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Comment from nora arjuna
Hi deb, I can really relate to what you mean here. I miss all those too. Nowadays, even when I return to my mother's, my birthplace, the situation is no longer the same. I hardly hear a rooster crow. We used to rear them and chickens, now no more. The little ones now stare in wonder at any farm animals they come across. Nice, nostalgic read.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Hi deb, I can really relate to what you mean here. I miss all those too. Nowadays, even when I return to my mother's, my birthplace, the situation is no longer the same. I hardly hear a rooster crow. We used to rear them and chickens, now no more. The little ones now stare in wonder at any farm animals they come across. Nice, nostalgic read.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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It's funny how those things slip away and we don't notice until something brings it to our attention, isn't it. Sad that the little ones will grow up without all that cool stuff. Thanks for reading, and blessings, Deb
Comment from mbroyles2
I enjoyed this poem.
I like the nostalgic look at the beautiful countryside.
I found it easy to imagine the rooster crowing, the smell of the hay, and the beauty of a midnight sky.
Thanks for sharing your work.
Michael
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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I enjoyed this poem.
I like the nostalgic look at the beautiful countryside.
I found it easy to imagine the rooster crowing, the smell of the hay, and the beauty of a midnight sky.
Thanks for sharing your work.
Michael
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Thank you Michael. Glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Deb
Comment from words
What a beautiful write!!!
Love your opening stanza:
I miss the sound of rooster crow
as darkness flees and soft winds blow.
I miss the sound of rooster crow
First thing in the morning.
You expressed you love for the wonders of nature so well.
Looking forward to seeing you post some on the same theme about the nature in your new environs.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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What a beautiful write!!!
Love your opening stanza:
I miss the sound of rooster crow
as darkness flees and soft winds blow.
I miss the sound of rooster crow
First thing in the morning.
You expressed you love for the wonders of nature so well.
Looking forward to seeing you post some on the same theme about the nature in your new environs.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Thank you so much. Your review is very kind. Blessings, Deb
Comment from maggieJo
I know what you mean, Deb. I used to go to my older sister and brother -in-law's farm starting when I was around eight and on into my early teens. I loved the country - the things - you mention in this beautiful poem. This should live on for eternity - somewhere. Hope it makes it into the "big time". It sure should.
Love to you and yours,
Marge.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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I know what you mean, Deb. I used to go to my older sister and brother -in-law's farm starting when I was around eight and on into my early teens. I loved the country - the things - you mention in this beautiful poem. This should live on for eternity - somewhere. Hope it makes it into the "big time". It sure should.
Love to you and yours,
Marge.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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I was wondering this morning where you were, girl! Even asked a couple of folks, but they didn't know either. Been hiding out from the feds? Dating a movie star? :) Or maybe, dating a fed and hiding out from a movie star! Glad to see uou again. Thanks so much for your amazing review. Talk soon, Deb
Comment from adewpearl
Deb, I love the structure of this poem - the way you use the repeating line and the parallel way you reflect on three different times of day - what a wonderfully nostalgic look at your memories of childhood home - this is just beautiful. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Deb, I love the structure of this poem - the way you use the repeating line and the parallel way you reflect on three different times of day - what a wonderfully nostalgic look at your memories of childhood home - this is just beautiful. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Thanks so much Brooke. Coming from you, the review means a lot more. Blessings, Deb
Comment from rama devi
Lovely and musical in flow and cadence. i enjoyed the simple imagery and gentle sense of country-side in the imagery employed here. In this one it works fine using minimal end-line punctuaiton. Good job and no nits. this sounds almost like a song~ So lyrical.
Nicely presented too.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Lovely and musical in flow and cadence. i enjoyed the simple imagery and gentle sense of country-side in the imagery employed here. In this one it works fine using minimal end-line punctuaiton. Good job and no nits. this sounds almost like a song~ So lyrical.
Nicely presented too.
Love, rd
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Thanks Rama. Appreciate your kind review.
Saw your name in the winner bracket a bit back and meant to PM congratz, but was attending to sick daddy-in-law and am not sure I did. Either way, CONGRATZ!
Deb
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Aw, thanks Deb. So sweet of you. So sorry your Daddy-in-law being sick---hopefully better now? Sending prayers---Love, rd
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Well, he's better in the bigger sense of better. He passed away Jan. 10, at age 83. He was a WWll navy man, had 4 ships shot out from under him and cmae home to make a wonderful life. He had one son, adopted 4 other children, then married my mother-in-law after both of their spouses died. My momma-in-law also has 4 adopted children. They were happy for 20 years together. About 1-1/2 years ago Weldon was helping a friend repair a roof on a shed (what 81 year old goes up on a shed?) and stepped through a bad spot in the plywood. It tore his knee up, so he decided to have it repaired. The anesthesia activated some lung thing from the war (crap he breathed in the ship) and he never recovered. He was working full time up until then, managing a federal building, active in his church youth group (yes, rd, as a leader!) and still working at a boy's home nearby. I feel so very blessed to have been a part of his clan, to have him as my domino-game partner and to have been his daughter. and I'm SO glad he's not having to lug that stupid oxygen tank around any more! I can just imagine him in Heaven, running around looking for something to fix, or someone to take care of. Can't be too sad, knowing that, yes, he is healed now. And I'm rambling ... :) Deb
Comment from patmedium
This is beautiful. You have the ability to paint excellent images with your words. You also imbue your words with deep emotion. Best wishes, Pat.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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This is beautiful. You have the ability to paint excellent images with your words. You also imbue your words with deep emotion. Best wishes, Pat.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Thank you Pat. Your words are so kind. Blessings, Deb
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It was a joy to read, Mama. Goodnight, it's tomorrow now in England. Pat.
Comment from Kingsland
you have some very colorful language in this well written piece of poetic vogue. I enjoyed the theme and the way you moved the imagery in a very richly woven poetic voice. This was just a delightful piece of poetic art to have read and written a review for... John
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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you have some very colorful language in this well written piece of poetic vogue. I enjoyed the theme and the way you moved the imagery in a very richly woven poetic voice. This was just a delightful piece of poetic art to have read and written a review for... John
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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John, thank you so much for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Deb
Comment from missy98writer
MamaDeb,
Your poem "Memories Long Ago" is an excellent poem. Great photo you've used. Your rhyme and descriptive scheme are well executed. I like your repeating lines. The last stanza I liked the best:
'I miss the sight of skies ablaze
when darkness comes and all reclaims.
I miss the sight of skies ablaze
in the coolness of the midnight.'
I could smell the hay as I read your excellent poem.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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MamaDeb,
Your poem "Memories Long Ago" is an excellent poem. Great photo you've used. Your rhyme and descriptive scheme are well executed. I like your repeating lines. The last stanza I liked the best:
'I miss the sight of skies ablaze
when darkness comes and all reclaims.
I miss the sight of skies ablaze
in the coolness of the midnight.'
I could smell the hay as I read your excellent poem.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Hi, Melissa. It seems like so long since I've written here, and I miss your kindness. Been writing for hire, and doing other people's bidding. It was fun to write for ME again! Glad you enjoyed. H
How did that romance book contest end? Have they announced a winner, or do you know?
Blessings, Deb
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I don't recall who won. It was a risque one that won. Not my pick. The ones I liked didn't win.
Melissa.
Comment from Sasha
Although born and raised in Seattle, I grew up in the suburbs when everyone had chickens, small gardens and I remember waking every morning to the wonderful sound of all the roosters in the morning crowing. I hadn't thought about that in a long time. Your poem is marvelous and triggered a terrific and pleasant memory for me. Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Although born and raised in Seattle, I grew up in the suburbs when everyone had chickens, small gardens and I remember waking every morning to the wonderful sound of all the roosters in the morning crowing. I hadn't thought about that in a long time. Your poem is marvelous and triggered a terrific and pleasant memory for me. Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Oh, now that is the perfect review! I'm glad not only that you enjoyed, but that it evoked memories of your own. I hadn't thought about those silly roosters in a while, either, but sure do miss them now that I'm remembering! Blessings (and congratz on all your recent winning work!), Deb
