Performance Problems- My Life! LOL
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "- Stalked Or Stalker -"A halarious adventure with misery, but always joy!
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Comment from Jean Lutz
So did you learn anything educational on the field trip? Seems like you are still learning about the opposite sex through memories of a young blond.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2010
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So did you learn anything educational on the field trip? Seems like you are still learning about the opposite sex through memories of a young blond.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2010
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It's funny, I did pay attention and learned. One of the reasons, I was able to be able to go back and recount the field trip. I know about the opposite sex? It really doesn't make sense to me, because of the age. Yet that sense in regards to her was there. I thank you very much for your comments and this review. Mike K2
Comment from Bryana
This was a cute story. I do believe Jean liked you a lot and hiding from you was her way to show it. I didn't have these experiences since I went to an all girl school. It was fun, as I remember.
Mike I enjoyed your story and I'll look for t he next chapter.
Have a wonderful weekend.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
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This was a cute story. I do believe Jean liked you a lot and hiding from you was her way to show it. I didn't have these experiences since I went to an all girl school. It was fun, as I remember.
Mike I enjoyed your story and I'll look for t he next chapter.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
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A critical contrast? A! Should I mention, public school. Unbelievebility is one thing, but this story may cause other problems for me. This is the most involved work and has many consideration to explore. Further complicated as I cansider it for a screen play. For, the memories are very valuable and also sacred. I have five reasons for making it public 1) When I was young, the old people always had them and now I find them absent. 2) I have sort of had, unrequited stuffed up my butt and this story is one argument against avoiding people who have feelings for you. 3) I am having classmate problems as the girls esppecially walk up to me and give me this, "Well" look and then stomp away. They don't know or want to figure out that I lost my ability to recognize them. I want to get out the reasons why to those that honestly care. Maybe it will help me out. 4) This is a beautiful story about a beautiful person that will always be there and I feel, it needs to get out. 5) I would love for the younger kids to be able to read this and possibly gain lessons they could use or a change in mindset.
You also have a wonderful weekend and I did appreciate this review. I thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
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Good luck to you Mike. I always enjoy your writings.
Comment from IndianaIrish
I enjoyed this chapter, Mike, and getting a glimpse of your Jean. An interesting back and forth game you two had at your first meeting. Nicely done.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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I enjoyed this chapter, Mike, and getting a glimpse of your Jean. An interesting back and forth game you two had at your first meeting. Nicely done.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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To me, she was a rare lady and I hope that everyone will get to know her. I really appreciate you compliments and thank you for them and the review. Mike
Comment from Granny Gluk
Good story line. It was easy to follow and the scene transitions were smooth. Jean sounds pretty fickle lol. One minute she's glaring at him for not looking at her the next moment she hiding behind friends.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Good story line. It was easy to follow and the scene transitions were smooth. Jean sounds pretty fickle lol. One minute she's glaring at him for not looking at her the next moment she hiding behind friends.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Oh it just get better in the next four chapters. I enjoy this review and thank you for it. Mike
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You're quite welcome mike. I checked out your portfolio. and found it very interesting. Especially "The Ghost Light"
Comment from Judian James
Hi Mike, I've been travelling for a few weeks and that's why I've been off the site. I missed the beginning of this book, but I remember your mentioning Jean, your first love, to me before. This was a cut little cat-and-mouse time for you two as young kids. well done. Typo in next to the last sentence: "on her hips of arms folded" "of" should be "or".
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hi Mike, I've been travelling for a few weeks and that's why I've been off the site. I missed the beginning of this book, but I remember your mentioning Jean, your first love, to me before. This was a cut little cat-and-mouse time for you two as young kids. well done. Typo in next to the last sentence: "on her hips of arms folded" "of" should be "or".
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thank you for the typo, it is fixed. You mentioned something about that before you left. Rest assured, you have been missed. Both the other chapters are up for review. This is a hard write for me, but I decided to put it out there for several reasons, including that this whole thing, made me who I am and there are other perfromance problems to be done this year. In a few more chapters, it goes to me being a dog, then cat and dog. ? - Yep! I am glad that people find this of value and am suprised at the ratings, usually I fair poorer. I thank you so much for your compliments and this review, and the correction too. Mike
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My pleasure Mike. Happy New Year.
Comment from adewpearl
It is amazing how powerful a childhood crush can be - you sure showed lots of determination. I have people from my childhood for whom I have no pictures, so you are lucky this one survived. Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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It is amazing how powerful a childhood crush can be - you sure showed lots of determination. I have people from my childhood for whom I have no pictures, so you are lucky this one survived. Brooke
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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I'm sorry I had to laugh at the above sentence as there is plenty of force applied as good deeds and gentle nudges go awry. That was an important picture as, I always knew that I took the picture of them on the steps, but didn't believe the memory about chasing her around the field trips. It took a couple of weeks, but was happy to find the prints and negative strips.
As for determination with he, it lasted through out her life. What drove me crazy was she never rejected me, but was terrified of me and told me it isn't the right time to be together. Can't say anymore though.
I thank you cery much for this inspiring review. Mike
Comment from Queenise
Another good and engaging chapter. I think Jean was stalking you also and playing with your emotions. Good imagery,and the story is cute and so kidsy that it takes you back to another time and place when love was more innocent and sweet. Blessings. Hope you continue to post nostalgic pieces. Queenise
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Another good and engaging chapter. I think Jean was stalking you also and playing with your emotions. Good imagery,and the story is cute and so kidsy that it takes you back to another time and place when love was more innocent and sweet. Blessings. Hope you continue to post nostalgic pieces. Queenise
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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It starts that early? LOL I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Yes, I will work very hard at posting these chapters. Mike
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Yes it starts that early,Mike. You're welcome. Queenise
Comment from Rama Rao
Since I haven't read the first chapter I thought it would be unjust on my part to grade this anything less than 5 stars. However, if the chapter were to stand alone, it had nothing interesting to offer, except the strange behaviour of the girl.
Incidentally this behaviour pattern doesn't change when they grow up to be women. If we ignore then, they get offended, and if we get close to them, they become cautious and evaluate us.
I'll wait for your third chapter.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Since I haven't read the first chapter I thought it would be unjust on my part to grade this anything less than 5 stars. However, if the chapter were to stand alone, it had nothing interesting to offer, except the strange behaviour of the girl.
Incidentally this behaviour pattern doesn't change when they grow up to be women. If we ignore then, they get offended, and if we get close to them, they become cautious and evaluate us.
I'll wait for your third chapter.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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I am not putting this out here for ratings and in fact I willing will take any hits that come my way. Because this is a combination of life and lessons, I doubt that there will be one stand alone chapter presented. I do have a couple of people that are willing to follow this through and give me an overall opinion in the end. I do appreciate this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi mike, interesting cat and mouse game going on here. I could visualize the scene well. Been through the same I guess. Are you writing your life story? Check these:
When she was distracted [again], she once [again] found me at her side and the second she spied me, ran away. - two 'again' too close together. Maybe try:
The next time she was distracted, she once again found me at her side, and the second she spied me, she ran away.
"Hi, Jean!" [then] her mouth dropped and she blushed - consider delete 'then'
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hi mike, interesting cat and mouse game going on here. I could visualize the scene well. Been through the same I guess. Are you writing your life story? Check these:
When she was distracted [again], she once [again] found me at her side and the second she spied me, ran away. - two 'again' too close together. Maybe try:
The next time she was distracted, she once again found me at her side, and the second she spied me, she ran away.
"Hi, Jean!" [then] her mouth dropped and she blushed - consider delete 'then'
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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To be honest, these memories are sacred to me and I don't want to share them, but my reasoning has come together to do just that. Lately, I have been heart broken, it isn't over a person, but the way many people are. I usually end up at the wayside. I think there is a better way and felt obligated to share it. Maybe I am a cook, but I feel that many relationships are spiritual and if people can requite things, despite any limitations a relationship would present, the various interrelationships would make for a much better and happier life for all involved. It also drive me nuts that after twenty five years, I still have the exact same problems with classmates. The girl walk up to me and give me this well look and stomp off. They just don't realize that I lost the ability to recognize any of them. It not the same with the guys as the clue me in and I am sort of able to BS my way of recognizing them. LOL
I assured you that every part of this is a writing headache. I don't know if too many people will find this believeable, but some extraordiany things occured and offer challenges. A sixth grade dream that was too mature, I have to get across the emotional impact and how it influenced me in both that love and also with spiritualality of a friend. If I don't do a good job, I might as well show everybody a porno tape. One the other hand, a year later, I present it as pure porno, with a religious twist and I have to bring the passion into a high form, yet we are talking footsies. This is one horrible blast!
In the later chapters, each have their demands. If you read this, you will know me. The other purpose is that this is sort of a lynch pin for other, "Performance Problems, " about caring for my mother and people dying. They have a higher value. I do assure you that each of these have their humor. This one has screne play imagery as I have future thoughts.
I am very happy over this review and thank you for this review, your suggested changes and the compliments. With love, Mike
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you are welcome mike. i'll try to keep up with the coming chapters.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
HOW TOUGH IT WAS TAKING A PHOTO!
It is a simply, cohesively and freely expressed non-fiction I enjoyed the organised presentation, convincing and narrative style with clarity of thematic percolation having catchy introduction, curious ending with a pause for thought, as it is an easy funny read.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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HOW TOUGH IT WAS TAKING A PHOTO!
It is a simply, cohesively and freely expressed non-fiction I enjoyed the organised presentation, convincing and narrative style with clarity of thematic percolation having catchy introduction, curious ending with a pause for thought, as it is an easy funny read.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Wow! This is the first review that I can say this, "What incredable language you have presented in this review!" Definitely one that I thank you for and will use as an inspiration, as well the compliments.
I regret that first, I posted this as a poem and deleted it as I wanted to keep things right. Though I can't post the next chapter, I will do so tommorow.
That isn't my worst child photography story. In Photography school, I was doing a child portrature assignment with a view camera. I couldn't find the child in the ground glass that I was focusing on and wondered where he went to. That question was answered, when I felt the tremendous pain to the groin. LOL if it isn't you.
Mike
