The Weird Kid
A silly story with one syllable words70 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi amada...this is a great silly story, in fact I was thinking as I read it...this couldn't be easy. Writing a story in one syllable words must have been a big challenge. Love the theme and the words...well done and good luck in the contest...blessings....chey
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Hi amada...this is a great silly story, in fact I was thinking as I read it...this couldn't be easy. Writing a story in one syllable words must have been a big challenge. Love the theme and the words...well done and good luck in the contest...blessings....chey
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2010
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Thank you chey for reading and appreciating this silly work.
Comment from patwannabe
Okay, amada. That was a big challenge. I like your silly story. Started to call it stupid, but no story is stupid. Silly sounds better. I did catch two words that have two syls, "many" and "away". Not sure how you could fix that, but I'm sure you can. Ridiculous, for sure. LOL, pat
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Okay, amada. That was a big challenge. I like your silly story. Started to call it stupid, but no story is stupid. Silly sounds better. I did catch two words that have two syls, "many" and "away". Not sure how you could fix that, but I'm sure you can. Ridiculous, for sure. LOL, pat
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
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Thank you Pat for reading my silly story and for alerting me to those mistakes! I hope the new words are better.
Comment from anabelle
This is great. You've done a fabulous job with this entry. I love the one-syllable words. Amazing what one can do when one is creative.
Very well done and best of luck in your contest.
Regards, anabelle
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This is great. You've done a fabulous job with this entry. I love the one-syllable words. Amazing what one can do when one is creative.
Very well done and best of luck in your contest.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2010
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Thank you annabelle for reading and commentng in this fun write.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Amada, to write a silly story with just one syllable words seems like and awesome task. I liked your tale of Ralph and his family and friends. The positive ending was good.
Well done. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
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Hi Amada, to write a silly story with just one syllable words seems like and awesome task. I liked your tale of Ralph and his family and friends. The positive ending was good.
Well done. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
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Tkank you jada for the encouraging review. I was scared of doing dialog.
Comment from mbroyles2
WOW!
Your creativity and imagination really shine through on the story.
The use of one "breath" words was amazing.
The characters were easy to connect to.
Great contest entry.
Good luck.
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WOW!
Your creativity and imagination really shine through on the story.
The use of one "breath" words was amazing.
The characters were easy to connect to.
Great contest entry.
Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
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Thank you so much for stopping to read this silly story.
Comment from tati
I was so pleased with your excellent silly story, amada. I've read it several times while enjoying the well chosen 550 one syllable words. Thank you for crafting and sharing this unique story, amada. Wish you the very best in the contest. (tati, Jan. 10, 2010)
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I was so pleased with your excellent silly story, amada. I've read it several times while enjoying the well chosen 550 one syllable words. Thank you for crafting and sharing this unique story, amada. Wish you the very best in the contest. (tati, Jan. 10, 2010)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2010
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Hi tati. Thank you for reading these funny story. I appreciate your support to this work.
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If only you were near, amada, I will call you every day, so I can train and switch my Indonesian tongue to real English heart and mindset (language users are free to create new words, don't we? heartset; isn't it wonderful). Love you always, Nancy.
tati
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That's soooo sweet! Wouldn't be great, to talk at all hours, sharing secrets and evertything! Like sisters?
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Oh, yes. Since I joined this site, I always consider you as my sister, amada.
tati
Comment from Joan E.
I especially enjoyed your happy ending and moral for all of us. I liked your concepts of "one-breath words" and "gene" mix. (The only thing I might change, is at the beginning it says he was born "sad" and a bit later "at ten, he was sad.") You used one syllable words very cleverly and the creatures came to life being personified and with your similes. Best wishes in the contest and in the new year. I'm just back from India and it was fun to read your tale as I try to catch up with FanStory.
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I especially enjoyed your happy ending and moral for all of us. I liked your concepts of "one-breath words" and "gene" mix. (The only thing I might change, is at the beginning it says he was born "sad" and a bit later "at ten, he was sad.") You used one syllable words very cleverly and the creatures came to life being personified and with your similes. Best wishes in the contest and in the new year. I'm just back from India and it was fun to read your tale as I try to catch up with FanStory.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
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Welcome back JoanE. I will be waiting for some reads from your trip to India. Never being there; I wish I had.
Comment from patmedium
I adore nonsense rhymes and nonsense stories... ESPECIALLY those which pack a little wisdom between the lines.
This is perfect! Congratulations, dear. I wish you good luck with it. Pat.
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I adore nonsense rhymes and nonsense stories... ESPECIALLY those which pack a little wisdom between the lines.
This is perfect! Congratulations, dear. I wish you good luck with it. Pat.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
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Thank you Pat for reading and telling me what you liked the best. The last thoughts in inspiration were a last minute intuition.
Comment from bayoupoet
This is a well written silly poem for the contest and the ending was a complete surprise and that is good. I enjoyed reading for you, Amanda. Good Luck in the contest!
sandra
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This is a well written silly poem for the contest and the ending was a complete surprise and that is good. I enjoyed reading for you, Amanda. Good Luck in the contest!
sandra
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2010
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thank you for reading and reviewing my silly story.
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You are very welcome, Amanda!
Comment from Sally Carter
I really enjoyed this. Interestingly enough, the use of single syllables made for some really great phrases, like his mum liking to rhyme, and the wild mix of his genes. And mom's mind being loud with the gift of words. Really terrific.
I'm afraid I did spot one intrusive double syllable word, ie "under" in the penultimate para.
Most enjoyable, and with a great message that we can all be more than we seem - as can the words you use.
Sally
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I really enjoyed this. Interestingly enough, the use of single syllables made for some really great phrases, like his mum liking to rhyme, and the wild mix of his genes. And mom's mind being loud with the gift of words. Really terrific.
I'm afraid I did spot one intrusive double syllable word, ie "under" in the penultimate para.
Most enjoyable, and with a great message that we can all be more than we seem - as can the words you use.
Sally
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2010
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Thank you Sally. So good that you tell me what you liked the best. It's always so good to be specific.
