Transformation
a poem written in alexandrines37 total reviews
Comment from daniela.albu
The alexandrines convey gravity to this poem and suit its subject. The reference to Jacob and the ladder theme accompanies the reader in this interesting journey of faith regained.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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The alexandrines convey gravity to this poem and suit its subject. The reference to Jacob and the ladder theme accompanies the reader in this interesting journey of faith regained.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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Yes, I have always found that story interesting. There's a slight parallel in the Qur'an, Sura (Chapter) 17, to Muhammad night ride into Heaven. Thanks for noticing the intention of the alexandrines (they work much better in French, but I thought I would try them in English here.) Thanks for a good and intelligent review.
Comment from Janalea
I enjoyed this very much so! You did a very good job. I can tell a lot of hard work went into this.Thanks for explaining the rhyme scheme. Very challenging and original. Thanks, Janalea
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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I enjoyed this very much so! You did a very good job. I can tell a lot of hard work went into this.Thanks for explaining the rhyme scheme. Very challenging and original. Thanks, Janalea
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Thank you for noticing all the hard work that went into this. I appreciate it.
Comment from RhiannonD
Well there's no hope of me finding a mistake in this piece, I can barely understand your explanation without a dictionary. But let me say this: You have described my own journey to faith within these lines and I was deeply moved. I should have saved the six stars for this one. I am amazed by the detail. I am assuming 'with a turn at the beginning of the fourth stanza' means that the poem took a new direction ie. from despair to hope?
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Well there's no hope of me finding a mistake in this piece, I can barely understand your explanation without a dictionary. But let me say this: You have described my own journey to faith within these lines and I was deeply moved. I should have saved the six stars for this one. I am amazed by the detail. I am assuming 'with a turn at the beginning of the fourth stanza' means that the poem took a new direction ie. from despair to hope?
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Exactly. It has the structure of a Biblical psalm.
If you want to change the rating, It's actually very easy to change the review or rating of a work at any time. I do it often on Sunday when I receive my allotment of four six stars reviews. Of course, each time I do that, I lose a six star rating for the week beginning on said Sunday.
Go to My Menu in the upper left hand corner of the screen. Scroll down to My Feedback and from the drop-down menu, select Reviews I Wrote. All the reviews you have written will come up, and you scroll down to the one you want to change. Click on Edit Review in the lower RIGHT hand screen of the review; you then can change the wording of the review or the rating.
Of course, I am not asking you to revise the review or the rating; I am just explaining how it can be done after the factâ??it's helped me correct many a mistake.
Thanks for a very understanding review. In terms of poetics, this poem is very difficult, but in terms of faith it is very simple--Once I was blind, but now I see.
Thanks for a great review.
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Thank you for raising the rating.
Comment from toni guerrero
Wow, excellant poem. Your poem had good flow and good strong statements. I would recommend your poem to others to read. Keep up the good work,and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Wow, excellant poem. Your poem had good flow and good strong statements. I would recommend your poem to others to read. Keep up the good work,and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Thank you for such a good review. Please feel free to recommend the poem to others. I would appreciate it.
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you are very welcome.
Comment from Nicki_Mist
Great form and flow and rhythm. Your meaning here used wonderful word usage and the metaphors were great. I am so glad that you turned your life around and gave it to God for he can heal all things and forever be there for us. Keep writing and praising God.
Nicole
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Great form and flow and rhythm. Your meaning here used wonderful word usage and the metaphors were great. I am so glad that you turned your life around and gave it to God for he can heal all things and forever be there for us. Keep writing and praising God.
Nicole
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from fictionwriter
What a great little poem. I think it's a path so many have followed, from the depths of despair and sin, to the faith and wonder of Him. Great job.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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What a great little poem. I think it's a path so many have followed, from the depths of despair and sin, to the faith and wonder of Him. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Oatmeal
AlvinTEthington,
The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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AlvinTEthington,
The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a good review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from jlsavell
AlvinTEthington, I find this poem well written. It flowed with such spiritual grace and beauty. I can appreciate the time and effort it took to create such an eloquent work.
Thank you also for the author's notes. It is wonderful when such knowledge and expertise is shared. That is the wondrful thing about fanstory..well done..jlsavell
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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AlvinTEthington, I find this poem well written. It flowed with such spiritual grace and beauty. I can appreciate the time and effort it took to create such an eloquent work.
Thank you also for the author's notes. It is wonderful when such knowledge and expertise is shared. That is the wondrful thing about fanstory..well done..jlsavell
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Thank you for such a good review. I truly appreciate it.
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you are welcome
Comment from North Country Girl
I do appreciate how difficult this must have been to write. So the internal rhyme of each line is part of the structure? I am not so familiar as you are of these forms. I think you did an amazing job.
I can find no errors. However, sometimes it seemed so constrained that I wanted you to "fling off" the chains and let the words fly. Just me. Thanks for sharing this poem.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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I do appreciate how difficult this must have been to write. So the internal rhyme of each line is part of the structure? I am not so familiar as you are of these forms. I think you did an amazing job.
I can find no errors. However, sometimes it seemed so constrained that I wanted you to "fling off" the chains and let the words fly. Just me. Thanks for sharing this poem.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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The internal rhyming was my idea, I believe. Normally I stay within the structure of the poetic form. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from Ann Smith
I can see this wasn't easy to write. I had a hard time just keeping up with the format much less writing something like this. I appreciate your testimony of faith. The voice is clear with much detail. You are right we are suppose to share our faith because what good is it if we hide it under a bushel? Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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I can see this wasn't easy to write. I had a hard time just keeping up with the format much less writing something like this. I appreciate your testimony of faith. The voice is clear with much detail. You are right we are suppose to share our faith because what good is it if we hide it under a bushel? Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
