Synergy
quatrains in chain rhyme97 total reviews
Comment from Queenise
Brooke this is so lovely and I can just see the birds flying in the air. You have worded this poem so magnificently that it give me a visual of one beautiful flight. Great job. Seems so easy when you do it. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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Brooke this is so lovely and I can just see the birds flying in the air. You have worded this poem so magnificently that it give me a visual of one beautiful flight. Great job. Seems so easy when you do it. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Queenise. I appreciate your most thoughtful comments :-) brooke
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Hey Brooke. Sorry so long replying. Been having problems with my hands and wrist. You're always welcome. Blessings. Queenise
Comment from laurelp
I love to watch the different birds flying south for the winter. Part of natures perfections. Very nicely written, made for an easy and lovely read.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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I love to watch the different birds flying south for the winter. Part of natures perfections. Very nicely written, made for an easy and lovely read.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Laurel - I appreciate your thoughtful review. Brooke :-)
Comment from Phil Kitom
How often we see this example of Synergy
when watching the Olympics and seeing
distance runners leading the way and then
falling back to allow others to take the
force of the breeze whole others shelter
behind. And cyclists too working together
to reduce the lead that others may have.
This is a lovely example with the geese
and shows how marvelous nature is in
devising this little piece of magic, for
if he listens, man will always be guided
by nature...
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
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How often we see this example of Synergy
when watching the Olympics and seeing
distance runners leading the way and then
falling back to allow others to take the
force of the breeze whole others shelter
behind. And cyclists too working together
to reduce the lead that others may have.
This is a lovely example with the geese
and shows how marvelous nature is in
devising this little piece of magic, for
if he listens, man will always be guided
by nature...
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Dave - yep, I've watched the cyclists do this many a time :-) Brooke
Comment from ersorenson
This poem is very readable. It has very relaxed rhyming, none sounds forced to my ear. I like the message, I'm in the "divine plan" school, but watching geese, and other birds for than matter, is strangely mesmerizing. I didn't know the formation increases the flying range of one alone by 70%, that's pretty cool.
Eric
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
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This poem is very readable. It has very relaxed rhyming, none sounds forced to my ear. I like the message, I'm in the "divine plan" school, but watching geese, and other birds for than matter, is strangely mesmerizing. I didn't know the formation increases the flying range of one alone by 70%, that's pretty cool.
Eric
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Eric - glad you enjoyed :-) Cool, indeed. Brooke
Comment from Nightwind
Great perceptive poetry. Well done structure and chain rhyme. Good rhythm. Reading flows. Portrays "synergy" well. Photo augments poem and was well chosen. Great!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
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Great perceptive poetry. Well done structure and chain rhyme. Good rhythm. Reading flows. Portrays "synergy" well. Photo augments poem and was well chosen. Great!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Nightwind. Glad you enjoyed. Brooke :-)
Comment from Kellytr
I've alway found it fascinating to watch a flock of geese in formation, wondering at the precision and discipline of each bird as they move as one, dipping and swaying.
I found your last verse inspirational, it answered a question I've often silently asked myself. From this point on, I'll take even more pleasure from observing these magnificent geese on their divine mission.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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I've alway found it fascinating to watch a flock of geese in formation, wondering at the precision and discipline of each bird as they move as one, dipping and swaying.
I found your last verse inspirational, it answered a question I've often silently asked myself. From this point on, I'll take even more pleasure from observing these magnificent geese on their divine mission.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Kelly, for this wonderfully generous review :-) I'm thrilled this will add to your appreciation of those flying geese. Brooke :-)
Comment from DeboraDyess
Very, very nice. Another animal we could learn from, if we'd only pay attention! I love the flow and feel of the quantran. Blessings, Brooke, and have a great Sunday. Deb
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Very, very nice. Another animal we could learn from, if we'd only pay attention! I love the flow and feel of the quantran. Blessings, Brooke, and have a great Sunday. Deb
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Deb. Paying attention, that is something people fail to do too often! :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
The presentation is eye-catching. :)
I've been hearing geese sing lately and have watched their beautiful and graceful movement in the sky.
You've captured this miraculous dance formation beautifully in this poem, Brooke.
The last verse is my favorite. You have a lovely view of the world, my friend. Thank you for sharing it.
Nic
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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The presentation is eye-catching. :)
I've been hearing geese sing lately and have watched their beautiful and graceful movement in the sky.
You've captured this miraculous dance formation beautifully in this poem, Brooke.
The last verse is my favorite. You have a lovely view of the world, my friend. Thank you for sharing it.
Nic
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Nic - tell my daughter it is eye-catching - she was giving me major grief over the missing goose! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Eternal Muse
That was beautiful - the flock of geese tale. You master these quartrains with an amazing ease, creating astounding visuals. When I see those in the sky, I always marvel at God's handiwork. Your rhyming is elegant and unforced; and I like the infusion of philosophy here. Remarkable verse.
A stunning conclusion here:
Perhaps they follow this design
because there's strength in work combined,
a plan that's served them for all time,
devised for them by One Divine
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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That was beautiful - the flock of geese tale. You master these quartrains with an amazing ease, creating astounding visuals. When I see those in the sky, I always marvel at God's handiwork. Your rhyming is elegant and unforced; and I like the infusion of philosophy here. Remarkable verse.
A stunning conclusion here:
Perhaps they follow this design
because there's strength in work combined,
a plan that's served them for all time,
devised for them by One Divine
Comment Written 21-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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I had never tried the chain rhyme scheme before - it is quite a pretty style. Thank you, Yelena :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
You're not getting ready to cook a goose for Christmas are you? I liked your second birdie poem. Magical creatures flying with God's flight plan in their wings. Loved your poem. Blessings.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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You're not getting ready to cook a goose for Christmas are you? I liked your second birdie poem. Magical creatures flying with God's flight plan in their wings. Loved your poem. Blessings.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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I don't cook anything! I am a danger in a kitchen - I microwave. For holidays I eat with my sister and her family. And no, I am not the one who shot the missing goose - you are now the third person to suspect me! LOL Thanks, Kay :-) Brooke
