Blind Trust
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Bring It On"A woman is stalked by a fan
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Comment from bookishfabler
Leaving his bags at the entry to the hallway, he headed for the kitchen, calling her name.
Cathy leaned against the counter, one hand gripping the handle of Kip's harness, the other fluttering about her throat.
(Evil Eddie is back- skip a line)
Evidently the gal we bought (it) from was quite the socialite and local hostess.
Little by little, I will take a looksee. I see the romance crawling in. Now, personally, I get a call like those, I would be calling hte police.
hugs
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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Leaving his bags at the entry to the hallway, he headed for the kitchen, calling her name.
Cathy leaned against the counter, one hand gripping the handle of Kip's harness, the other fluttering about her throat.
(Evil Eddie is back- skip a line)
Evidently the gal we bought (it) from was quite the socialite and local hostess.
Little by little, I will take a looksee. I see the romance crawling in. Now, personally, I get a call like those, I would be calling hte police.
hugs
book
Comment Written 22-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2010
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My God, it stopped raining! I thought it was a permanent state. Heidi, I'm soggy for sure. I love your reviews, m'dear, as well as the edit helps but I hate to see you taking time like this for no bucks. If you don't see something that needs correcting, you can just read and enjoy! You'll be getting the finished product once it's published anyway!
Thanks so much and we'll talk soon,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Allezw2
Lady Gayle,
The secret lover seems to have a block in the vocabulary department, regressing to the limited quad-lettered epithets.
Funny to think how they were pushing the wonder of TV phones way back in the immediate post WWII era.
Think how much fun it would have been to see this character going red and blue in the face.
So we have a real psycho on the line. Hot diggety, suspense and menace in the offing.
A stolen dog was so much simpler.
Nicely done,
Fantasist
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
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Lady Gayle,
The secret lover seems to have a block in the vocabulary department, regressing to the limited quad-lettered epithets.
Funny to think how they were pushing the wonder of TV phones way back in the immediate post WWII era.
Think how much fun it would have been to see this character going red and blue in the face.
So we have a real psycho on the line. Hot diggety, suspense and menace in the offing.
A stolen dog was so much simpler.
Nicely done,
Fantasist
Comment Written 13-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
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Yeah, he's nuts and he's furious, a very bad combination. Wheee, here we go!
Thanks for the great R&R,
Gayle
Comment from RenieReader
Oh, ye gads, that dude is beyond psycho. You gave me chills from head to toe and back again. Brrr. I'm so glad you've got more chapters coming fast. Way to go, gal.
Let's [let==>allow] it go to the machine and see if he'll leave a message."
"If you go down the hall and turn [left] into the dining room,
Hugs,
Renie
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
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Oh, ye gads, that dude is beyond psycho. You gave me chills from head to toe and back again. Brrr. I'm so glad you've got more chapters coming fast. Way to go, gal.
Let's [let==>allow] it go to the machine and see if he'll leave a message."
"If you go down the hall and turn [left] into the dining room,
Hugs,
Renie
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
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Blush!! See, that's what you get when you start enjoying your work! I don't know about anyone else, but when I write stuff like this man, you think YOU're scared? Just think, I have to sleep with him!
Thanks for the catches and the great review!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from c_lucas
This is another well written chapter fortifying the bond between Cathy and Rudy. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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This is another well written chapter fortifying the bond between Cathy and Rudy. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hey Charlie,
Glad you're enjoying this one. It's very interesting to write! Thanks again,
Gayle
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You're welcome, Gayle. Charlie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again a well written chapter. I am beginning to wonder if you ever even have a typo. No matter how much I proofread it seems I still overlook somethng. Very good plot, dialogue and characer development.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Once again a well written chapter. I am beginning to wonder if you ever even have a typo. No matter how much I proofread it seems I still overlook somethng. Very good plot, dialogue and characer development.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Hi Barbara,
Thank you for the high praise. I surely appreciate it and thank you for the encouragement. Sometimes writing can be a lonely life!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from patmedium
MORE, PLEASE! I don't want to have to wait for more!
Strong, likeable characters.
Clear emotions.
Vividly painted pictures in my mind!
Congratulations.
No criticism. Pat.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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MORE, PLEASE! I don't want to have to wait for more!
Strong, likeable characters.
Clear emotions.
Vividly painted pictures in my mind!
Congratulations.
No criticism. Pat.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Here ya go, Pat! Just posted another one!
So glad you liked, and I think there's still some bucks on earlier chapters.
Thanks for the encouraging words! You made my day!
Gayle
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NOT worried about bucks... unless, of course, they fill my aged eyes properly and make me drool! lol! Pat.
Comment from ZigzagMLT
Love this story. Can't wait to see where it goes. Like the love bit that's shaping up here. It seems so natural, so right. Well described. I could keep on reading.
One note: it's fajitas
Thanks!
Zigzagmlt
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Love this story. Can't wait to see where it goes. Like the love bit that's shaping up here. It seems so natural, so right. Well described. I could keep on reading.
One note: it's fajitas
Thanks!
Zigzagmlt
Comment Written 05-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Oh boy, how did I spell that? Yikes, I will go back and fix as soon as I think you for catching it and for the wonderful comments. You made my day!
Gayle
Comment from joelh605
Hmmm - Bad Bo Peeper is a long way over the top, eh?
for whatever reason, why would he call you at all? No, I think it's someone else."
The innocent, clueless reader wishes to interject, "..or some other reason!!" - which is exactly what you want, you sly cruel author you! ;-)
"I finally met her at one of my gallery showings last year. She's still the hostess with the mostess.
The title originated with a woman named Perle Mesta sometime in the Roosevelt - Truman - Eisenhower era, and it was spelled "..with the mostest" at the time.
Until tomorrow,
Joel
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Hmmm - Bad Bo Peeper is a long way over the top, eh?
for whatever reason, why would he call you at all? No, I think it's someone else."
The innocent, clueless reader wishes to interject, "..or some other reason!!" - which is exactly what you want, you sly cruel author you! ;-)
"I finally met her at one of my gallery showings last year. She's still the hostess with the mostess.
The title originated with a woman named Perle Mesta sometime in the Roosevelt - Truman - Eisenhower era, and it was spelled "..with the mostest" at the time.
Until tomorrow,
Joel
Comment Written 04-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Hey Joel,
So, it's mostest? Okay, I can do that!
I'm thrilled that I've captured your interest with this one. It's only about half done, so I'm building as I go!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Readywriter52
I'm guessing the angry man on the phone is Nathan. I can't think of a more effective way to drive two people together than making threatening phone calls. Cathy and Rudy seem together great. Something is bothering Rudy and I'm sure we'll find out later what it is. They need to get away to protect Cathy. The story is well told and interesting.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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I'm guessing the angry man on the phone is Nathan. I can't think of a more effective way to drive two people together than making threatening phone calls. Cathy and Rudy seem together great. Something is bothering Rudy and I'm sure we'll find out later what it is. They need to get away to protect Cathy. The story is well told and interesting.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Thanks for the great comments and fine review. I really appreciate your input and continued support.
Gayle
Comment from Dave M
Gayle,
Sounds like somebody's out of control. I guess he'll try something, but that wouldn't be wise. And something I learned long ago: If you're going to do something, just do it. Don't ever threaten, because it makes you sound weak.
I enjoyed this read and really liked being able to read four chapters in quick succession. Sometimes, Fanstory's enforced quick bites of a novel leave me dissatisfied.
I have one suggestion:
"Choking on his hysteria, they heard the shrieking, furious tones, frightening as he struggled to get his voice under control." The caller, not Cathy or Rudy, was choking on his hysteria. I think the sentence could be improved by leaving that first phrase out, like so: "They heard the mysterious caller's shrieking, furious tones, frightening as he struggled to get his voice under control."
Dave
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Gayle,
Sounds like somebody's out of control. I guess he'll try something, but that wouldn't be wise. And something I learned long ago: If you're going to do something, just do it. Don't ever threaten, because it makes you sound weak.
I enjoyed this read and really liked being able to read four chapters in quick succession. Sometimes, Fanstory's enforced quick bites of a novel leave me dissatisfied.
I have one suggestion:
"Choking on his hysteria, they heard the shrieking, furious tones, frightening as he struggled to get his voice under control." The caller, not Cathy or Rudy, was choking on his hysteria. I think the sentence could be improved by leaving that first phrase out, like so: "They heard the mysterious caller's shrieking, furious tones, frightening as he struggled to get his voice under control."
Dave
Comment Written 04-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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You're right on, Dave. I'll adjust accordingly.
I agree, sometimes the enforced small doses can get old, especially if something is going on in the book that you want to get to the bottom of!
And I agree. If you're gonna do it, just do. Threatening just makes people aware of your intentions. Sneak up on 'em, I say, blindside them! Oops, pun intended!
Hugs,
Gayle
