The Voracious One
When it's time . . . it's time.80 total reviews
Comment from jadapenn
No sixer, sorry, my friend. You get me all tied up in knots just so he can cut his sub in half. Heck, this is good thinking.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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No sixer, sorry, my friend. You get me all tied up in knots just so he can cut his sub in half. Heck, this is good thinking.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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LOL...Thanks for the wonderful review, Jada...Bob
Comment from Diny
Like it alot- I wish the examole was as good as yours- haha- Oh, and someone wise told me not to teell everyone what was happening or your thoughts- rather show them- I'd take out the first line of Author notes- and use that as a catchy response!- haha Share- geeze I feel like that now- I 'm starving.... Hummmmm Di
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Like it alot- I wish the examole was as good as yours- haha- Oh, and someone wise told me not to teell everyone what was happening or your thoughts- rather show them- I'd take out the first line of Author notes- and use that as a catchy response!- haha Share- geeze I feel like that now- I 'm starving.... Hummmmm Di
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Diny. I am glad you liked this..(I'mnot sure what you want me to do with that sharing line? LOL...I am only allowed fifty words in the body of the piece. Are you saying take it out altogether? And why? LOL..Bob
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Bob,
This is interesting.
This must have been a challenge.
I like the image.
I like the title.
I liked your line: "his eyes glazed over like frosted marbles"
Good luck in the contest.
Good job.
Katie
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Bob,
This is interesting.
This must have been a challenge.
I like the image.
I like the title.
I liked your line: "his eyes glazed over like frosted marbles"
Good luck in the contest.
Good job.
Katie
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks, Katie. I appreciate your review very much as usual...Bob
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You're welcome Bob.
Katie
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Bob...I can't believe that is all there is to this story! I know thems the rules but I was expecting a real horror story! Your humor is showing in this write! Well done and good luck in the contest.....chey
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hi Bob...I can't believe that is all there is to this story! I know thems the rules but I was expecting a real horror story! Your humor is showing in this write! Well done and good luck in the contest.....chey
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Yeah, Chey. I know...I was restricted by fifty word limit, you know. I am glad you liked what was there though...LOL...Bob
Comment from KelinaJ
Well, my! My! That was a masterful bit of wordplay. The end was a great twist. Especially with the accompanying image, I expected a tale of horror. Great Job!!!
Good luck in the contest!!!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Well, my! My! That was a masterful bit of wordplay. The end was a great twist. Especially with the accompanying image, I expected a tale of horror. Great Job!!!
Good luck in the contest!!!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hi, Neighbor! thanks for the nice review. Yes, they only gave me fifty words to work with so I mhad to make them all count...LOL...Bob
Comment from another jim
Good one, Bob! Lots to like about this short piece, including your title, description line, and author notes. The centerpiece, of course, was your clever story. Well told, with great descriptions. Made me "hungry" for more!
Thanks for sharing your mini-saga! Good luck in the contest...Jim.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Good one, Bob! Lots to like about this short piece, including your title, description line, and author notes. The centerpiece, of course, was your clever story. Well told, with great descriptions. Made me "hungry" for more!
Thanks for sharing your mini-saga! Good luck in the contest...Jim.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks so much, Jim...Good luck to you, also. Bob
Comment from Mrs Jones
I di not realise this was a 50 word contest so I geared myself for a juicy mystery murder. And then I laughed like a hyena. I don't normally laugh at 5am, but thanks Bobbie for making my day. Brilliant. Wish I had a six for you.
xxxxx
Rose
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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I di not realise this was a 50 word contest so I geared myself for a juicy mystery murder. And then I laughed like a hyena. I don't normally laugh at 5am, but thanks Bobbie for making my day. Brilliant. Wish I had a six for you.
xxxxx
Rose
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks, Rosie...LOL...Gotrcha, huh? Bobbie XXX
Comment from Readywriter52
The story has drama, suspence, and intrigue in it. It draws the reader into the story with the first line. It ends with the person cutting the sub.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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The story has drama, suspence, and intrigue in it. It draws the reader into the story with the first line. It ends with the person cutting the sub.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks so much, Readywriter. I am always so glad to hear what you think of my writing...Sincerely...Bob
Comment from babylonia
bob,
lmao he wasn't about to share. he wanted to make sure he could get his big mouth around it. LOL nicely done. made me smile and giggle. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
good luck~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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bob,
lmao he wasn't about to share. he wanted to make sure he could get his big mouth around it. LOL nicely done. made me smile and giggle. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
good luck~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks Barb....Maybe I will see you at the booth then...Do you have a horse in this race..? Bob
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bob,
no, i don't but i will probably do one anyway in a couple of days just to exercise my brain. i do have a few contests coming up. i think we are both in them. we'll see. :P
hope you are doing well.
love,
barbara
Comment from Shirley B
Okay you got me,I just knew he was going to do something horrible! Then I laughed out loud when you said then he cut his sandwich. I loved it. Good luck in the contest. Like you need the money! :-) Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Okay you got me,I just knew he was going to do something horrible! Then I laughed out loud when you said then he cut his sandwich. I loved it. Good luck in the contest. Like you need the money! :-) Shirley
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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LOL...Yeah, I do....How do you think I am able to keep posting these damned things....LOL...Thanks, Shirl...Bob
