Here's to You, Frankie
How some Entrepenauers are remembered.....44 total reviews
Comment from melyuki
Oh big sis, what have we here. Now I have to confess, if this bloke is for real, I don't know who on earth he is. If he ain't for real, then you have done a darn good job, convincing me he is. Now aren't you the clever one here. I don't know too much about all this stuff, being stupid and all, but the way you have written this orbituary is superb. The last bit got me . I love your wit and sick humour and so would have "frankie". lest he rests in pieces . great job sis, YOu have the job when it's my time. deal... luv an hugs from little sis from goonsville where dey make em with no brain.....
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Oh big sis, what have we here. Now I have to confess, if this bloke is for real, I don't know who on earth he is. If he ain't for real, then you have done a darn good job, convincing me he is. Now aren't you the clever one here. I don't know too much about all this stuff, being stupid and all, but the way you have written this orbituary is superb. The last bit got me . I love your wit and sick humour and so would have "frankie". lest he rests in pieces . great job sis, YOu have the job when it's my time. deal... luv an hugs from little sis from goonsville where dey make em with no brain.....
Comment Written 09-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
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Coffee's brewing, little sis
No..he's not real..just a gangster I made up from my married years and involvement with the Italian clan..HAHA Glad you found some humor in it...Smiles, Sis
Comment from Alison Williams
This is wonderful. Extremely witty and tongue-in-cheek. Well done. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I didn't spot any errors. But it kept me absorbed and gave me a few chuckles along the way.
I appreciated the subtle jibes you inserted and social commentary.
Alison :)
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This is wonderful. Extremely witty and tongue-in-cheek. Well done. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I didn't spot any errors. But it kept me absorbed and gave me a few chuckles along the way.
I appreciated the subtle jibes you inserted and social commentary.
Alison :)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Alison
Couldn't resist a jab or two..Thanks for the generous review. Carol
Comment from skye
Very entertaining, in a bizarre and twisted way.
The details are well crafted, making him feel real.
I love the little digs at crime in general.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
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Very entertaining, in a bizarre and twisted way.
The details are well crafted, making him feel real.
I love the little digs at crime in general.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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skye
Glad you could see that I had a "few little" points to make..Smiles, Carol
Comment from ZigzagMLT
This is a fine piece that had me smiling all the way through. I loved your names, and your way of describing his marriage... well done!
I did find a couple of things... speak or spoke louder than words?
to the `Recently Bereaved...
Hope that's helpful.
Thanks so much for a good read. Good luck!
Zigzagmlt
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This is a fine piece that had me smiling all the way through. I loved your names, and your way of describing his marriage... well done!
I did find a couple of things... speak or spoke louder than words?
to the `Recently Bereaved...
Hope that's helpful.
Thanks so much for a good read. Good luck!
Zigzagmlt
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Zigzag
Thanks for pointing out my nits and I shall see what I can do to fix them asap...Glad you enjoyed. Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
This is an absolute hoot, Carol!! Very funny and sure seemed realistic. I loved all your little comments and quips. Best wishes in the contest.
Indy :>)
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This is an absolute hoot, Carol!! Very funny and sure seemed realistic. I loved all your little comments and quips. Best wishes in the contest.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Indy
Thanks so much..I got a chuckle out of this one too! Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Too cute for words. This is very good. I don't like good posts, because there is neve anything to say. I've already told you it was good. It deserves a 6, but I don't have any. Good luck with the contest.
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Too cute for words. This is very good. I don't like good posts, because there is neve anything to say. I've already told you it was good. It deserves a 6, but I don't have any. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Barbara
If you laughed and enjoyed it...what more is there...Thanks so much, my friend,.... Carol
Comment from c_lucas
Frankie was quite the joker, failure to laugh could get you killed. If the truth be known, he was in pieces due to the malfuction of the Magican saw. Very well written.
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Frankie was quite the joker, failure to laugh could get you killed. If the truth be known, he was in pieces due to the malfuction of the Magican saw. Very well written.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Charlie
Bloody dripping everywhere and my computer screen is getting messed up..Glad you enjoyed. Carol
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No where in a Writer's Manual doe it say your room and equipments needs to be neat and orderly.
Comment from Belinda
Carol, this story reveals to me a lot: your humor, creativity, horizon, willingness to do research, and much more. But why do you call him Frankie instead of his name? Is it a common nickname for such a person? Btw. the last sentence is hilarious!
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Carol, this story reveals to me a lot: your humor, creativity, horizon, willingness to do research, and much more. But why do you call him Frankie instead of his name? Is it a common nickname for such a person? Btw. the last sentence is hilarious!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Belinda ...Because your friend is losing her mind!!!
Because I forgot to change his name...it's done now...Original rough draft and new one didn't quite match...Eagle eye you have my friend. No one else noticed it...The minute I read your review I remembered I hadn't changed it....You made be laugh at myself.....Carol
Comment from mermaids
Hilarious and well written, you had me laughing after the first sentence. This is creative and I do not think you left anything out, May Frankie's body rest in pieces is a great way to end.
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Hilarious and well written, you had me laughing after the first sentence. This is creative and I do not think you left anything out, May Frankie's body rest in pieces is a great way to end.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Mermaids
Glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing it too. Now as long as his friends don't come after me, I'll be okay. Smiles, Carol
Comment from MaureenC
Well Carol, you certainly have started of 2010 with a spurt of creation. This is a fantastic entry to the contest and it covers all the requirements.
I had a lot of giggles as I read the piece.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Maureen
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Well Carol, you certainly have started of 2010 with a spurt of creation. This is a fantastic entry to the contest and it covers all the requirements.
I had a lot of giggles as I read the piece.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Maureen
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
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Maureen
Glad I could make you laugh if only for a bit. I appreciate the review. CArol
