Remembering Rusty
About a gorgeous Quarter horse gelding...18 total reviews
Comment from Trybuck
A great tribute to Rusty. Too bad he had to die that way but accidents happen all too often, at least you got to spend some wonderful years with him.. Good one, Buck
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A great tribute to Rusty. Too bad he had to die that way but accidents happen all too often, at least you got to spend some wonderful years with him.. Good one, Buck
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Hi there, yes, I try to look at it that way...but none of our current horses compare...seems there are just certain things, that only come along once in your lifetime...so...thank you very much for reading this, and your great review Buck!!! I really appreciate it...Susan
Comment from Oatmeal
Realist101,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that you were given. Perfectly arranged & formatted. Good flowing. Understandable.
I did locate two small errors. Nothing to worry about at all. It will be a quick fix.
Tiny (fireflys) stealing the scene...
**fireflies
And travel (Heaven's) miles, of gorgeous, green, grassy
**heaven's
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very professionally written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Realist101,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that you were given. Perfectly arranged & formatted. Good flowing. Understandable.
I did locate two small errors. Nothing to worry about at all. It will be a quick fix.
Tiny (fireflys) stealing the scene...
**fireflies
And travel (Heaven's) miles, of gorgeous, green, grassy
**heaven's
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very professionally written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Hey there!! THank you for showing me these errors...I will re-edit again!! Lots of people helping me, I sure appreciate it too. I thank you so much, and hope to hear from you again!! I will read your work too, asap!! Hugs, Susan
Comment from becky7777
that is awfull the way he died. glad it was quick tho. great poem really show the love that you and Rusty shared. good luck in the contest.
Becky
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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that is awfull the way he died. glad it was quick tho. great poem really show the love that you and Rusty shared. good luck in the contest.
Becky
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Hi Becky, Thank you VERY much for your great rating and kind words...I appreciate hearing from you, and the time you spent reading...I will read your work too, as soon as I can, and my best to you also!!!! Smiles, Susan
Comment from petep
Nice job. It's easy to feel the emotion, though I am not a horse person. Some of the rhymes and rhythms are a bit off, though -- last line, for example, seems a bit too long. But other lines are touching and almost perfect, such as 'Sunshine, moonlight, off we wold go again/ Nature's gifts round every bend'.
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Nice job. It's easy to feel the emotion, though I am not a horse person. Some of the rhymes and rhythms are a bit off, though -- last line, for example, seems a bit too long. But other lines are touching and almost perfect, such as 'Sunshine, moonlight, off we wold go again/ Nature's gifts round every bend'.
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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I agree, thank you so much for this honest and good review, I will re-read my poem, and see if I can improve it? Thank you very much. Susan
Comment from AnnaLinda
Realist101,
Your poem made me sad:( It is such a well written poem and it holds such love for your Rusty! Oh, he died so unexpectedly and tragically! I am so sorry!
This is my favorite part of your poem:
"For years and years, we were best friends,
Together through thick and thin...
Sunshine, moonlight, off we would go again,
Nature's gifts 'round every bend..."
Linda
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Realist101,
Your poem made me sad:( It is such a well written poem and it holds such love for your Rusty! Oh, he died so unexpectedly and tragically! I am so sorry!
This is my favorite part of your poem:
"For years and years, we were best friends,
Together through thick and thin...
Sunshine, moonlight, off we would go again,
Nature's gifts 'round every bend..."
Linda
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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God love you Linda, thank you so, for your heartfelt comments, I am sorry to make you sad, it has been so long since this happened, but still hurts so badly...thank you for being such a good Fanfriend...Hugs, Susan
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Susan,
You are so welcome. I was wondering when I was reading your poem how old you were when it happened. Thank you for being such a good 'Fanfriend'
Linda
Comment from djcoomes
I had an old gray gelding named Slade. We rode a lot of miles together. He was one of the greatest joys in my life. I know exactly how you feel. I miss him still and he's been gone about 15 years. A very lovely tribute to your wonderful horse buddy. Darlene
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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I had an old gray gelding named Slade. We rode a lot of miles together. He was one of the greatest joys in my life. I know exactly how you feel. I miss him still and he's been gone about 15 years. A very lovely tribute to your wonderful horse buddy. Darlene
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Oh dear, thank you Darlene, it is real nice to hear from another horse lover/owner...Slade is a neat name, and grays are the BEST color of horses to paint...if you have time, let me know more about him...sure wish you and I were out riding...but thank you very much for your wonderful rating and nice review...Take care!!! Susan
Comment from joemass
G'day Realist
Neat, heartfelt little poem that works well. My only real query is about the fireflies in l4. Why didn't you have them 'lighting the scene' instead of 'stealing the scene' ?
Cheers
Joemass
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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G'day Realist
Neat, heartfelt little poem that works well. My only real query is about the fireflies in l4. Why didn't you have them 'lighting the scene' instead of 'stealing the scene' ?
Cheers
Joemass
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Hi there, Joe, ok< I will re-read this. Good thought. I so appreciate your time to read and helpful suggestion!! Thank you very much!! Hope you are keeping warm on this frigid night...Susan
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Susan
You couldn't know but I live in Canberra, Australia where it's stinking hot and half the coutryside is under bushfire threat just now. I'll swap you some sunburn for a snowball!
Joe
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OH wow!!!! How I wish I could!!!!!! I am freezing, it is 19 degrees, and the wind is howling...our heat bill will be awful...I wish I could be there, and go out and go for a ride...I sure hope your area does not burn, I wish I could help...boy, please take care, and stay safe? Susan in Indiana...
Comment from Charlene0513
To Realist101,
A very sad and upsetting turn of events for this poem as a young girl mourns for the loss of her horse but pays a special tribute to it.
Charlene
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To Realist101,
A very sad and upsetting turn of events for this poem as a young girl mourns for the loss of her horse but pays a special tribute to it.
Charlene
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2009
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Hi Charlene, what a nice review...thank you so very much. I am now 55 tho, lol...but it seems like this happened just yesterday. I still sometimes cry a little, thinking of this. I was able, after all this time, to finally put my feelings into words...thank you again, I hope you are keeping warm, where you are... :) Susan
