He was a jolly good fella
a funny obituary contest entry71 total reviews
Comment from irishauthorme
A great story, funny and with good rhyming! You sure covered this guys life in full, and then to have him secretly wed this one maid-was that because she kind of 'held out' for the ceremony?
Amusing and credible!
irish
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A great story, funny and with good rhyming! You sure covered this guys life in full, and then to have him secretly wed this one maid-was that because she kind of 'held out' for the ceremony?
Amusing and credible!
irish
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from Wild Flower
Lol! Poor Sanford. I guess he died while doing what he loved the best. Great job on this. I loved his story and got a giggle o ut of it. Good luck on the contest.
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Lol! Poor Sanford. I guess he died while doing what he loved the best. Great job on this. I loved his story and got a giggle o ut of it. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from Angus_Townsend
I am sure that I don't need to tell you what a brilliant poem this is, the certificates should be able to do that! All I can add is that I really enjoyed it, so thank you for writing such a lovely piece.
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I am sure that I don't need to tell you what a brilliant poem this is, the certificates should be able to do that! All I can add is that I really enjoyed it, so thank you for writing such a lovely piece.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from knowledge
The only way to go! But what about the poor wife we are with when it happens? At least they will know we died happy in their arms.
Yes, this is fun and funny. Luck on the contest.
Happy New Year My Friend,
Knowledge
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The only way to go! But what about the poor wife we are with when it happens? At least they will know we died happy in their arms.
Yes, this is fun and funny. Luck on the contest.
Happy New Year My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from MyYiaYia
Such a good poem and a fitting picture to go with it. I can just see Betty Davis as the widow and I don't recognize the male actor, but he looks the part of the Don Juan. I can hear this poem being recited at a local English pub (or sang) by patrons waving their pints while busty barmaids are being passed from lap to lap. Well done!
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Such a good poem and a fitting picture to go with it. I can just see Betty Davis as the widow and I don't recognize the male actor, but he looks the part of the Don Juan. I can hear this poem being recited at a local English pub (or sang) by patrons waving their pints while busty barmaids are being passed from lap to lap. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from kintesiegel
This is funny and well written and at times quite hilarious. Very nicely done spoof (or is it true?) This is the only line that made me hesitate a bit as far as meaning goes: "The lusty moans emitted their boudoir."
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This is funny and well written and at times quite hilarious. Very nicely done spoof (or is it true?) This is the only line that made me hesitate a bit as far as meaning goes: "The lusty moans emitted their boudoir."
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from Writeaway...
You certainly made me laugh yeltel, I found no spags whatsoever and was kept interested, the background and picture also blended in well, excellent job, I wish you well in the competition, keep writing!!
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You certainly made me laugh yeltel, I found no spags whatsoever and was kept interested, the background and picture also blended in well, excellent job, I wish you well in the competition, keep writing!!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from BPL76
The rhymes are good and adds
to the effect you have here
It is vivid and it flows well
Good JOb and
Good Luck in the contest
BPL...........................................................................
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The rhymes are good and adds
to the effect you have here
It is vivid and it flows well
Good JOb and
Good Luck in the contest
BPL...........................................................................
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from wierdgrace
This my friend is the best way to write a humorous poem for this contest, the story in the structure and rhyme is so well done, the images strong, and the emotional feeling are there to, no errors andno revision thank you for putting the fun in this.
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This my friend is the best way to write a humorous poem for this contest, the story in the structure and rhyme is so well done, the images strong, and the emotional feeling are there to, no errors andno revision thank you for putting the fun in this.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from sgalletti
Great job on this obituary Y! Loved the rhyming couplets and the story. Just finished reading all the entries and you will be getting my vote. Sue
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2010
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Great job on this obituary Y! Loved the rhyming couplets and the story. Just finished reading all the entries and you will be getting my vote. Sue
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2010
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Thank you so much for this great review and for your vote, Sue! Poetic obituary is a bit irregular, ahem... don't you think? (lol). But with me, poetry always does it. Loved writing it, and appreciate the wonderful feedback. Much love, Y.
