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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
you just put me in a scene where I was viewing a group of brave marking soldiers marching home from war.
I know John Philips Sousa well
when I played in a band( My younger days of course)
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Hello Brooke,
you just put me in a scene where I was viewing a group of brave marking soldiers marching home from war.
I know John Philips Sousa well
when I played in a band( My younger days of course)
Gert
Comment Written 13-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Gert - in my younger days I was in the school chorus. We went on a joint trip to Canada with the band once, a fun group of kids!! :-) Brooke
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You are welcome Brooke
Gert
Comment from wheelswrites
This was perfect, until you twisted the words to make a rhyme in v1, line 1. Just this lowly ole poet's observation and I still love the poem.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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This was perfect, until you twisted the words to make a rhyme in v1, line 1. Just this lowly ole poet's observation and I still love the poem.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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With drums they set the cadence to parade - I've just read that over three more times and it doesn't sound twisted to me. Glad you still like the poem :-) Brooke
Comment from percival86jack
This started out with a stirring tribute to a marching parade to a Sousa tune.
Then we are reminded about the futility of war. Sad.
Cheers and hopes for better days ahead... Jack xox
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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This started out with a stirring tribute to a marching parade to a Sousa tune.
Then we are reminded about the futility of war. Sad.
Cheers and hopes for better days ahead... Jack xox
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Jack - are you writing from not-so-warm Florida? Brooke :-)
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Dear Brooke,
You paint a vivid picture here of soldiers proud and marching towards the sadness of death and the battle fields. This seems so very appropriate for a read today, I have been trying to trace my family tree and my grandfather died in the first world war.. Could almost envisage his smart uniform and his pride with the sound of the marching from your description.
Steve
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Dear Brooke,
You paint a vivid picture here of soldiers proud and marching towards the sadness of death and the battle fields. This seems so very appropriate for a read today, I have been trying to trace my family tree and my grandfather died in the first world war.. Could almost envisage his smart uniform and his pride with the sound of the marching from your description.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thanks so much, Steve - I appreciate your reviews and am always glad to hear something I've written has triggered a private memory :-) Brooke
Comment from Colin Douglas
Powerful piece on war and its bloody result. The last two lines are a tiny bit awkward, because it almost sounds like the "battlefields of blood" are to "fall and die," but I think you get away with that here.
Colin
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Powerful piece on war and its bloody result. The last two lines are a tiny bit awkward, because it almost sounds like the "battlefields of blood" are to "fall and die," but I think you get away with that here.
Colin
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Colin - I'll have to reread those lines :-) Brooke
Comment from Dustman6180
What can I say? The cadence of the poem is perfect and the rhyme is perfect. The subject is near and dear to our hearts. I would have given it six stars, but I have none left.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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What can I say? The cadence of the poem is perfect and the rhyme is perfect. The subject is near and dear to our hearts. I would have given it six stars, but I have none left.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Dustman. I appreciate your generous wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Wow.
Regimental is a fabulous word choice. It conveys strong imagery all on its own. ;)
I could picture this scene so clearly - right down to the shiny boots and buttons.
The closing lines of your poem switch the mood quickly. Just as quickly as we loose these young and brave patriots. Very effective ending, Brooke.
Very sad.
Nic
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Wow.
Regimental is a fabulous word choice. It conveys strong imagery all on its own. ;)
I could picture this scene so clearly - right down to the shiny boots and buttons.
The closing lines of your poem switch the mood quickly. Just as quickly as we loose these young and brave patriots. Very effective ending, Brooke.
Very sad.
Nic
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Nic - I love the word "regimental." :-) I so appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymer1
I am not much for military splendor or for aggrandizing the necessity of soldiering, but you do it majestically. Except for the two "as" words in line six, excellent.
Slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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I am not much for military splendor or for aggrandizing the necessity of soldiering, but you do it majestically. Except for the two "as" words in line six, excellent.
Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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I meant to do exactly the opposite!!! Thanks, Rhymer. Brooke
Comment from Queenise
This reminds me of a patriotic song that you would find in a history book. It projects this part of a soldier's life so well and your description is on the money. Would recommend to others. Queenise
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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This reminds me of a patriotic song that you would find in a history book. It projects this part of a soldier's life so well and your description is on the money. Would recommend to others. Queenise
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Queenise, thank you for your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. Queenise
Comment from Ann Smith
I always like a poem or anything about soldiers. I can relate because my dad was in WWII. I like the form of the poem and I have learned a lot in just a week about form. I like the first line with drums to set the cadence. I am a retired music teacher so I know a lot about drums as well. This first line sets the stage for the poem. I like the color choice of black because it does not detract from the words. The last two phrases give a twist to the poem since the soldiers are not only marching to the music but to their death.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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I always like a poem or anything about soldiers. I can relate because my dad was in WWII. I like the form of the poem and I have learned a lot in just a week about form. I like the first line with drums to set the cadence. I am a retired music teacher so I know a lot about drums as well. This first line sets the stage for the poem. I like the color choice of black because it does not detract from the words. The last two phrases give a twist to the poem since the soldiers are not only marching to the music but to their death.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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My dad served in the Pacific as did many of my uncles. I appreciate your kind response to this poem - I considered using the illustration you did in the poem of yours I just read :-) Brooke
