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7 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Well, this sure was a fun chapter, Mike. You and Mary Ann were a hoot together....an eighth-grade comedy tag team. The sex education class is very funny.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Well, this sure was a fun chapter, Mike. You and Mary Ann were a hoot together....an eighth-grade comedy tag team. The sex education class is very funny.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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We thought so, but not the day after. LOL We really got off at being funny. I am holding off on the review relp to, "The Summer of Unrequited Prayer until I have time to work at the corrections. I thank you for that one as well. With love, Mike
Comment from HalfHoff
Even though you felt it necessary to explain your stand on "eye candy" in your author's comments, I guess I already knew that and hope others take it as a compliment as well. Great story. Lea Ann
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Even though you felt it necessary to explain your stand on "eye candy" in your author's comments, I guess I already knew that and hope others take it as a compliment as well. Great story. Lea Ann
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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I made the comment, because I just thought of that. Around here, very often women don't view being looked at very often. At least that is my experience, in other parts of the US a nice stare and hello, is considered as a compliment and generally returned. It definitely makes for a more pleasant day. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from chaswriter
Mike - Another fun chapter. That Mary Ann must have been something else. And the sex education had me ROTFLMAO. Lots of fun here. Keep 'em coming.
Here are some suggestions:
Mr. Peppersach(, )who had our homeroom and taught us United States History(, )and the other was Mr. Correrie, who taught music and for the first time, had a music class that was enjoyable.
The (nicest) thing about Mary Ann was we quickly discovered that we shared the same humor and sense of life.
That was just it(--)we loved chatting, flirting, sharing a sense of humor and observations as well.
The then bar chimes for us, "Tinkerbells." - ???
In science it was sex education time(, )and to make us comfortable with watching the movie, we were permitted to sit with those that we would be more comfortable being with. I met Mary Ann's eyes( )right off the bat(, )and she patted the chair beside her.
Ah, if (you're) still a virgin, I would like to make love to you.
My best friend had his girl orgasm on him(, )and he had to be rushed to the hospital.
You two will be in trouble if I see you two( )so much as look at each other in my class."
The( )"Immigrant Song(") quickly became the theme to express the relationship with Jean(--)now that loveable girl( )with baggy elbows and a wonderful spirit.
Charlie
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Mike - Another fun chapter. That Mary Ann must have been something else. And the sex education had me ROTFLMAO. Lots of fun here. Keep 'em coming.
Here are some suggestions:
Mr. Peppersach(, )who had our homeroom and taught us United States History(, )and the other was Mr. Correrie, who taught music and for the first time, had a music class that was enjoyable.
The (nicest) thing about Mary Ann was we quickly discovered that we shared the same humor and sense of life.
That was just it(--)we loved chatting, flirting, sharing a sense of humor and observations as well.
The then bar chimes for us, "Tinkerbells." - ???
In science it was sex education time(, )and to make us comfortable with watching the movie, we were permitted to sit with those that we would be more comfortable being with. I met Mary Ann's eyes( )right off the bat(, )and she patted the chair beside her.
Ah, if (you're) still a virgin, I would like to make love to you.
My best friend had his girl orgasm on him(, )and he had to be rushed to the hospital.
You two will be in trouble if I see you two( )so much as look at each other in my class."
The( )"Immigrant Song(") quickly became the theme to express the relationship with Jean(--)now that loveable girl( )with baggy elbows and a wonderful spirit.
Charlie
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank you very much for reviewing this and offering corrections, they have been made and I fixed up the tinkerbell sentence. I thank you for the review and the compliments. Mike
Comment from Thomas Raine
Hey Mike, this was a great read. I especially liked the Grease bit, brought a smile to my face.
"He grabbed the microphones from our hands and told us not to sing together anymore." That made me chuckle. But the sex ed part, I was like, "Woah."
Thanks for sharing.
- TR
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Hey Mike, this was a great read. I especially liked the Grease bit, brought a smile to my face.
"He grabbed the microphones from our hands and told us not to sing together anymore." That made me chuckle. But the sex ed part, I was like, "Woah."
Thanks for sharing.
- TR
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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We were lucky to get away with little punishment. I thank you for reviewing this and the compliments. Mike
Comment from Laidy
Personally i liked the font. i thought this was a well written chapter and very good read. i liked the start of the paragraph because it lead the reader into the story. great job.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Personally i liked the font. i thought this was a well written chapter and very good read. i liked the start of the paragraph because it lead the reader into the story. great job.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank you, I use the advanced editor and the Times New Roman Font, but there are some tricks when adding a chapter to the book. I write in word and then copy and paste it to the regular posting processor here. Post it, add it to the book, and then go into the advanced processor and alter the fonts. I thank you very much for your compliments and this reivew. Mike
Comment from poetknowit
Very cute and endearing - I certainly cannot ascertain your age, but you write with the sound of an adolescent (I mean that positively, since it sounds as though you are reminiscing of adolescent junior high days)
You have a few typos and punctuations to correct, but I gather this is just one good chapter in a book which is an interesting saga of coming-of-age.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Very cute and endearing - I certainly cannot ascertain your age, but you write with the sound of an adolescent (I mean that positively, since it sounds as though you are reminiscing of adolescent junior high days)
You have a few typos and punctuations to correct, but I gather this is just one good chapter in a book which is an interesting saga of coming-of-age.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Many people pointed out the typos for me to correct, which has been done. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. I am forty three and this was written when I was 13, if this is eyebrow raising, the next chapter is titled, "Hormones and Hemeroges." Mike
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
PROBLEM PERFORMANCE ENDOWED POSITIVE RESULT!
I liked this essay (non-fiction). The orderly introduction is interesting and the ending is resolved curious.
It has scientific organisation of thoughts from the past, subjective studies and exploration, orderly capture of points of view, viewpoints and event referral.
It was a pleasant achieving read.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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PROBLEM PERFORMANCE ENDOWED POSITIVE RESULT!
I liked this essay (non-fiction). The orderly introduction is interesting and the ending is resolved curious.
It has scientific organisation of thoughts from the past, subjective studies and exploration, orderly capture of points of view, viewpoints and event referral.
It was a pleasant achieving read.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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I thank you for the compliments and this reveiw. I always get a kick out of them too. Mike
