Epiphanies for a New Age
reflective quatrains105 total reviews
Comment from KelinaJ
Simple yet appropriate image selection. Pleasing color scheme. The rhythm and rhyme of the piece is smooth. That's quite a truth you talk about. Excellent Job.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Simple yet appropriate image selection. Pleasing color scheme. The rhythm and rhyme of the piece is smooth. That's quite a truth you talk about. Excellent Job.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Kelina - it has been quite a while! I hope you're doing well :-) Brooke
Comment from Siren_116
Very nicely written as always!
Congrats on first place 2009!
Looks like you are on your way to first place 2010!
Best of luck to you!
Siren AKA Lorraine
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Very nicely written as always!
Congrats on first place 2009!
Looks like you are on your way to first place 2010!
Best of luck to you!
Siren AKA Lorraine
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Lorraine, with so many people promoting poems above a dollar, I don't count on anything in the rankings this year, but hey, when I joined this site, I had no idea rankings existed, so I'm just not even going to think about that :-) Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke
Comment from raw form
Brooke I can feel your vibe on this I always look back at where I was I just don't stare at it because my best days are still ahead of me. Thanks for reminding me with this poem.
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Brooke I can feel your vibe on this I always look back at where I was I just don't stare at it because my best days are still ahead of me. Thanks for reminding me with this poem.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Happy New Year! It is so good to hear from you :-) Thank you, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from Wild Flower
I agree with you completely on this one. This is a wonderful poem, well- written and it flows so easily. It's a really nice read Brooke.
(Congrats on being Poet of the year! You'd have gotten my vote if we were allowed to vote on it.)
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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I agree with you completely on this one. This is a wonderful poem, well- written and it flows so easily. It's a really nice read Brooke.
(Congrats on being Poet of the year! You'd have gotten my vote if we were allowed to vote on it.)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Wild Flower, for your review and for your wonderful comments!!! Brooke :-)
Comment from flygirl254
This is an excellent poem, and quite thought-provoking. You've done a terrific job of wrapping your meaning neatly within stanzas and lines that flow well and read well aloud with a good rhythm that takes you through effortlessly to the end. Especially because of the length of your lines and the words you've chosen for the end of the last lines of each stanza, there is a very natural pause between each stanza that leaves the reader just enough time to think they never really realized the reality. I understand that in the first stanza, rules of grammar have you putting an "s" on "minds" which upsets the rhyme scheme, but only negligibly. As a suggestion, I know the "s" is because you are dealing with plurals, but a grammar case could be made for dropping the "s" because the word "their" the way you've used it could infer individuals in the group you're speaking of, and therefore "mind" could be singular instead. Just a thought for the rhyme scheme. Finally, my favorite stanza by far is the second. Your reference to people who believe they already have all the answers so they can never learn anything new is great, but even more I like, "who discount possibilities and only look to what's behind." This evokes feelings of exasperation that are very strong. It is exasperation toward people who think the past is the only way to live because they managed to come through it. Great work on this poem! Sorry I got so wordy with you...I just think there is so much in this piece, it's amazing!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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This is an excellent poem, and quite thought-provoking. You've done a terrific job of wrapping your meaning neatly within stanzas and lines that flow well and read well aloud with a good rhythm that takes you through effortlessly to the end. Especially because of the length of your lines and the words you've chosen for the end of the last lines of each stanza, there is a very natural pause between each stanza that leaves the reader just enough time to think they never really realized the reality. I understand that in the first stanza, rules of grammar have you putting an "s" on "minds" which upsets the rhyme scheme, but only negligibly. As a suggestion, I know the "s" is because you are dealing with plurals, but a grammar case could be made for dropping the "s" because the word "their" the way you've used it could infer individuals in the group you're speaking of, and therefore "mind" could be singular instead. Just a thought for the rhyme scheme. Finally, my favorite stanza by far is the second. Your reference to people who believe they already have all the answers so they can never learn anything new is great, but even more I like, "who discount possibilities and only look to what's behind." This evokes feelings of exasperation that are very strong. It is exasperation toward people who think the past is the only way to live because they managed to come through it. Great work on this poem! Sorry I got so wordy with you...I just think there is so much in this piece, it's amazing!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Their mind - that kind of construction has always just gone through my nerves - I spent a few decades teaching students not to say things like that, just one of my own little pet peeves. On the other hand, it has never bothered me to have a word with an s and another without an S rhyme, and I know THAT really bothers some other people. I've had people say to me sing/wings does not rhyme, and my thought is always, in what universe don't they rhyme? LOL It all boils down to personal preference. :-) Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments and input!!! Brooke
Comment from Charlene0513
To adewpearl,
A poem that speaks especially to those that believe and have the faith to realize that all people have principals to which they stand for and the blessings unfold when we follow our hearts.
Charlene
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To adewpearl,
A poem that speaks especially to those that believe and have the faith to realize that all people have principals to which they stand for and the blessings unfold when we follow our hearts.
Charlene
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Charlene, for your most thoughtful response to this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from DrCarter2001
Hi Brooke, an excellent verse here , with nice double meaning behind the epiphany. The rhythm flows well and I didn't find any errors or nits here. Great job.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hi Brooke, an excellent verse here , with nice double meaning behind the epiphany. The rhythm flows well and I didn't find any errors or nits here. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from MJMuraco
Brooke, like you, I am a dreamer and have high hopes for mankind. I'm always searching for more than what I get at my job, yet I work with many people who are realists and refuse to see beyond that. This poem is nicely written and thanks for your author notes. I did celebrate the Epiphany on Sunday. It is one of my favorite stories.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Brooke, like you, I am a dreamer and have high hopes for mankind. I'm always searching for more than what I get at my job, yet I work with many people who are realists and refuse to see beyond that. This poem is nicely written and thanks for your author notes. I did celebrate the Epiphany on Sunday. It is one of my favorite stories.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Mary Jayne. I appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from DeboraDyess
Hey, Brooke. Great poem, wonderful meaning. I needed that rright about now. Life is getting pretty hard, and it's easier to just shut down and go through the motions than to keep my heart and mind alive and open. I needed to read your words tonight.
Just to let you know, I'm going to make 4 a more common ranking in my ratings. I doubt it will affect you much, but I want a 5 to really mean 'outstanding', and obviously all work cannot be above the average. Of course, most of yours is, so you'll probably not notice a big change. But should the time come when you see a 4 and my name, just know that's not a bad comment on your work. Just trying to get to a rating system that's more realistic. Feel free to rate me harder as well.
Have a blessed New Year, Deb
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Hey, Brooke. Great poem, wonderful meaning. I needed that rright about now. Life is getting pretty hard, and it's easier to just shut down and go through the motions than to keep my heart and mind alive and open. I needed to read your words tonight.
Just to let you know, I'm going to make 4 a more common ranking in my ratings. I doubt it will affect you much, but I want a 5 to really mean 'outstanding', and obviously all work cannot be above the average. Of course, most of yours is, so you'll probably not notice a big change. But should the time come when you see a 4 and my name, just know that's not a bad comment on your work. Just trying to get to a rating system that's more realistic. Feel free to rate me harder as well.
Have a blessed New Year, Deb
Comment Written 05-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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I only give fours when something is wrong, not just when it's not outstanding. I would never adjust my rating just because a reviewer was rating more harshly - it's just not part of my philosophy. I give fours when people violate the rules of a poetic form, for instance, or because of a preponderance of SPAG problems in a poem or prose. We each come to our own understanding of the way to rate, but I personally see no reason to downgrade unless I can point to specific errors, and more than just one. Life is too short to make people feel bad. :-)
Thanks for your review, Deb. And Happy New Year to you too! Brooke
Comment from honeytree
The art work is just wonderful, and the words speak so loudly for love and peace to be within our world. We all should look towards peace and love within our world instead of hate and war.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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The art work is just wonderful, and the words speak so loudly for love and peace to be within our world. We all should look towards peace and love within our world instead of hate and war.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010
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Annie, thank you! I so appreciate your gracious review :-) Brooke
