He was a jolly good fella
a funny obituary contest entry71 total reviews
Comment from tentwofifty
great imagery... awesome graphics... excellent word usage... never dull... thanks for sharing... keep posting your work...
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great imagery... awesome graphics... excellent word usage... never dull... thanks for sharing... keep posting your work...
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is really good. I like the underlying humour in the piece of narrative poetry. The man was a jolly good fellow and an irresponsible one too. Nice rhymes and near-rhymes. kudos
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This is really good. I like the underlying humour in the piece of narrative poetry. The man was a jolly good fellow and an irresponsible one too. Nice rhymes and near-rhymes. kudos
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
Comment from wheelswrites
This is a fun contest and I love your poem. Humor is what makes my day and you made my day. Good luck with the contest and hope to read more of you.
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This is a fun contest and I love your poem. Humor is what makes my day and you made my day. Good luck with the contest and hope to read more of you.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
Comment from chaswriter
Yelena - This has got to be one of the funniest poems I've read in quite a while. The characterization of this womanizer is hilarious, and the way you have him die is even moreso. And you do it im impressive rhyme and rhythm. My hat off to you.
Charlie
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Yelena - This has got to be one of the funniest poems I've read in quite a while. The characterization of this womanizer is hilarious, and the way you have him die is even moreso. And you do it im impressive rhyme and rhythm. My hat off to you.
Charlie
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from Dustman6180
I read an obituary in a small town newspaper in Tennessee once, that sounded a lot like this. Not the words, but the story. I found that one funny and this one funnier. Good Job.
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I read an obituary in a small town newspaper in Tennessee once, that sounded a lot like this. Not the words, but the story. I found that one funny and this one funnier. Good Job.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from rhymer1
All I can do is roar with laughter at this one and I assume with you. You must have had a great laugh or two as you created this one. slainte, rhymer1
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All I can do is roar with laughter at this one and I assume with you. You must have had a great laugh or two as you created this one. slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from Mazbeachbum
I love the way this flows and tells the story of this "rambling" ma of the village. Such a fellow to amass all of his "prizes" and then to pass in the fashion he did. Thank you for this work, it was wonderful to read.
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I love the way this flows and tells the story of this "rambling" ma of the village. Such a fellow to amass all of his "prizes" and then to pass in the fashion he did. Thank you for this work, it was wonderful to read.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from words
Ah, would that obits were really this interesting?
I think we could just insert the name of most powerful men and this obit would probably fit nicely.
Although some, I must admit, probably prefer the Four Seasons or the Ritz to the hay, but the sentiment is the same.
Got a real giggle out of this one.
Good luck in the contest.
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Ah, would that obits were really this interesting?
I think we could just insert the name of most powerful men and this obit would probably fit nicely.
Although some, I must admit, probably prefer the Four Seasons or the Ritz to the hay, but the sentiment is the same.
Got a real giggle out of this one.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from Helvi2
Hi yeltel,
Looks like I found another risque obit. There must be something in the air?
I have the feeling that once you started writing this your pen took over and even you didn't know when it would end. You told quite a tale in your obit and in wonderful rhyme to boot.
You really cranked your creative button up to top speed and did a fantastic job creating this Don Juan OBIT.
This was incredibly easy to read and even though it was long I flew through it quicky. I think this will definately be noticed in the Contest.
Good Luck,
Helvi
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Hi yeltel,
Looks like I found another risque obit. There must be something in the air?
I have the feeling that once you started writing this your pen took over and even you didn't know when it would end. You told quite a tale in your obit and in wonderful rhyme to boot.
You really cranked your creative button up to top speed and did a fantastic job creating this Don Juan OBIT.
This was incredibly easy to read and even though it was long I flew through it quicky. I think this will definately be noticed in the Contest.
Good Luck,
Helvi
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
Comment from mermaids
Funny and reads like a movie. You created a character here that comes alive and is lingering around even after he is gone. Best wishes for the contest.
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Funny and reads like a movie. You created a character here that comes alive and is lingering around even after he is gone. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2010
