Quaterns: Observations on Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "As Snow Upon the Evergreen"Assorted Reflections
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Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
A beautiful work...and believe it or not, appropriate tonight for south Louisiana!!! We have snow maybe once a year and never this early--but it is predicted for tonight!! I love every line, but my favorite is the second--"paints every bough a pearly white". elaine
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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adewpearl,
A beautiful work...and believe it or not, appropriate tonight for south Louisiana!!! We have snow maybe once a year and never this early--but it is predicted for tonight!! I love every line, but my favorite is the second--"paints every bough a pearly white". elaine
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Elaine - I bet all the kids in Louisiana are excited at that prospect - when it snows do you get more than a coating? Are they able to build a snowman or sled? Brooke :-)
Comment from DeboraDyess
Wow. This is another truly wonderful poem. Okay, Brooke, you can tell me -- do you dream in poetic form? Talk to your family in rhyme and verse? You must; you're such a natural. Thanks so much for sharing your talent with us. Blessings, D
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Wow. This is another truly wonderful poem. Okay, Brooke, you can tell me -- do you dream in poetic form? Talk to your family in rhyme and verse? You must; you're such a natural. Thanks so much for sharing your talent with us. Blessings, D
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Deb, for your thoughtful comments :-) I think if I talked to either of my children in rhyme they would have me committed! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Wild Flower
This is really wonderful. You touched on that exact feeling of quiet and beauty right after the snow stops and the sun comes up. I don't think you could possible improve on this. Its a gorgeous poem.
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This is really wonderful. You touched on that exact feeling of quiet and beauty right after the snow stops and the sun comes up. I don't think you could possible improve on this. Its a gorgeous poem.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Wild Flower - what a wonderfully generous and warm review this is, and I so appreciate it :-) Brooke
Comment from koyoga
Such a nice job you have done here with this. I'm getting
excited because we are expecting our first snow tomorrow!
I think your last stanza was super, especially the line:
As still of day turns silent night . . .
Very nice! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Such a nice job you have done here with this. I'm getting
excited because we are expecting our first snow tomorrow!
I think your last stanza was super, especially the line:
As still of day turns silent night . . .
Very nice! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you, koyoga. I appreciate your thoughtful review - we have snow predicted for tomorrow too, but just a coating. :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Oh - all the beauty of a pristine, snowy morn... all wrapped up in this gentle poem. :)
Congratulations, Brooke. A well earned win!
Beautiful writing.
Nic
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Oh - all the beauty of a pristine, snowy morn... all wrapped up in this gentle poem. :)
Congratulations, Brooke. A well earned win!
Beautiful writing.
Nic
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Nic, thank you - I really was pleased with the way this poem turned out, so I was thrilled it won that contest - I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh Brooke, this is utterly beautiful! I am not in the least surprised it won first place. You have such a talent.
The hair went up on the back of my neck as I read it -- in a GOOD way, not a nasty way, I hasten to add.
Please forgive my tardiness in reading and reviewing. There has been chaos here. With the end of NaNo, all sorts of traumas have befallen us. My son has broken his ankle (the other one from the one he broke last year). Lots of other boring stuff too. I'm on a marathon read now! :)
Hugs
Kat
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Oh Brooke, this is utterly beautiful! I am not in the least surprised it won first place. You have such a talent.
The hair went up on the back of my neck as I read it -- in a GOOD way, not a nasty way, I hasten to add.
Please forgive my tardiness in reading and reviewing. There has been chaos here. With the end of NaNo, all sorts of traumas have befallen us. My son has broken his ankle (the other one from the one he broke last year). Lots of other boring stuff too. I'm on a marathon read now! :)
Hugs
Kat
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Kat, so glad it was not in a nasty way! LOL He has now broken one ankle a year? I am SO glad my children grew into adulthood without broken limbs. As for the whole nano thing - you people are crazed!!! LOL Thanks so much for this wonderfully generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
Congrats on winning the contest, a beautiful poem about a lovely tree, I have a few evergreens in my backyard that I adore. Snow on an evergreen tree is beautiful as your poem describes.
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Congrats on winning the contest, a beautiful poem about a lovely tree, I have a few evergreens in my backyard that I adore. Snow on an evergreen tree is beautiful as your poem describes.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Elaine - so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Pacinogal
Hi Brooke,
I can see why this won first place. Nothing is
more beautiful than an evergreen decorated by
nature. Who needs electricity? BRAVO !!!!!
Happily,
Kathy Congratulations again...
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Hi Brooke,
I can see why this won first place. Nothing is
more beautiful than an evergreen decorated by
nature. Who needs electricity? BRAVO !!!!!
Happily,
Kathy Congratulations again...
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Kathy :-) You are most kind, as always :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome Brooke. You well deserve the honor. :) Kathy
Comment from Diny
WPW this was great it was so musically lyrical it could even be a song!- Flowing so naturally the repeating line was really kewl I liked this and your ryhmes were genius- again a fitting work for the season- Blessings it is a pleasure to read you- Di
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WPW this was great it was so musically lyrical it could even be a song!- Flowing so naturally the repeating line was really kewl I liked this and your ryhmes were genius- again a fitting work for the season- Blessings it is a pleasure to read you- Di
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Di - what lovely things to say :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
The wildest stars to fill the night
with lightness in the mind
will wink at us, perfect designed
to make the boldest sight.
Upon the grass we'll lay and choose
the wildest stars to fill the night
and bless the air with our delight
from our place, nestled in the pews.
The wildest men to fill the west,
the wildest views to hide from sight,
the wildest stars to fill the night.
In history we all are blessed
to see our roles with our insight
and understand we can be free
and know that we will always be
the wildest stars to fill the night.
Mike
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The wildest stars to fill the night
with lightness in the mind
will wink at us, perfect designed
to make the boldest sight.
Upon the grass we'll lay and choose
the wildest stars to fill the night
and bless the air with our delight
from our place, nestled in the pews.
The wildest men to fill the west,
the wildest views to hide from sight,
the wildest stars to fill the night.
In history we all are blessed
to see our roles with our insight
and understand we can be free
and know that we will always be
the wildest stars to fill the night.
Mike
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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What a gorgeous quatern, and using a rhyme scheme that I've never tried - I love you, Mike :-) Brooke
