Performance Problems- My Life! LOL
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "A Few, Friends, To Abhor"A halarious adventure with misery, but always joy!
7 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
You kind of take this one from innocence to exploring. Or at least thinking about exploring. Some things don't change. Some of my family members are in Florida vacationing this week. My youngest grandson posted he is being stalked by a young girl (He is enjoying every bit, just want admit it). I am babysitting my granddogs and offered to send the most aggressive one to rescue him.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2010
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You kind of take this one from innocence to exploring. Or at least thinking about exploring. Some things don't change. Some of my family members are in Florida vacationing this week. My youngest grandson posted he is being stalked by a young girl (He is enjoying every bit, just want admit it). I am babysitting my granddogs and offered to send the most aggressive one to rescue him.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2010
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LOL, I really enjoy your reviews and thank you for them. Mike In my cases, no one offered to help me out, so I always had the dogs at my heels. In one chapter, quite literally! Mike
Comment from HalfHoff
Not every childhood experience is to be cherished to be certain, as your excellent story explains. You got a great saga going on here, Mike. Lea Ann
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
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Not every childhood experience is to be cherished to be certain, as your excellent story explains. You got a great saga going on here, Mike. Lea Ann
Comment Written 14-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
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I am glad that you enjoyed this. A few from here plaged me for most of my life and it is interesting how though out the work, the reader will also be plagued. This work has unique writing challenges and having to relate the exact emotional feal. I figured she got the milage from her claim, now it is my turn. LOL
Thank you so much for reviewing this. With love, Mike
Comment from IndianaIrish
I enjoyed this chapter, Mike, and all the dilemmas in your young life. Most of us can relate to the embarrassment that comes with the age. Lots of typos in this one, though, Mike. Let me know when ya fix them up and I'll up the rating.
figure out what that met.(meant)
tallest girl in the class and redhead (either a redhead or redheaded)
I then started watching her and found out that she was also beaning other friends with the ball, she was very careful in doing this but when she walked away, it was obvious that she enjoyed it. (KInda long sentence. Maybe split it up after ball?)
boy complains a girl is bothering him they try(then??) look away
didn't say anything until we turned of, (off)
maybe get to (delete to)together again and play
I am (was) madly in love with her
I knew that the look that I had, had already answered that question (yikes! that, that, had, had...how about--I knew my look must have answered the question?)
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010
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I enjoyed this chapter, Mike, and all the dilemmas in your young life. Most of us can relate to the embarrassment that comes with the age. Lots of typos in this one, though, Mike. Let me know when ya fix them up and I'll up the rating.
figure out what that met.(meant)
tallest girl in the class and redhead (either a redhead or redheaded)
I then started watching her and found out that she was also beaning other friends with the ball, she was very careful in doing this but when she walked away, it was obvious that she enjoyed it. (KInda long sentence. Maybe split it up after ball?)
boy complains a girl is bothering him they try(then??) look away
didn't say anything until we turned of, (off)
maybe get to (delete to)together again and play
I am (was) madly in love with her
I knew that the look that I had, had already answered that question (yikes! that, that, had, had...how about--I knew my look must have answered the question?)
Indy :>)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010
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Well, I will set about making the corrections. I paste review like this into word and print them out. I do my best with getting it right the first time, but I actually believe that it is impossible for me to proof my own work. Last week, we had to stop the presses as an illustration had incorporated into to it, "Dead Rests," instead of, "Head Rests"
Thank you very much for this review and the compliments. Mike
Comment from rogerpolly
Your story catapulted me back to the sixth grade. We probably all had parallel experiences when it came to people making up stuff. Each of your stories was interesting in its own way and expressed the feelings garnered from untrue accusations. There were a couple of typos which tend to divert attention from a clean read(met/meant,though/thought, to together, it it's, made remarkably made clear). It appears you had an interesting childhood, filled with a few misunderstandings and an abundance of love!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Your story catapulted me back to the sixth grade. We probably all had parallel experiences when it came to people making up stuff. Each of your stories was interesting in its own way and expressed the feelings garnered from untrue accusations. There were a couple of typos which tend to divert attention from a clean read(met/meant,though/thought, to together, it it's, made remarkably made clear). It appears you had an interesting childhood, filled with a few misunderstandings and an abundance of love!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you for reading this, but the specific instances of those typos would be much more valuable and of use to me. With the amount of writing and the fact that I am a printer, very often it is the writer that can not pick them out and a good outside eye is the better bet. I do appreciate the compliments, Mike
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
DILEMMAS A MEMOIR OF OLD DAYS!
This non-fiction I liked for its clarity of messages, organised and popped up in a setting flourished the performance, the work has flow to follow the progress of thoughts, the intro has solid pack up with spontaneity and the concluding stage has prescriptive work out, all briefly but comprehensibly and likeably projected as I found it a pleasant read, an ease endeavour althrough.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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DILEMMAS A MEMOIR OF OLD DAYS!
This non-fiction I liked for its clarity of messages, organised and popped up in a setting flourished the performance, the work has flow to follow the progress of thoughts, the intro has solid pack up with spontaneity and the concluding stage has prescriptive work out, all briefly but comprehensibly and likeably projected as I found it a pleasant read, an ease endeavour althrough.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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I like this review and thank you for it and the compliments are very flattering. Beleive it or not, Sarah Palins book gave me the confidience and a few ideas about how to present this. Also I metally storied boarded this for a possible screen play. Their it is mostly how to cinemaphotographical how to present scenes, then I got the bright idea to also us it as a template for describing the details. I started to think about the walk home and didn't want an endless one, so I used descriptors so that over time, the person is able to get a sense of the route. The hill of the school, the turn onto her street, the turn off where I continued on alone. Accuracy or details aren't necessarly important or need to be accurate in the reader's mind. Just that the limits are there and there is an idea of the walk.
The Dilemmas aren't really in this one for quite a while and I really hope that people don't approach this as a memoir as that isn't my intention. I think Jean's storyline is the most important.
Thank you very much for this review, I enjoyed it very much.
Comment from Mary's angel
The imagery of the teens come across very true to yesterdays pre-teens. I wonder if today's are so similar to this story. I did enjoy reading the story; it made me smile at the end. Good ending by the way! Leaves room to wonder how and why the other street. Check for grammatical errors in punctuation. Other than that, seems like you had an interesting time in 6th grade. Your honesty is admirable.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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The imagery of the teens come across very true to yesterdays pre-teens. I wonder if today's are so similar to this story. I did enjoy reading the story; it made me smile at the end. Good ending by the way! Leaves room to wonder how and why the other street. Check for grammatical errors in punctuation. Other than that, seems like you had an interesting time in 6th grade. Your honesty is admirable.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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I have checked several times for gramatical errors, but very often the mind skips over them. That is why I love posting her as usually, people are able to pick them out specifically. Thank you for reviewing this.
Comment from Writeaway...
Aw, you certainly left me wondering what's going to happen next Mike K2, I found no spags whatsoever and was kept interested from the beignning, excellent job, keep writing!!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Aw, you certainly left me wondering what's going to happen next Mike K2, I found no spags whatsoever and was kept interested from the beignning, excellent job, keep writing!!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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As soon as I find the time to review, you shall know. I really wished that I had more funds upfront to pout into this. I think looking forward to the next read is the ultimant compliment. Mike
