Blood Relations - A Vampire Tale
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Love Finds a Way"Some bloodlines run very deep.
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Comment from nora arjuna
Lori gained twenty pounds - oh dear! but this chapter is a great relief. i knew he wouldn't die but still got nervous about it.
last chapter? hmm, i think you should bring everyone together in the last chapter. we'd like to read about the rest of the girls too.
this feel a bit rushed, steve, especially in the early part. maybe you could show some of his suffering instead of telling us.
i'm glad the wife intefered with the husband's meddling.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Lori gained twenty pounds - oh dear! but this chapter is a great relief. i knew he wouldn't die but still got nervous about it.
last chapter? hmm, i think you should bring everyone together in the last chapter. we'd like to read about the rest of the girls too.
this feel a bit rushed, steve, especially in the early part. maybe you could show some of his suffering instead of telling us.
i'm glad the wife intefered with the husband's meddling.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Sometimes a woman knows best, LOL. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I'll do that and write another chapter and bring everyone together and look at expanding on some of the beginning. All good ideas. Thank you!
Comment from jadapenn
What a lovely homecoming chapter. Good thing Ratoon has a strong-willed woman behind him. Kick his butt for him so he gets back to basics. You had lots of tension and suspense in this chapter. Hope all the girls get back to normal now.
Well, so I missed Stan and now he has his family back. Sorry jada, you lose girl. lol. luv jada
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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What a lovely homecoming chapter. Good thing Ratoon has a strong-willed woman behind him. Kick his butt for him so he gets back to basics. You had lots of tension and suspense in this chapter. Hope all the girls get back to normal now.
Well, so I missed Stan and now he has his family back. Sorry jada, you lose girl. lol. luv jada
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much for this Jada! Life is always changing, so you just never know what comes tomorrow. Stan has his new spaceship witch can cross the pond in seconds, LOL. So if you see a strange light in the night sky, it just might be Stan! I think I'll have one more chapter (and hope it doesn't explode into many more like some others. The Muse is a fighter!)
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Your MUSE is a fighter! My muse is a naughty blighter. The novel writing one - named Gaby. No angel either.
Michael is my safari man - Andrew - yes Andrew is my poet muse.
I have my hands full with these boys. LOL. But heck - I shove them in a sack in seconds if Stan is on his way. LOL. I'll tell Michael to get up into the loft room and keep watch for that fast ship. luv jada
Comment from Heidixoxo
Way to go NightWriter!! This is an awesome story and very well written. You have shown great emotional feelings through your pen and paper....amazing job. My opinion, take it out one more chapter to finalize this. (just my opinion....LOL) Best of luck with this and cotinue on....xoxo
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Way to go NightWriter!! This is an awesome story and very well written. You have shown great emotional feelings through your pen and paper....amazing job. My opinion, take it out one more chapter to finalize this. (just my opinion....LOL) Best of luck with this and cotinue on....xoxo
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Thank you SO MUCH for your wonderful review!!! Maybe I'll do one more chapter. Good idea.
Comment from Mark Nolan
Yes I think it would be a good idea to finish it here. As it wasnt my cup of tea I found it hard to read although it was good if one likes this sort of thing.
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Yes I think it would be a good idea to finish it here. As it wasnt my cup of tea I found it hard to read although it was good if one likes this sort of thing.
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much, Mark!
