I Locked a Door
reflective quatrains120 total reviews
Comment from Calanatan
This is the sort of poem that has the most appeal to me: the tribulations of people revealed in a poetic voice. Rhyming, not rhyming, structured, free verse: whatever. Open a window into a soul and let pour forth the stuff of what we are made. I like bubbles and flowers as well as the next person (teasing!) but it is emotion revealed that resonates with emotion concealed that I like most.
Stanza three, verse two:"who does not mean the best for me,". The flow of this is off somehow; it strikes me as too vague. What kind of threat is contained in someone not meaning the best for me? It does not match the paranoia of the speaker, the sharpness of the rest of the thoughts in the poem. You are better than this!
Or maybe it is just me...as we've said: there's no accounting for taste.
Best Wishes,
Calanatan
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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This is the sort of poem that has the most appeal to me: the tribulations of people revealed in a poetic voice. Rhyming, not rhyming, structured, free verse: whatever. Open a window into a soul and let pour forth the stuff of what we are made. I like bubbles and flowers as well as the next person (teasing!) but it is emotion revealed that resonates with emotion concealed that I like most.
Stanza three, verse two:"who does not mean the best for me,". The flow of this is off somehow; it strikes me as too vague. What kind of threat is contained in someone not meaning the best for me? It does not match the paranoia of the speaker, the sharpness of the rest of the thoughts in the poem. You are better than this!
Or maybe it is just me...as we've said: there's no accounting for taste.
Best Wishes,
Calanatan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Calanatan, for your thoughtful input and review. I will think over that line. Brooke :-)
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
this is so true. which always goes to ask the question ... are fences to keep people out or in? same with bars on windows. i heard of paranoid people burning to death in their own homes because no one could rescue them through the bars. sigh. nicely done.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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brooke,
this is so true. which always goes to ask the question ... are fences to keep people out or in? same with bars on windows. i heard of paranoid people burning to death in their own homes because no one could rescue them through the bars. sigh. nicely done.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Barbara :-) Your response is most insightful. Brooke :-)
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brooke,
you are very welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke There is so much meaning in your well written poem. We are know people who are stop alot of enjoyment coming into their life because of unknown fears. I may just write a poem about one such person I know, LOL Gaye
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Hi Brooke There is so much meaning in your well written poem. We are know people who are stop alot of enjoyment coming into their life because of unknown fears. I may just write a poem about one such person I know, LOL Gaye
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Gaye. I'm glad the meaning of this resonated with you. Brooke :-)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Another thought-provoking piece from your talented creativity, Brooke. I know someone who fears so many things, she is trapped behind that locked door ... she's too afraid to turn the knob. Great imagery with your poem.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Another thought-provoking piece from your talented creativity, Brooke. I know someone who fears so many things, she is trapped behind that locked door ... she's too afraid to turn the knob. Great imagery with your poem.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Karyn, I have a sister who has suffered from depression for 50 years - I doubt she leaves the house once a week and then only because my brother in law prods her to - it is no way to live. Thank you, my friend. Brooke
Comment from mstad55
No truer words have been spoken. When we lock ourselves in our deepest fears come out to haunt our soul. We are best to be open to friend and foe, and learn to deal with our fear. Well done. Mike
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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No truer words have been spoken. When we lock ourselves in our deepest fears come out to haunt our soul. We are best to be open to friend and foe, and learn to deal with our fear. Well done. Mike
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Good morning, Mike. :-) Glad you found the meaning in this poem :-) Thanks for the review. Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Great poetry,as ever, with a wonderfully expressive philosophical message. Fear can be a killer in its own right. I am drawn to remember F.D.R.s great words on fear.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Dear Brooke,
Great poetry,as ever, with a wonderfully expressive philosophical message. Fear can be a killer in its own right. I am drawn to remember F.D.R.s great words on fear.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Reg. His words have often been an inspiration to me - I lived in a household where he was venerated :-) Brooke
Comment from jtull
It's hard living in a world so filled with grief and uncertianty that one often feels the only safe haven is behind a locked door, and it's a sad feeling. But as you state in this peice, it does have its consequences. It's a constant struggle to achieve that feeling of safety, no matter what side of the door your on. I think that's where God steps in and helps us to make to right choices. Great job with this peice, and by the way, love the picture to!!! Marshall
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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It's hard living in a world so filled with grief and uncertianty that one often feels the only safe haven is behind a locked door, and it's a sad feeling. But as you state in this peice, it does have its consequences. It's a constant struggle to achieve that feeling of safety, no matter what side of the door your on. I think that's where God steps in and helps us to make to right choices. Great job with this peice, and by the way, love the picture to!!! Marshall
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Marshall, for a most insightful response to this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from foxtale
a poem for our times.
Yes, you say so much about more than a door.
well done.
I had instead barred any light
that might a troubled soul restore.
powerful verse!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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a poem for our times.
Yes, you say so much about more than a door.
well done.
I had instead barred any light
that might a troubled soul restore.
powerful verse!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thanks, Foxtale, and good morning! Brooke
Comment from unbridledspirit
Very nice. I liked this well written quattrain. I liked the analogy of the door to yourself (your life) and inviting others into it or keeping them out, etc. Nice imagery. Loved the chosen artwork too. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Very nice. I liked this well written quattrain. I liked the analogy of the door to yourself (your life) and inviting others into it or keeping them out, etc. Nice imagery. Loved the chosen artwork too. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you, unbridledspirit. I'm glad you like the imagery. Brooke :-)
Comment from Sonya Florentino
wow, you don't cease to amaze me....what a beautiful poem and a powerful message....doors we lock to keep things in, to keep things out...this could be read in many levels...one being someone afraid to be hurt can rob themselves of the chance of being loved...your rhymes and meter are always superb.....
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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wow, you don't cease to amaze me....what a beautiful poem and a powerful message....doors we lock to keep things in, to keep things out...this could be read in many levels...one being someone afraid to be hurt can rob themselves of the chance of being loved...your rhymes and meter are always superb.....
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Sonya, thank you for an insightful read of my poem, which yes, has more than one layer of meaning :-) Brooke
