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I Can't Wait!

A visit with Santa .........

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Comment from Jordan Rose
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Adorable! Of course, I'm not Santa and I'm sure Kaitlyn wasn't his first! Nicely done and the ending was quite funny. Thanks for sharing. Jordan

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
    Jordan

    Casualties of being a Santa I imagine...Thanks for enjoying my adorable munchkins...Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from highlander104
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Well now, I guess the shoppers weren't the only ones waiting for the last minute. Good write. I enjoyed this story. And your little munchkins are adorable (gramdma's smile too).

Jean K.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
    Jean

    Thank you so much for reading and enjoying Gavin and Kaitlyn's story. She was happy when I showed her her picture on the computer...maybe years from now she won't be...but I shall just laugh as I did today. Carol
Comment from dayan1980
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This was great, I enjoyed it, poor little girl and poor Santa, feeling the rejection of a little soul. I laughed a little to! Obviously I can not offer any feedback on how to improve as I think it is as good as it gets.

Your great!!!

Would appreciate your feedback on my works.

Look forward to reading more.
Regards
Dayan

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
    Dayan

    Thank you so much for reading and enjoying my grandchildren's story. The funniest stories come from these little ones. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from Sandollar
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This was precious. A nice Christmas story. I don't know how Kaitlyn is going to feel about this story when she's older but for right now,it and she are adorable. Santa was certainly surprised. The language was clear and it was the right length for the subject. I loved the title.

I found no errors.

Sandollar

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2009
    Sandollar

    I wonder myself, but for now she just squealed with delight when she saw her picture on the computer screen. Thanks for the kind and thoughtful review. Smiles, CArol
Comment from WRITER1
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I would imagine that a lot of Santa's have had worse happen to them. This is cute and the children are adorable. I knew they were your grandchildren before I read the authors notes. They definitely look like you.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
    Donna

    Thanks so much for the wonderful thoughts and comments. Glad you enjoyed my little munchkins adventure..better than Santa did of course. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Josipher32
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Begin Again,

"I Can't Wait" was a well written childen's fictional short story. The picture was precious and the story line was very entertaining.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
    Josipher

    Thank you so much for enjoying my little grandchildren and their adventure...I appreciate the review.

    Carol
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is so cute--your grandchildren are adorable--the story was interesting and kept my attention---did you enter it in the holiday story contest?

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
    sweetwoodjax

    Not this one...I wrote a story "Finding the Christmas Spirit". Glad you enjoyed my little munchkins and I appreciate the review. Carol
Comment from Mark Nolan
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Hi Begin Again, I rekon you have a blast writing this stuff for kids and you do it so well too. I wonder if any kids read it? Well done

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


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    Mark

    I know my grandchildren do and another friend uses it in her first grade class. Thanks for the review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from sunny39
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Hillarious and I'm sure this has happened many, many times. The dialogue was really real. I can just see the little girl playing the part of the ballerina until she gets to Santa. Then she's 'gotta go.'

Totally realistic and enjoyable!

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009


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    Sunny

    So glad you enjoyed my little grandchildren..though I think Santa was a little distressed. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from djyarrum
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Ho Ho Ho a good effort this. Liked the little twist in the end. Well written, short sweet and to the point. Funny how many children only have their Santa photo's because their parents want them to. The language, particularly the dialogue was spot on. Great read. Cheers David.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
    David

    Glad you enjoyed my grand children's visit with Santa. A memorable trip for sure. Smiles, Carol