Comment from whizpurr ^-^

Excellent

Hi dear poetess friend,
What a lovely read! I found your poem's artistic presentation really superb and congratulate you on this overall very strong entry. I felt like I was perched right there up on that hill with you surveying the wonders of nature. Thank you for taking my breath away! Hugs, W^-^

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thank you so much for your lovely review, I am pleased I took your breath away, as this view from my varandah always does.
Thanks again, and warmest regards and hugs
Marijke

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Hi! I'm reading all the entries for this contest. At first I was confused because the prompt says "Sentence" but then I read the directions and realized it was "Line." At any rate, there are sme excellent pieces which I am enjoying reading very much. Nice rhyming couplets and usually find change of colors distracting, it worked in this piece. Reminded me of a sunset. Best of luck in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thank you Sue. You are right, colour text changes can be distracting, so I am selective when I use it. Only if in my eyes it enhances the overall piece.
Thanks for your kind review and lovely stars, warmest regards, Marijke

Comment from Masterpabs

Needs Improvement

Hello. I'm just going to make a few short comments that will probably turn out way longer then they are short.
The poem had good sequence, it followed a certain direction, and the direction flowed well with little obstruction. This seems close to the heart as well, which served the poem well.
My reservations for this poem are that I didn't find it very interesting in the rhyming and the language. Though the poem has an admirable format I was not compelled to keep reading.
Anyway....Don't stop writing!- Masterpabs


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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

I certainly won't stop writing, as your comments are how you feel, but overall I have received excellent reviews for this piece. But of course, that is what reviewing is all about. Given honest feedback.
Warmest regards
Marijke

Comment from second thought

Excellent

If this poem don't win this contest it will suprise me. Cleaver words,rich color,delightful thoughts. Great picture. Are there any more words to describe how I feel. Oh yes, GREAT.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thanks, thank you, many thanks. Are there any more words I can tell you I am truly grateful for your very generous and kind comments about this poem. I appreciate you lovely words of praise.
Warmest regards my friend
Marijke

reply by second thought on 03-Dec-2009

double thanks to you.

Comment from melbuy

Excellent

This is a beautifully described poem of sunset. There is nothing quite like the show that nature can put on for us some evenings. Good luck with your entry.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thank you melbuy, I agree, there is nothing quite like it, except some sunrises I experience here on my hill.
Thanks for kind review and ratings.
Warmest regards
Marijke

Comment from ritter1116

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem very much. I see that we used some of the same words, shimmering,behold,gold. They say great minds think alike! Loved the rhyming and the flow of the poem as well as the imagery. The picture was beautiful also! Good job on this!

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thank you, especially the comment about the picture, which I took some months ago. Came across it the other day, and it inspired me.
I appreciate you comments and rating,
Warmest regards my friend
Marijke

Comment from jl & bandit

Excellent

This fits the requirements really nicely.
I think the thing I like most about it is that ,to me, each of your stanza's stand alone really well[of course together too]The picture goes well with how you did the color in print.
Nice job.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thank you jl, I appreciate your war words and how you noted the stanzas could stand on their own. I enjoyed writing this, putting words to the photo I took a few months ago. I am so lucky,with marvelous views all around.
Warmest regards
Marijke

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

Hi, Marijke, you are so lucky to be able to absorb natures's beauty from your verandah, and pour it out in poetry, photography, and artwork (the gradual change of colors is amazing, both in your photo and in your lines). All adds to the beauty of your poem.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thank you Belinda, yes I am very very lucky. So many different scenes, from mountains, to river, to Australian bushland, to the city. Beauty all around.
Thanks for great review and comments.
Warmest regards
Marijke

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Fiona: Your poem is lovely. The rhyming is great. It also flows beautifully. The picture compliments it. You did a great job on this prompt. Kat

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2009

Thank you Kat, I appreciate your generous comments and review. I am so lucky, living where I do, with the changing scenery from hour to hour.
Warmest regards
Marijke

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

What a wonderful view you must have. It is cold right now in Missouri and your poem brings back memories of warmer days. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2009

Thank you Linda, and yes, you are right. The views are stunning, river, mountains, bush, and the city below us, lighting up each night. How lucky am I?
Thanks for your generous review and rating.
Warmest regards
Marijke