Letter From a Distant Battlefield
A soldier's message to a never-forgotten love.37 total reviews
Comment from chaswriter
blind author - A beautiful love poem you have written. My dad was career military and I can just imagine him thinking similar thoughts during Vietnam. Well written with good flow and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
Charlie
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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blind author - A beautiful love poem you have written. My dad was career military and I can just imagine him thinking similar thoughts during Vietnam. Well written with good flow and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
Charlie
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much Charlie. I'm so happy to have your comments on the poem.
Comment from Curt Mongold
Simply beautiful writing on a most heart wrenching topic that too many of our citizens have become a part of. Every word is touched with the pain and fear of war's devastating effects on our culture. Fantastic inner rhymes drive the message home.
My hat is off to you.
Curt
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Simply beautiful writing on a most heart wrenching topic that too many of our citizens have become a part of. Every word is touched with the pain and fear of war's devastating effects on our culture. Fantastic inner rhymes drive the message home.
My hat is off to you.
Curt
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your observant review of my poem. I'm so glad you liked this.
Comment from Thesis
This message is very heart wrenching. You can hear the longing, the hunger to be back with the one he loves. Yet, he is fearful of not returning.
What a loss for both of them if he doesn't return. - Thesis
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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This message is very heart wrenching. You can hear the longing, the hunger to be back with the one he loves. Yet, he is fearful of not returning.
What a loss for both of them if he doesn't return. - Thesis
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for your sensitive reading of this poem. I'm glad it had meaning for you.
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Thank you so much for your sensitive reading of this poem. I'm glad it had meaning for you.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Oh MissMerri, this poem is heart wrenching. It comes across as a real love letter from a soldier. Your descriptions of missing the one he left behind and the honesty of a mistake made is so very realistic.
"Though there's blood on my shirt, nothing equals the hurt
of knowing your love for me's gone."
This seems like a winner to me.
Linda
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Oh MissMerri, this poem is heart wrenching. It comes across as a real love letter from a soldier. Your descriptions of missing the one he left behind and the honesty of a mistake made is so very realistic.
"Though there's blood on my shirt, nothing equals the hurt
of knowing your love for me's gone."
This seems like a winner to me.
Linda
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much, Linda, for your kind review. I'm glad if it managed to seem realistic. I tried.
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Thank you so much, Linda, for your kind review. I'm glad if it managed to seem realistic. I tried.
Comment from hemase
Don't normally read poetry on here but I have a strong affiliation with the military and have people close tome over there their. This is a very nice piece which captures the thoughts of a serviceperson very well. We don't realise how hard it is for those heroes who are out there so we dont have to be. Good work.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Don't normally read poetry on here but I have a strong affiliation with the military and have people close tome over there their. This is a very nice piece which captures the thoughts of a serviceperson very well. We don't realise how hard it is for those heroes who are out there so we dont have to be. Good work.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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I too have great love and respect for our military, and am incredibly proud of what they do all over the world. Thank you for reading and sharing your comments.
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I too have great love and respect for our military, and am incredibly proud of what they do all over the world. Thank you for reading and sharing your comments.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a good piece of verse,
albeit so sorrowful -
the words, rhythm and rhyme
flowing smoothly throughout.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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This is a good piece of verse,
albeit so sorrowful -
the words, rhythm and rhyme
flowing smoothly throughout.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much Margaret, for your excellent review and kind words.
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Thank you so much Margaret, for your excellent review and kind words.
Comment from hotstuff
OMG, this is beautiful, so romantic and yet so sad. I was almost weeping as I read your poem. I found myself wishing for the letter/poem to reach the intended person it was written for. Very moving.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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OMG, this is beautiful, so romantic and yet so sad. I was almost weeping as I read your poem. I found myself wishing for the letter/poem to reach the intended person it was written for. Very moving.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Thank you for this truly sympathetic and kind review. Thank you also, for the lovely stars. You are generous.
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Thank you for this truly sympathetic and kind review. Thank you also, for the lovely stars. You are generous.
Comment from Soulester
This is a deeply moving poem, and I'm sure it reflects the feelings of many a soldier. It reads smoothly, with good cadence and rhyme. The message comes through loud and clear. I think this will be a strong contender in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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This is a deeply moving poem, and I'm sure it reflects the feelings of many a soldier. It reads smoothly, with good cadence and rhyme. The message comes through loud and clear. I think this will be a strong contender in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review. I am pleased that you liked it.
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review. I am pleased that you liked it.
Comment from Begin Again
Wow and double wow!
Excellent rhyme and flow but more importantly the message was simply heartbreaking and powerfully delivered, Extremely well done and I wish you the best in the contest..A great contender!
Carol
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Wow and double wow!
Excellent rhyme and flow but more importantly the message was simply heartbreaking and powerfully delivered, Extremely well done and I wish you the best in the contest..A great contender!
Carol
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Thank you Carol. Those are most encouraging words, and I'm very grateful for your enthusiastic response.
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Thank you Carol. Those are most encouraging words, and I'm very grateful for your enthusiastic response.
Comment from words
Very well done!
In moments of life and death, crisis ... all that is false drops away.
You have expressed that so well here.
I especially liked:The bullets are flying around me.
I've been chasing Al-Qaeda since dawn.
Though there's blood on my shirt, nothing equals the hurt
of knowing your love for me's gone.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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Very well done!
In moments of life and death, crisis ... all that is false drops away.
You have expressed that so well here.
I especially liked:The bullets are flying around me.
I've been chasing Al-Qaeda since dawn.
Though there's blood on my shirt, nothing equals the hurt
of knowing your love for me's gone.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2010
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I truly appreciate your warm response to this poem. Thank you for reading and for your comments.
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I truly appreciate your warm response to this poem. Thank you for reading and for your comments.
