The Legend of Scratchy Ass McGee
A Poem/Song62 total reviews
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Curt,
This is great!
So funny!
I like the title.
And the photo and visual presentation.
Great rhymes.
I love every word.
Great job.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Curt,
This is great!
So funny!
I like the title.
And the photo and visual presentation.
Great rhymes.
I love every word.
Great job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thanks Kathryn!
I do love to write a funny once in awhile!
Curt
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Curt,
You're very good at writing funny pieces.
Kathryn
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Shucks mam, 'tweren't nuthin!:-}
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:)
Comment from Authoroni
Curt Mongold: Just read your Poem/Song, `The Legend of Scratchy Ass McGee
Years back I had a friend who, on fishing trips and around the fire, would quote similar verse from memory. Needless to say, those memories are bigger than any fish we caught.
Thank you much, I enjoyed. Good job, well done!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Curt Mongold: Just read your Poem/Song, `The Legend of Scratchy Ass McGee
Years back I had a friend who, on fishing trips and around the fire, would quote similar verse from memory. Needless to say, those memories are bigger than any fish we caught.
Thank you much, I enjoyed. Good job, well done!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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You are most welcome my friend, and thank you for your time and comments!
Curt
Comment from Judian James
OOOOHHH!! "He'd hold it to his nose and sniff
off'ring both of us a whiff
then he'd go off, quite content
playing with his excrement" Hilarious, hilarious!!! And then to top it off with your author's notes, I loved it!
BUTT ... oooohhh!!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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OOOOHHH!! "He'd hold it to his nose and sniff
off'ring both of us a whiff
then he'd go off, quite content
playing with his excrement" Hilarious, hilarious!!! And then to top it off with your author's notes, I loved it!
BUTT ... oooohhh!!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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LOL!
Thanks Jude, I know it was a bit on the gross side, but I didn't know what else to put in there to let the reader know why Cass wanted to leave!
You thoughts are well appreciated my dear poet friend,
Curt
Comment from shy1250
ROTFLMAO!! My first married name was McGEe to boot! This needs to be sent to every rapper in the industry; they don't actually dig, but why must they check 15 times in every video to make sure their male equipment is still there? Has it been in the habit of wandering? One song they performed without checking and their goods were in Florida while the owner was still in NYC? My own private rant. I've been getting a lot of 4's and yeah, they do burn when you've poured your heart out. Different folks have different degrees of talent, and your best may be far better than mine. Just something to ponder--no suggestions or corrections, witty with perfect flow and I do think you should get this recorded--I'll bet you'd have a top 10, although some stations would bleep the a--. later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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ROTFLMAO!! My first married name was McGEe to boot! This needs to be sent to every rapper in the industry; they don't actually dig, but why must they check 15 times in every video to make sure their male equipment is still there? Has it been in the habit of wandering? One song they performed without checking and their goods were in Florida while the owner was still in NYC? My own private rant. I've been getting a lot of 4's and yeah, they do burn when you've poured your heart out. Different folks have different degrees of talent, and your best may be far better than mine. Just something to ponder--no suggestions or corrections, witty with perfect flow and I do think you should get this recorded--I'll bet you'd have a top 10, although some stations would bleep the a--. later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thank you shy!
I am honored by your comments.
Tell me though, would you rather have a four and a suggestion, or a five and false praise?
Oscar Wilde said, "All bad poetry springs from genuine emotion."
I've written stinkers, and they were heartfelt, genuine outpourings of emotion, but they still stank.
A poet should never, ever think about themselves when writing, but how the reader will accept what they have penned.
If I give a four, it only means the work needs a little "something" to make it an excellent work. I take the grading system seriously.
Anyway, my rant is done!
Thank you again for your comments! We all have the ability I think, to create wonderful works of poetic art.
If not, you get a three. ( just kidding!)
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from chaswriter
Curt Mongold - Funny story and enjoyed your author's notes. I get an imaginary itch on my buttcheek at times and now I know what to say when my wife asks. The poem is hilarious with the trick played on old Scratchy. And its told with imaginative verve, smooth cadence and fun rhyme. Good job.
Charlie
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Curt Mongold - Funny story and enjoyed your author's notes. I get an imaginary itch on my buttcheek at times and now I know what to say when my wife asks. The poem is hilarious with the trick played on old Scratchy. And its told with imaginative verve, smooth cadence and fun rhyme. Good job.
Charlie
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thank you Charlie,
I like to write humorous anectdotes and stories in poetry from time to time just to lighten the mood.
I'm glad you enjoyed this one my friend,
Curt
Comment from jayhawk67
Quite a memorable character you have created, my friend. Not necessarily heroic, but he certainly sticks with the reader. Clever plan by you can Cass.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Quite a memorable character you have created, my friend. Not necessarily heroic, but he certainly sticks with the reader. Clever plan by you can Cass.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thanks!
Curt
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning Curt! This is one funny poem and I found myself laughing, and indeed singing it as I read. If you do get it down to music, I think you'll be ready for Nashville and I'll certainly want to hear it. The poem flowed beautifully, the rhymes were strong and enhanced the read.
I do have one suggestion to offer for your consideration. In your last stanza, you have a couple of singular/plural disconnects:
So when you hear about someone [singular]
who scratches in their [plural] ass[singular] for fun
recall this tale that you've been told
and ask them [plural] if they've [plural] found their [plural] gold!
I would suggest converting the plurals to singulars as I think it might be easier to fix. For example:
So when you hear about someone
who scratches in their [his] ass for fun
recall this tale that you've been told
and ask them [him] if they've [he's] found their [his] gold!
A great read on this cold, snow burdened day! -ray
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Good Morning Curt! This is one funny poem and I found myself laughing, and indeed singing it as I read. If you do get it down to music, I think you'll be ready for Nashville and I'll certainly want to hear it. The poem flowed beautifully, the rhymes were strong and enhanced the read.
I do have one suggestion to offer for your consideration. In your last stanza, you have a couple of singular/plural disconnects:
So when you hear about someone [singular]
who scratches in their [plural] ass[singular] for fun
recall this tale that you've been told
and ask them [plural] if they've [plural] found their [plural] gold!
I would suggest converting the plurals to singulars as I think it might be easier to fix. For example:
So when you hear about someone
who scratches in their [his] ass for fun
recall this tale that you've been told
and ask them [him] if they've [he's] found their [his] gold!
A great read on this cold, snow burdened day! -ray
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thanks Ray!
I will definitely look at that. I didn't know it was all that improper as the vernacular throughout is tainted by colloquial speech, but I will look at it and if the flow and sound of it match, I will change it.
Thanks for the suggestions and thoughts my friend!
Curt
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Hi Curt. Thanks for your reply. The use of the colloquial stands on its own as that and it works perfectly in the poem. The singular/plural conflicts are just basic. In our gender sensitive society, I'm finding more and more that people are using their as an avoidance of using "him" or "her". Whatever you decide, I did thoroughly enjoy your poem and wish I could write humorous poems as you've done here. You've quite the talent. -ray
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
After I got beyond the 'yuk' factor I actually enjoyed the poem and the moral behind it.
Great way of getting rid of a troublesome companion - for some reason it reminded me of a troublesome English Prince who died of a hot poker....etc.
Great poem, with good rhythm and rhyme.
Juliette
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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After I got beyond the 'yuk' factor I actually enjoyed the poem and the moral behind it.
Great way of getting rid of a troublesome companion - for some reason it reminded me of a troublesome English Prince who died of a hot poker....etc.
Great poem, with good rhythm and rhyme.
Juliette
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thank you Juliette!
I am so glad you enjoyed the reading! Personally, given the choice between the Prince and the miner, I'll take the miner!
Thanks again,
Curt
Comment from sgalletti
This is hilarious Curt! Very creative, imaginative, and just pure fun--which is what I think this site should be all about! You made me laugh out loud with yur story of Scratchy and his golden plug. Nice meter and rhyme throughout. Very lyrical piece in the old Western way. Sue
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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This is hilarious Curt! Very creative, imaginative, and just pure fun--which is what I think this site should be all about! You made me laugh out loud with yur story of Scratchy and his golden plug. Nice meter and rhyme throughout. Very lyrical piece in the old Western way. Sue
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Thanks Sue,
I thought that some humor would be nice for a change!
Thanks for agreeing and thanks for your thoughts,
Curt
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Curt,
I found this very funny indeed. I think we all no people who are "afflicted" with this problem, but I think this is probably the most original "cure" I've ever heard of. Well done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Hi Curt,
I found this very funny indeed. I think we all no people who are "afflicted" with this problem, but I think this is probably the most original "cure" I've ever heard of. Well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010
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Whatever it takes, right?
Thanks for reading and for your comments my friend,
Curt
