparing the rigors of war to the rigors of love lost. It expresses how important it is for one in such a situation to carry love in his heart, even for one he may never see again. Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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This is a poignant poem comparing the rigors of war to the rigors of love lost. It expresses how important it is for one in such a situation to carry love in his heart, even for one he may never see again. Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thanks for the review and for your kind good wishes. I'm grateful and pleased that you took time to comment.
Comment from rhymer1
Your rhyme and meter are spot on and the reality of bedding someone else after a breakup lends a bit of depth to thi one. Sslainte, rhymer1
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Your rhyme and meter are spot on and the reality of bedding someone else after a breakup lends a bit of depth to thi one. Sslainte, rhymer1
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for your review. I really appreciated your comments.
Comment from Belinda
Aw... so touching and sad. You have related your innermost feelings to the one you truly love. Your last verse gives me the chills (may it never happen to anyone!):
If I never see you again,
and my flag-shrouded coffin returns,
I want you to know, if my love didn't show,
deep in my heart it still burns.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Aw... so touching and sad. You have related your innermost feelings to the one you truly love. Your last verse gives me the chills (may it never happen to anyone!):
If I never see you again,
and my flag-shrouded coffin returns,
I want you to know, if my love didn't show,
deep in my heart it still burns.
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate you reading this and taking time to comment.
