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Comment from ZigzagMLT
Not too slow, just right for setting the mood... although it took me a minute to figure out the dog thing, dead or not. At times, the fact that the dog's name is Amy is confusing, but I think FS-style of things lends itself to such confusion.
Great job!
Zigzagmlt
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Not too slow, just right for setting the mood... although it took me a minute to figure out the dog thing, dead or not. At times, the fact that the dog's name is Amy is confusing, but I think FS-style of things lends itself to such confusion.
Great job!
Zigzagmlt
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Hi Zig,
The list of characters here is troublesome since it's so big. Also, my propensity for naming my dogs people names doesn't help. Perhaps a nice Fido or Spot might break things up some, lol!
Great review and thanks for the super review.
Gayle
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You're welcome. And you don't need to go the Spot route!! I am sure that when I read the print version, all at once, it will all fall into place. Thanks! Z
Comment from joelh605
Great, measured chapter. But the twins are some kind of Wonder Woman superhero breed? - restaurateurs who pull engines? OK, this is fiction and fiction thrives on uber-competence :)
Amy and Tony are both Dobermans, right? This is an obstacle of sorts to anyone coming into the series other than via Book One.
Eager for the next chapter!
Joel
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Great, measured chapter. But the twins are some kind of Wonder Woman superhero breed? - restaurateurs who pull engines? OK, this is fiction and fiction thrives on uber-competence :)
Amy and Tony are both Dobermans, right? This is an obstacle of sorts to anyone coming into the series other than via Book One.
Eager for the next chapter!
Joel
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Y'know, Joel, that's perfectly true. I'll have to make sure everyone knows the team are all Dobies. While I've got ya, lol, I have another question. Now people who read Secret Lives know why Amy is supposed to be dead. I simply alluded to it here and I'm wondering if I should go into it again? Whatcha think?
Ah, the girls...typical Cali gurls, look like butter won't melt in their mouths when in reality, they're a tough bunch of cookies. Sort of!
Thanks for the great comments and stars!
Hugs,
Gayle
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Amy has such a small job to do here, the air of mystery is a good thing: "Huh? WHY does she 'posedta be dead?!" Keeps the reader alert.
:)
Comment from RenieReader
Oh, I love these little breather parts where some planning and thinking is being done. I like the way the guys play off one another's ideas and why one thing will work while another, won't. Those feisty twins are something else, too.
I didn't see any problems, babe.
Hugs,
Renie
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Oh, I love these little breather parts where some planning and thinking is being done. I like the way the guys play off one another's ideas and why one thing will work while another, won't. Those feisty twins are something else, too.
I didn't see any problems, babe.
Hugs,
Renie
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Thanks for the great review and comments. Yes, this whole cast of characters are a riot. Remember Al and the 'flying meat' incidents in the lounge? LOL! Even Chef is a hoot. I gotta meet these folks!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Readywriter52
Ella and Terry are debating how best to rescue Cathy. Jim and Lenny seem concerned about sending Ella and Terry after the kidnapper. They are all concerned about Cathy.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Ella and Terry are debating how best to rescue Cathy. Jim and Lenny seem concerned about sending Ella and Terry after the kidnapper. They are all concerned about Cathy.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Hi Ready, good to see you again. Glad you liked this one and I appreciate the fine comments,
Gayle
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Ella and Terry are great. I really enjoyed these two ladies. They add personality to trying to rescure Cathy. With friends like them, how could things go wrong. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Ella and Terry are great. I really enjoyed these two ladies. They add personality to trying to rescure Cathy. With friends like them, how could things go wrong. Great job.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Hi Barbara,
I love the girls. This is their fifth book so we all know each other very well. It's a riot how the characters just take over a story and the next thing you know, you're kinda like Nathan...what is going on here? LOL!
Thanks for the great comments.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from fictionwriter
I can see this leading up to a jam packed with action piece. I like the laying of the groundwork for the plan. Very nicely done.
Ooo(h), don't say that.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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I can see this leading up to a jam packed with action piece. I like the laying of the groundwork for the plan. Very nicely done.
Ooo(h), don't say that.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Hi and thank you so much for the great review. The next chapter should be out shortly and I hope you enjoy.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from shelley kaye
okay wait a sec- ella's is in la right? so you're going to get from la to escondido in 30 minutes???? the jag can go fast but it can't fly! LOL!
Cabin where? <-- sounds weird - maybe change to "what cabin?" ?
okay, other than those two things - a good (half) chapter
thanx for sharing!
shelley :)
p.s. your ark built yet? LOL!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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okay wait a sec- ella's is in la right? so you're going to get from la to escondido in 30 minutes???? the jag can go fast but it can't fly! LOL!
Cabin where? <-- sounds weird - maybe change to "what cabin?" ?
okay, other than those two things - a good (half) chapter
thanx for sharing!
shelley :)
p.s. your ark built yet? LOL!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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I blew it. The guys are in Del Mar but the girls are in Hollyweird. Okay, I'll make it an hour!
The other one is a good idea, too! Thanks.
Now, how are you doing? Are you still in Laguna Nigel? What's your rain like there? We're getting just a bit soggy here.
Take care, sweetie,
Gayle
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close- laguna hills- we're 'swimming' LOL
Comment from Sasha
I didn't find this the least bit slow. You immediately got my adrenaline pumping and breaking this into two chapters is perfect. Great to leave the reader desperately wanting to now more. I cannot wait to read the next chapter. You have done a terrific job with this. The pace is perfect and your descriptions are amazing. Wonderful writing. Top notch!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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I didn't find this the least bit slow. You immediately got my adrenaline pumping and breaking this into two chapters is perfect. Great to leave the reader desperately wanting to now more. I cannot wait to read the next chapter. You have done a terrific job with this. The pace is perfect and your descriptions are amazing. Wonderful writing. Top notch!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Hey Sasha,
Thanks for the great review and the wonderful comments. I appreciate your input so much!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Dave M
Gayle,
This is an excellent set-up chapter. And the women would be loaded for bear, even when they're supposed to act like sweet bubbleheads. And yes, I remember that Amy is supposed to be dead, that Lenny (I believe) dumped "her" corpse on the police captain's desk.
One question: Is Ella's restaurant in San Diego or Los Angeles? If it's in LA, it would take more than a half hour to get to the cabin.
One suggestion: "We just have to contain Terry until she can lure Norman far enough away from the house that [so] Amy can do her thing." Don't know if the word "so" is grammatically correct, but this is dialogue, and "so" is exactly what an American would use here.
Dave
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Gayle,
This is an excellent set-up chapter. And the women would be loaded for bear, even when they're supposed to act like sweet bubbleheads. And yes, I remember that Amy is supposed to be dead, that Lenny (I believe) dumped "her" corpse on the police captain's desk.
One question: Is Ella's restaurant in San Diego or Los Angeles? If it's in LA, it would take more than a half hour to get to the cabin.
One suggestion: "We just have to contain Terry until she can lure Norman far enough away from the house that [so] Amy can do her thing." Don't know if the word "so" is grammatically correct, but this is dialogue, and "so" is exactly what an American would use here.
Dave
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Hey Dave,
How cool that you remember that! Yes, after dealing with Bob, Amy had to disappear! What a great memory! :)
Grrrr, Shelley Kaye just informed me of that bloop. The guys are in Del Mar and I gave the same timeframe to the girls. Tack an hour onto that one.
I'll also check that 'so'. I need to get over to your neck of the woods here soon. We're been having terrible weather, REALLY hard rains, power out for hours at a time. What a mess!
Hey good buddy, thanks again,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from rogerpolly
I thought the chapter was interesting, setting the stage for what happens next. Believable characters. I like that the girls took time to return to the office for their purses, even if they are in a hurry to catch the culprit.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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I thought the chapter was interesting, setting the stage for what happens next. Believable characters. I like that the girls took time to return to the office for their purses, even if they are in a hurry to catch the culprit.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Hi Polly,
Thanks for stopping by and for the great comments. I appreciate your input and encouragement.
Gayle
