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Triolets: Traditional and Modified

Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "When First I Wished"
Poems employing this musical, repeating form

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Comment from Abba Lin
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Oh Brooke, What a great poem, The age of innocence to the age of reality can and does change everything. But even though we dont have that same child's innocence, we still have hope. Just at a different level....Love Lin

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Lin - I appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from L.lora
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A stunning modified triolet
which was just so delicious
in its pronouncement. It
speaks to the heart of the
child within all of us and
puts voice to thoughts that
few have articulated. The
read is smooth and flows
melodically for this reader.
Most enjoyable... LOra

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Lora - so glad you enjoyed my use of this form :-) Brooke
Comment from Phil Kitom
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Isn't it sad that we have to grow up and cannot
remain in that wonderful world where time is
meaningless and all kinds of magic and dreams
are possibilities. I think you have captured
this within your poem Brooke, well done...

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
    Thank you, my friend. I'm so glad you found the meaning in this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from Jordan Rose
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I didn't mind the modification at all! Great job making me remember how I blindly wished on stars as a child then grew up and second guessed wishing for a while. Now, I blindly wish on them again! thanks for sharing. Jordan

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Jordan - so glad you enjoyed, modification and all :-) Brooke
Comment from The Guardian
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Another thoughtful use of the triolet. Think the form conveys your message in thoughtful and profound way. Wishing on a star symbolizes an innocence and faith in the intangible and in the universe. It also conveys a child-like believe that if we wish and believe hard enough, the universe will reward us and make our dream come true.

Lovely.
Merle

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Merle. I appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
reply by The Guardian on 27-Nov-2009
    My pleasure!
Comment from Nicnac
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Another lovely triolet. :)
This one has a melancholy feel.
It is sad that we lose some of our childhood dreams, hopes and faith.

Beautiful poetry. Perfect rhythm and rhyme.
I love the presentation. It brings to mind 'Starry Night'.

I really wish I was permitted to give you a sixer. This poem touched me.

Nic

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Nic, for such lovely comments. Yes, there is a melancholy to growing up and learning reality is a bit tougher than one's dreams. Brooke :-)
Comment from Frances Jean
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Stunning presentation and simply a wonderful poem. Skillful use of words and vivid imagery make this a special piece of work. Loved it! No wonder you are ranked #1!

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Frances. I so appreciate such kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from skye
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The wishing star... what a beautiful poem about the innocent act of giving your fondest hope to the cosmos.. and then really believing it will be heard.
Very well done.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Skye - hope your wishes are coming true this Thanksgiving :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
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this poem made me smile and chuckle just a bit fir the truth that's within it.I enjoyed this free flowing verse and the smile that it brought to me... John

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
    Thank you, John - as always, I appreciate your comments and reviews. Hope you're having a good Thanksgiving. Brooke :-)
Comment from Sally Carter
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Brooke, I don't give a hoot whether you have modified anything here! Your poem is so telling of the way we gradually lose our belief in the inevitability of good outcomes. As ever, beautiful words, beautifully executed. Sally

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Sally - you would not believe how much a teeny tiny minority do care. LOL Brooke :-)