The Legend of Scratchy Ass McGee
A Poem/Song62 total reviews
Comment from mbroyles2
Very Funny.
I enjoyed this poem.
The rhyming structure was great.
The imagery, though a little gross, was great.
Thanks for posting your work.
Michael
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Very Funny.
I enjoyed this poem.
The rhyming structure was great.
The imagery, though a little gross, was great.
Thanks for posting your work.
Michael
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thanks Michael!
Always glad to hear from you my friend,
Curt
Comment from melyuki
Hey Curt, this is just so funny ,I laughed my silly head near off my neck. You are one crazy arsed fella... and thats just talking off the cuff, not from the butt.
Back to seriousness, Love your poem/ song/ lyric. I can't wait to hear it recorded to music.. I think you should dedicate it to your Dad... as a reminder of days gone by.
I think there wouldn't be a soul in the world who hasn't scratched or seen someone else scratch their butt, but hey, this character in your poem is way over the top. offering others to take a wiff.. yuck.. I am still laughing, but then, smutty humour always did tickle my fancy. great writing , light hearted, funny, and extremely clever... take care, get the music happening and re edit... can hardly wait. could be the next top no. 1 on the charts.. smiling still, hugs from Melx
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Hey Curt, this is just so funny ,I laughed my silly head near off my neck. You are one crazy arsed fella... and thats just talking off the cuff, not from the butt.
Back to seriousness, Love your poem/ song/ lyric. I can't wait to hear it recorded to music.. I think you should dedicate it to your Dad... as a reminder of days gone by.
I think there wouldn't be a soul in the world who hasn't scratched or seen someone else scratch their butt, but hey, this character in your poem is way over the top. offering others to take a wiff.. yuck.. I am still laughing, but then, smutty humour always did tickle my fancy. great writing , light hearted, funny, and extremely clever... take care, get the music happening and re edit... can hardly wait. could be the next top no. 1 on the charts.. smiling still, hugs from Melx
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Your comments have made my day!
I'm glad this little ditty made you smile Melx! I thought some humor would contrast well against the ever-growing "love" genre so common this season.
I do have a very little bit of musical ability, I am headed to my friend's later today to work out the chords and a refrain if we can. It should be a hoot!
Thanks again for the rating, but esp. for the thoughts.
Sincerely,
Curt
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Have fun with it, I am sure your friends will enjoy a good laugh with you.. don't forget to record it will you... see you next time round, smiles from Melx
Comment from IndianaIrish
HA!! This is wonderfully gross and funny at the same time, Curt. I can really hear this as a song with its catchy rhymes and masterful flow. Sounds like your dad has his comeback ready and waiting for one of you kids to ask him that, huh? Very fun prose poem.(there's a missing quotation mark after Scratchy's "I got gold inside my ass!) I'd love to hear this as a song.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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HA!! This is wonderfully gross and funny at the same time, Curt. I can really hear this as a song with its catchy rhymes and masterful flow. Sounds like your dad has his comeback ready and waiting for one of you kids to ask him that, huh? Very fun prose poem.(there's a missing quotation mark after Scratchy's "I got gold inside my ass!) I'd love to hear this as a song.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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I thought you might like this one Indy! Where is Stockwell Pass, anyway? (lol)
Thanks for stopping in my dear friend.
Curt
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A little west of Indiana I'm thinkin'! LOL
Comment from warbler
This poem is so funny that I was laughing out loud while I was reading it. It told a nice story and the rhyming made for a smooth read. The photo was perfect for the presentation as is the gold background. I loved this !
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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This poem is so funny that I was laughing out loud while I was reading it. It told a nice story and the rhyming made for a smooth read. The photo was perfect for the presentation as is the gold background. I loved this !
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thanks!
I wanted to give out a chuckle amidst all the "love" flowing around!
I do appreciate your stopping in to visit and leave your thoughts,
Curt
Comment from sierra scribbler
This is awesome! What great rhythm, and rhyming. The whole way through the poem you hold the reader. The story is hilarious, and each word fits perfect. Did you mean to write Off ring as slang, or offering?
Otherwise, this was great.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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This is awesome! What great rhythm, and rhyming. The whole way through the poem you hold the reader. The story is hilarious, and each word fits perfect. Did you mean to write Off ring as slang, or offering?
Otherwise, this was great.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thank you my friend!
I am honored by your rating and comments!
I did mean to write that as "off'ring" for the pronounciation of offering, just for the cadnce while it is sung.
Thanks again!
Curt
Comment from anabellapongasi
Hahaha. I really enjoyed this! This is so funny. I'm sure I will always remember this poem and you when I see someone scratching... hahaha...gold in the ...This is very well written, I love the rhythm and rhymes and of course the great humor of this story/song/poem. Great job.
Anabella
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Hahaha. I really enjoyed this! This is so funny. I'm sure I will always remember this poem and you when I see someone scratching... hahaha...gold in the ...This is very well written, I love the rhythm and rhymes and of course the great humor of this story/song/poem. Great job.
Anabella
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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My Daddy would see one of us kids scratching, and he would always ask us that!
Thaks for your thoughts my frieind,
Curt
Comment from tomcdonnell
Very enjoyable story with good flow. Both the story and verses are well structured. I agree that it could work well as a song.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Very enjoyable story with good flow. Both the story and verses are well structured. I agree that it could work well as a song.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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I already have the chords for it.
Thanks!
Curt
Comment from Kaiyah
After reading this piece i am reminded of how diverse rhyming schemes are. Though there is no audio to this as yet, as i read i can imagine various tunes which may accompany it well.
being written in the context of the first person does add a bit of sincerity to its humour as it is also very descriptive in nature. and i have found myself laughing out loud a few times well as "Scratchy Ass McGee" has both obvious and underlying stories and meanings.
consistency in voice and form has made this a very enjoyable read and i do look forward to more of your comedic poetry as i often find that not many can mix humour with rhyme.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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After reading this piece i am reminded of how diverse rhyming schemes are. Though there is no audio to this as yet, as i read i can imagine various tunes which may accompany it well.
being written in the context of the first person does add a bit of sincerity to its humour as it is also very descriptive in nature. and i have found myself laughing out loud a few times well as "Scratchy Ass McGee" has both obvious and underlying stories and meanings.
consistency in voice and form has made this a very enjoyable read and i do look forward to more of your comedic poetry as i often find that not many can mix humour with rhyme.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Reply via PM---Thanks! :-}
Curt
Comment from missy98writer
Curt Mongold,
Witty poem that had a lyrical resonance with it. Scratchy-ass McGee is a nasty fella smelling his hands after scratching his ass. The last stanza sums up your funny poem:
So when you hear about someone
who scratches in their ass for fun
recall this tale that you've been told
and ask them if they've found their gold!
Your rhyme and meter are excellent.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Curt Mongold,
Witty poem that had a lyrical resonance with it. Scratchy-ass McGee is a nasty fella smelling his hands after scratching his ass. The last stanza sums up your funny poem:
So when you hear about someone
who scratches in their ass for fun
recall this tale that you've been told
and ask them if they've found their gold!
Your rhyme and meter are excellent.
Melissa.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thanks Melisa, it was some fun in between the serious. Something to do in between, ya know?
Thanks again my friend.
Curt
Comment from Arkine
~LOL~ I will certainly have to remember that last bit and ask them if they've found their gold. I'd feel sorry for the guy but examining whatever he pulled out? Yeah, that's pretty darn gross. Nice job!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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~LOL~ I will certainly have to remember that last bit and ask them if they've found their gold. I'd feel sorry for the guy but examining whatever he pulled out? Yeah, that's pretty darn gross. Nice job!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thaks!
I think this story is where that expression comes from! (lol)
Thaks again,
Curt
