Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hello adewpearl,

I read this poem and enjoyed it. I liked the scheme, it flowed nice with a mixture of rhyming and then other things that made the lines feel safe, like I wasn't lost or wondering where I was. The story part of the poem has a bitter sweet... warm hushing, yet foreshadow of the future that I liked.

I enjoyed this.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

This is so beautiful. Filled with truth and light. The great story. I watched a nativity movie the other day and it was so real. Your poem reminded me of it. The imagery is great. "To bring new hope to those forlorn." sounds like my salvation experience. Thanks for sharing this.
Carol

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

Comment from jlivory

Excellent

adewpearl,

This is so warm and tender. The message is well understood and the artwork adds to the beauty of the whole concept. Good luck in the contest! Have a Merry Xmas and Happy New Year!

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

Comment from skye

Excellent

What a lovely form, almost forms a lullabye, for our Savior.
I enjoyed every well crafted line. Your words resonated. There are no suggestions for improvement, as this was very well done.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009

Thank you, Skye - I so appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke

Comment from Gaye Hemsley

Excellent

Hi Brooke What a wonderful Christmas poem, Rhyming as usual is excellent. A hope lots of people read it to be inspired by your Christmas message. Great choice of artwork. Cheers Gaye

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009

Thank you, Gaye - I'm so glad you found meaning in this :-) Brooke

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

You are wonderful at expressing wonder, Brooke. I like that, instead of insistently proclaiming faith, you express what leads to it. That may not sound like an obvious comment regarding this particular poem, but I believe it is an excellent example of what I mean. Good wishes and a smile from across the globe :-).

Mike

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Thank you, Mike - I do think I know what you mean, and it is intentional. I so appreciate this most perceptive read of my poetry :-) Brooke

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Adewpearl - Your poem is beautiful. You tell the story very nicely about Jesus being born and the things that will be expected of Him as He grows. Everything about it is wonderful written. Kat

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Thanks so much, Kat - I really appreciate your kind words :-) Brooke

Comment from RebelRose

Excellent

I love this poem. Such warmth and truth it imparts. Tghe lines have a smooth flow and the imagery is good. I love the accompanying photo.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Thank you, Rebel Rose. I'm pleased you enjoyed this Christmas poem :-) Brooke

Comment from poetknowit

Excellent

Truly beautiful and ringing with truth in one's soul. Reading it touched a deep place in my soul.

I am not that poetically literate and not too familiar with different poetic forms, but I loved your rhymes and word choices.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Thank you, poet :-) I love the rondeau form so am pleased you enjoyed this :-) Brooke

Comment from L.lora

Excellent

A very nice and appropriate
poem for the season. You've
filled this with sentiments
from the heart and warmth.
The flow is easy and made for
an enjoyable read. Lora

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Thank you, Lora - I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke