Performance Problems- My Life! LOL
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Showing A Woman, The Moon..."A halarious adventure with misery, but always joy!
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Comment from Jean Lutz
I was beginning to wonder if anything on the field trip would take your attention of Jean. I am glad you got interested in the space ships and moon rocks, but I think she is the clear winner.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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I was beginning to wonder if anything on the field trip would take your attention of Jean. I am glad you got interested in the space ships and moon rocks, but I think she is the clear winner.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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I beleive so too. If you stick with reading this, there are many truely funny stories from two people who had thoughts far above there youthful station of life. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this. MIke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Mike! I can't believe that first moon walk was 40 years ago!! Sheeesh. Good chapter that describes the time well and the continuing relationship with Jean. Couple of minor things...
both of use (us)pushed the limits.
He told us,(no comma) that are(our) plans are ridiculous
Thanks for sharing, Mike.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
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Hello Mike! I can't believe that first moon walk was 40 years ago!! Sheeesh. Good chapter that describes the time well and the continuing relationship with Jean. Couple of minor things...
both of use (us)pushed the limits.
He told us,(no comma) that are(our) plans are ridiculous
Thanks for sharing, Mike.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
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Good eyes Indy! I will make the changes. Thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Granny Gluk
Not many men can even say they've showed a woman the moon. I've never seen someone trying so hard to capture a girls attention. Good Writing!!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Not many men can even say they've showed a woman the moon. I've never seen someone trying so hard to capture a girls attention. Good Writing!!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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I know, I know there is a famous movie line to that effect. Just about all of the stories presented in this are absolutely funny, though not at the time. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
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You're quite welcome Mike.
Comment from Judian James
Very, very sweet ending line Mike. Well done. I do think with this particular bit, you've got one too many "myself"s in the mix: "The second reason was that I was an explorer myself and had a collection of rocks, insects and fungi myself and was always pushing the limits of boundaries myself with my friends" You could actually dispense with two of them. They're superfluous and understood by the reader without repeating. well done
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Very, very sweet ending line Mike. Well done. I do think with this particular bit, you've got one too many "myself"s in the mix: "The second reason was that I was an explorer myself and had a collection of rocks, insects and fungi myself and was always pushing the limits of boundaries myself with my friends" You could actually dispense with two of them. They're superfluous and understood by the reader without repeating. well done
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Thanks, I go back in a short bit and evict myself. We will keep one of me in there, though. LOL Thank you so much for reviewing this and for the compliments. Mike
Comment from jayesnb
I seem to be going backwards instead of forward with this..oh well.. I really like your informative style of writing... I feel like i know more about certain things after reading your chapters... This has a good pace and moves along welll
no spags i saw.
good job.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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I seem to be going backwards instead of forward with this..oh well.. I really like your informative style of writing... I feel like i know more about certain things after reading your chapters... This has a good pace and moves along welll
no spags i saw.
good job.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Yes, you are and that is a problem with doing books on this site, but I see no way around it that is practical. Right now, all chapters are in the postings. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. When a publication is a book you can get a sense of where you are by clicking the chapter index. That has been a great help to me. Mike
Comment from HalfHoff
This is unique -- very entertaining to me, at least. Your stories are always very detailed and I enjoy reading them. Thank you. Lea Ann
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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This is unique -- very entertaining to me, at least. Your stories are always very detailed and I enjoy reading them. Thank you. Lea Ann
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Glad to see ya! I am not only trying to detail the stories, but craft the mood. Believe me, with this girl there will be gobs of laughs. I'll be honest, at a camping trip I got into a fist fight with a horse and he rammed me. This girl did something that made that less painful. It's amazing how a gentle nudge hurts, when it breaks your ribs. LOL
Since they added all of the fancy graphs, I am having a hard time getting my second post to pop up. Have a good evening and thank you so much for reviewing this. Mike
Comment from rhymer1
attention defecate - deficate? surely you must have intended a different word here. In my dictionary, deficate means to void the lower intestine through the anus.
at (jeans) [Jean's) head and - cap and possessive
Mike, you must know that memoirs of folks like you and me are a bore to everyone. Only the memoirs of well known names get read.
BTW: I designed the fingers in the gloves at the Lunar Receiving Laboratory that handled and sorted the moon rocks.
Slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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attention defecate - deficate? surely you must have intended a different word here. In my dictionary, deficate means to void the lower intestine through the anus.
at (jeans) [Jean's) head and - cap and possessive
Mike, you must know that memoirs of folks like you and me are a bore to everyone. Only the memoirs of well known names get read.
BTW: I designed the fingers in the gloves at the Lunar Receiving Laboratory that handled and sorted the moon rocks.
Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Surely I punched in the wrong word with spell check. It's deficit, LOL. I also fixed Jean's.
I really don't like to think of these as memoirs, as there is a story line that follows, but will suddenly change. I am hoping that from this, they glean a few lessons or a better way to consider. Though at my personal expense, these recollections are halirous as this is also a treatise of love... and how it can go so wrong when two people with individual minds feel it. LOL
I was the happiest boy in the world, because I had moon boots and drove my father crazy as he needed them to shovel snow. They were actualy, navel fligh boots that had inflatable bladders in them. To me, the nuts and bolts of the space program are extraordanary and I admired that, I wrote a poem that I will shoot to you in a PM.
Corrections are made and I thank you for them, the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Mike K2,
I like your story. I remember watching the moon landing on TV too--but I was about 4. It's not as clear as I'd like, but I kenw it was a huge deal because the whole family watched it and later the men went outside and smoked cigars and talked in serious voices. :)
You give a good slice of life story here and I enjoyed the read. Here are a few things I noticed--easy fixes. :)
I guess it was my attention defec[i]t[no e] that spotted this and realizing that I might have a decent second shot of her; I immediately pointed my camera at [Jean's] head and clicked the shutter.
along with a sample of the rocks that were collected [on] the moon
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hi Mike K2,
I like your story. I remember watching the moon landing on TV too--but I was about 4. It's not as clear as I'd like, but I kenw it was a huge deal because the whole family watched it and later the men went outside and smoked cigars and talked in serious voices. :)
You give a good slice of life story here and I enjoyed the read. Here are a few things I noticed--easy fixes. :)
I guess it was my attention defec[i]t[no e] that spotted this and realizing that I might have a decent second shot of her; I immediately pointed my camera at [Jean's] head and clicked the shutter.
along with a sample of the rocks that were collected [on] the moon
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thank you very much for your spots, the compliments and this review. Also for sharing your memory. I made the corrections. Mike
