Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "I'd Sail the Seven Seas"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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This one sounds like a hallmark card Brooke LOL I hope I don't offent you by that remark but thats what I thought when I read it. but its cool though mos def
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This one sounds like a hallmark card Brooke LOL I hope I don't offent you by that remark but thats what I thought when I read it. but its cool though mos def
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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It's a love poem - if Hallmark would pay me a couple hundred bucks to put it on a Valentine, I would not mind seeing it on a card at all!!! Thanks, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from laurelp
A lovely and romantic piece. If only there were keys to the hearts of people. I would unlock them all and give them the fresh air they deserve.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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A lovely and romantic piece. If only there were keys to the hearts of people. I would unlock them all and give them the fresh air they deserve.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Laurel, for your gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from flyboy130
The picture went great with the poem. I love the picture I am glade you have chosen the picture. Nothing was wrong. My favorite line in the poem is
I'd sail the seven seas to find the key you've hiden in your heart.
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The picture went great with the poem. I love the picture I am glade you have chosen the picture. Nothing was wrong. My favorite line in the poem is
I'd sail the seven seas to find the key you've hiden in your heart.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this picture and poem, James :-) Brooke
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Thank you.
Comment from flygirl254
As a kid of the '80s, I have to say this poem is "way cool". I really like the format you chose; I think the triolet is an interesting form anyway. I also like the meaning of your poem. It's very interesting that the person is looking for the key to another's heart, and cares that much about them that they would do anything to find it. Your word choices are beautiful. I especially like the repeated lines you've chosen. Excellent work!
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As a kid of the '80s, I have to say this poem is "way cool". I really like the format you chose; I think the triolet is an interesting form anyway. I also like the meaning of your poem. It's very interesting that the person is looking for the key to another's heart, and cares that much about them that they would do anything to find it. Your word choices are beautiful. I especially like the repeated lines you've chosen. Excellent work!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, my friend - "Way Cool" is one pretty awesome review :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Woo hoo another romantic poem from Brooke! They are few but you sure make them count big time, and this one is just wonderful. I enjoyed this triolet.
Indy :>)
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Woo hoo another romantic poem from Brooke! They are few but you sure make them count big time, and this one is just wonderful. I enjoyed this triolet.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thanks, Karyn. I'm smiling :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Lovely.
The repetitive lines have such a lilting feel, like the waves of the seven seas.
I love the line - no storms could keep my ship confined. What a beautiful metaphorical message there!
Great triolet.
Nic
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Lovely.
The repetitive lines have such a lilting feel, like the waves of the seven seas.
I love the line - no storms could keep my ship confined. What a beautiful metaphorical message there!
Great triolet.
Nic
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Nic - glad you like the lilt and the metaphor :-) Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
When I read these poems, I imagine you in a heated romance. :) I hope that's OK. LOL! Are you still interested in selling your poems? I have come across a few leads lately and wonder if I should pass them along...
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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When I read these poems, I imagine you in a heated romance. :) I hope that's OK. LOL! Are you still interested in selling your poems? I have come across a few leads lately and wonder if I should pass them along...
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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You may imagine all you like - if you manage to conjure up a real guy, just let me know and I'll accept shipment! LOL Yes, please pass along the leads - I would love to hear. Thank you!! Brooke :-)
Comment from sara-beth
Ooh, that is so romantic and lovely....sailing seas in general makes me get all mushy feeling, I don't know why. But sailing the seven seas to find the key to someones heart is even better. Great job! :)
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Ooh, that is so romantic and lovely....sailing seas in general makes me get all mushy feeling, I don't know why. But sailing the seven seas to find the key to someones heart is even better. Great job! :)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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I agree - sailing is purely romantic by its very nature :-) Thank you, Sara-beth. Brooke :-)
Comment from kintesiegel
I'm having trouble writing aesthetically or about beauty something you do so well. The weakest phrase int his lovely poem is "if you your secrets should impart" you could change it to something with port perhaps or resort but don't that work with heart - barely.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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I'm having trouble writing aesthetically or about beauty something you do so well. The weakest phrase int his lovely poem is "if you your secrets should impart" you could change it to something with port perhaps or resort but don't that work with heart - barely.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your thoughtful review and input :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
No hurricane could bar my way
if at quest's end I knew I'd find
the perfect soul to share my mind,
a heart to share each wondrous day.
That hurricane would be the winds
that hurried me unto your side
and all the obstacles denied
so we were one; perfection find
a way into the person we become.
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No hurricane could bar my way
if at quest's end I knew I'd find
the perfect soul to share my mind,
a heart to share each wondrous day.
That hurricane would be the winds
that hurried me unto your side
and all the obstacles denied
so we were one; perfection find
a way into the person we become.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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I love your poetic responses - they always make my day - thanks, Mike :-) Brooke
