Comment from nor84

Excellent

I just realized the picture is Janet Leigh in Psycho! Oh well, showing my age here.

Great one, Bob. Italian sub indeed!

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010

LOL...Thanks, Norma...He could be hungry? No? LOL...Bob

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

HAHAHAHA!! This is a great 50 worder, Bob. I love reading twists in these very short stories. This is excellent and I wish you the best of luck!
Indy :>)

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thanks so much, Indy....Bob

Comment from jason456

Excellent

Hi Bob,
You had me scared to death in just a few seconds. What a great short thrill with a very funny ending. Good luck in the contest.
Patti :)

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

LOL...good, Patti...then my trick worked...Bob

Comment from sherrygreywolf

Excellent

Not just a mini-saga, but a mini-saga with a twist! Great job. Maybe the guy was shaking and had glazed eyes because his blood sugar was low? No changes needed.

good work - sherry

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thanks, Sherry....Bob

Comment from ZigzagMLT

Excellent

Well done. Had me fooled. Wasn't sure what he was going to do. Good suspense. Nice sandwich, I hope.

Good one. Best of luck in the contest.

Thanks!
Zigzagmlt

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thanks, Zig....Bob

Comment from Colin Douglas

Excellent

Extraordinarily fun fifty word story. It sets the reader's spine tingling right from the beginning and then shouts BOO! And laughs. And laughs.

Good job.

Colin

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thank you Colin....Bob

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

This was really great. I was wondering who he was going to kill. You got me with the twist at the end. He could send half of the sandwich my way. Great job.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thanks so much, FW. Funny...People in the UK do not know what a "sub sandwich is" One guy even asked me if an "Italian sub was a gangster or a person of some kind?" LOL...Bob

Comment from MaureenC

Excellent

Bob, you have integrated a touch of humour here in this piece. I was ready for a -gun - glock, whatever, but never a knife to cut a sub.
Great work.
Blessings
Maureen

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thank you, Maureen Gotcha! Bob

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Bob,

Yes I do just hate it when that happens. The tyranny of the blank page/screen.

Enough already. Certainly conveys your story, though I was left wonder what exactly happened. Is the Italian sub a person? Or an object?

Patrick

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

.A sub is a sandwich...An Italian sub is filled with lunch meat and stuff...LOl..So sorry, I should have made that more clear perhaps, Patrick...Thanks so much for your review...Bob

Comment from ladybird

Excellent

This is very good, considering you only had fifty words to work on. The last words leave the reader in limbo, wanting to read more. The artwork fitted it beautifully.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thanks so much, ladybird....Bob

reply by ladybird on 08-Jan-2010

You're welcome.