My Neighbor's Dream
reflections in rhyme103 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
I somehow don't believe for a second that you would not keep the yearnings and dreams of your fellow man from touching you in some way, Brooke. A beautiful poem written in MLK's memory.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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I somehow don't believe for a second that you would not keep the yearnings and dreams of your fellow man from touching you in some way, Brooke. A beautiful poem written in MLK's memory.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Karyn - what a nice thing to say :-) Brooke
Comment from --Turtle.
I like it when I read a poem sandwich and don't realize it until I relook at the first line, because the first line and the last line are same, yet so different. When it fits so well in the circle and the journey takes you through the poem and back to where you started, but a changed person. The difference between zero degrees and three hundred and sixty degrees, you are at the same place, but not.
I enjoyed reading this poem, my brain couldn't pick anything to consider changing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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I like it when I read a poem sandwich and don't realize it until I relook at the first line, because the first line and the last line are same, yet so different. When it fits so well in the circle and the journey takes you through the poem and back to where you started, but a changed person. The difference between zero degrees and three hundred and sixty degrees, you are at the same place, but not.
I enjoyed reading this poem, my brain couldn't pick anything to consider changing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Thank you so much for your detailed and attentive comments and read of my poem!! Brooke :-)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Brooke,
Your 'Mortal coil' poem really has very true and important thoughts within it. It touched me and your form seems perfect. These lines stood out to me:
"what satisfaction can I find
when I've walked past one left behind?
How bright can my achievements gleam
if I discount another's dream?"
Thank you for sharing your thoughts within this great poem.
Linda
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Brooke,
Your 'Mortal coil' poem really has very true and important thoughts within it. It touched me and your form seems perfect. These lines stood out to me:
"what satisfaction can I find
when I've walked past one left behind?
How bright can my achievements gleam
if I discount another's dream?"
Thank you for sharing your thoughts within this great poem.
Linda
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Linda - I really appreciate your generous review :-) Brooke
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You are welcome!
Comment from rama devi
An apt poem to dedicate for MLK and I enjoyed your reference to mortal coil, though at first I thought it a bit cliche. IN restrospect, I like it alot. Good rhyme with turmoil and an excellent, well composed, reflective poem. Potently enhanced by the photo choice as well~ Gleam and dream---a good fresh rhyme.
Well done as usual. Inspiring message and fine tribute.
Warm smiles,
rama devi
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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An apt poem to dedicate for MLK and I enjoyed your reference to mortal coil, though at first I thought it a bit cliche. IN restrospect, I like it alot. Good rhyme with turmoil and an excellent, well composed, reflective poem. Potently enhanced by the photo choice as well~ Gleam and dream---a good fresh rhyme.
Well done as usual. Inspiring message and fine tribute.
Warm smiles,
rama devi
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Thank you, rama devi - so glad you enjoyed this - I don't find phrases cliched just because they've been used before, but when in current usage they are used over and over. I'm glad you liked mortal coil in retrospect :-) Brooke
Comment from Annmuma
Beautifully written tribute not only to Martin Luther King, but to all who serve in searching for peace and equality. Nice structure and great flow. ann
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Beautifully written tribute not only to Martin Luther King, but to all who serve in searching for peace and equality. Nice structure and great flow. ann
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Ann. I appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
I did not see the King link until I read your notes. Your message is clear and strong and one to not pass up...
Well done.
I have found a site for women writers--many are professional. It's a neat place and there are pletny of poets there as well. I think you'd find some kindred spirits there and although I have not dived in yet, I think it is a fantastic way to open doors. www dot shewrites dot come. :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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I did not see the King link until I read your notes. Your message is clear and strong and one to not pass up...
Well done.
I have found a site for women writers--many are professional. It's a neat place and there are pletny of poets there as well. I think you'd find some kindred spirits there and although I have not dived in yet, I think it is a fantastic way to open doors. www dot shewrites dot come. :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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I will have to look this site up - thanks for the recommendation - and for the review :-) Brooke
Comment from jtull
Very nice tribute to Mr. King and his dream. It's always been my take on this matter that he wanted equality for all mankind-period. It had nothing to do with black or white, but all peoples. The subject matter and the way you expressed it shows how concerned you were with other peoples feelings and expectations(dreams). This peice deserved 6 stars, but wasn't available for me to give at this time. Thanks so much for sharing with me, Marshall
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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Very nice tribute to Mr. King and his dream. It's always been my take on this matter that he wanted equality for all mankind-period. It had nothing to do with black or white, but all peoples. The subject matter and the way you expressed it shows how concerned you were with other peoples feelings and expectations(dreams). This peice deserved 6 stars, but wasn't available for me to give at this time. Thanks so much for sharing with me, Marshall
Comment Written 21-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2010
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thank you so much, Marshall, for your most thoughtful and generous comments :-) Brooke
Comment from smileycloud
hey
as usual and I aleays forget to say; your form and meter and rhymes and styles are always interesting and perfect
I mostly get carried away with the content of your work and forget to mention reviewing the poetry
I love the expressions u use hear to speak about compassion and respect and equality
the visualization is excellent
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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hey
as usual and I aleays forget to say; your form and meter and rhymes and styles are always interesting and perfect
I mostly get carried away with the content of your work and forget to mention reviewing the poetry
I love the expressions u use hear to speak about compassion and respect and equality
the visualization is excellent
have a smiley day
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Lorraine. I'm glad you could visualize the details :-) Brooke
Comment from fayesh
Brooke, the theme of the your poem is wonderful and humanitarian in its message. It brought to my mind Donne's "For Whom the Bell Tolls" lines " No man is an island,/Entire of itself.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Brooke, the theme of the your poem is wonderful and humanitarian in its message. It brought to my mind Donne's "For Whom the Bell Tolls" lines " No man is an island,/Entire of itself.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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Faye, thank you - I love Donne, so I consider that a lovely compliment. Brooke :-)
Comment from knowledge
As always you are displaying emotion and feeling in your poetry posts. It is so sad to see how politicians continue to try and build walls of prejudice between us for their own ends.
Happy New Year My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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As always you are displaying emotion and feeling in your poetry posts. It is so sad to see how politicians continue to try and build walls of prejudice between us for their own ends.
Happy New Year My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 20-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2010
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thank you, Knowledge - politicians on both sides of the aisle do have a way of polarizing people instead of uniting them - I guess they figure it's the only way to win elections, to make people fearful that horrid things will happen if they are not in power. Brooke :-)
