My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Sweet Sonnet Song"My collection of various sonnets.
29 total reviews
Comment from Sally Carter
Oh wow - I wish I could do this. Your poem flows beautifully and the meter is impeccable. If I had to pick a favourite bit it would be the beauty weaving like a slender vine up angelic stairs. I really am full of admiration for the way you can take an idea and turn it into this. My work feels so clunky in comparison. Respect! Sally
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Oh wow - I wish I could do this. Your poem flows beautifully and the meter is impeccable. If I had to pick a favourite bit it would be the beauty weaving like a slender vine up angelic stairs. I really am full of admiration for the way you can take an idea and turn it into this. My work feels so clunky in comparison. Respect! Sally
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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It's really just a matter of practice and learning how to hear the words fall. I'll take a look at some of your work. I'll help you if you'd like.
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It's not the meter I have problems with, it's simply getting such intangible ideas into words. Do feel free to review anything of mine that I post. I am always open to suggestions. Cheers. Sally
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Dawn, please accept a virtual six for this one!!! Absolutely stunning in all respects. A perfect sonnet with a very well thought out content. The meter is excellent; found no flaws in it. The rhyming, superb. You have written a very impressive work here. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Dawn, please accept a virtual six for this one!!! Absolutely stunning in all respects. A perfect sonnet with a very well thought out content. The meter is excellent; found no flaws in it. The rhyming, superb. You have written a very impressive work here. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Virtual six accepted and thank you so much for your lovely words of review. Definitely gave me that smile this morning
Comment from Judian James
YES!!! I loved this piece. It's originality is marvelous and what a great conveyance of thoughts on how wonderful it would be to tap into the wellspring of the great sonneteers! EXCELLENT!! a very smart, fluid piece
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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YES!!! I loved this piece. It's originality is marvelous and what a great conveyance of thoughts on how wonderful it would be to tap into the wellspring of the great sonneteers! EXCELLENT!! a very smart, fluid piece
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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I wasn't so sure how this piece would do when I posted it. I was very pleased with it but wasn't sure what others would think of it. Makes me very happy that you liked it. Thanks so much, friend for these encouraging words.
Comment from kingskid
Reads beautifully and has a excellent flow.
You use beautiful words and images to bring across this
sweet sonnet song.
Artwork is awesome.
Your last two lines are beautiful.
kingskid
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Reads beautifully and has a excellent flow.
You use beautiful words and images to bring across this
sweet sonnet song.
Artwork is awesome.
Your last two lines are beautiful.
kingskid
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much, really appreciate the read and review.
Comment from honeytree
I love the art work that suits the words written here very much.
To hear a song of love is really beautiful to listen to, and absorbing the words and music about love, that these words bring.
I loved the creative words written here and the art work is
beautiful as well.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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I love the art work that suits the words written here very much.
To hear a song of love is really beautiful to listen to, and absorbing the words and music about love, that these words bring.
I loved the creative words written here and the art work is
beautiful as well.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you, so very much appreciate your time to read and review.
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
A sonnet for a sonnet! How sweet!
This has fairly good meter, a good ab rhyme scheme and for me, an original approach in appreciation of the sonnet, a fan fave.
Pea
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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A sonnet for a sonnet! How sweet!
This has fairly good meter, a good ab rhyme scheme and for me, an original approach in appreciation of the sonnet, a fan fave.
Pea
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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The sonnet will forever be my first love and you have blessed me this morning with a smile. Thank you for that gift of stars, so very much appreciated.
Comment from rama devi
OH, I love it! A lovely, well composed sonnet as a tribute to sonnets (how apropos)
Sonnet is also one of my favorite forms---as you may have noticed. I find the form exquisitely musical and refined.
This sonnet songs sings its praises well.
Favorite part:
Romantic beauty weaves, like slender vine,
around and upward on angelic stairs
that rise into the heavenly abode
where harps enthrall all lovers who ascend.
O, rapture me on this celestial road.
Beloved notes please help me to transcend
Awesome rhyming...lovely imagery.
Bravo dear JO.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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OH, I love it! A lovely, well composed sonnet as a tribute to sonnets (how apropos)
Sonnet is also one of my favorite forms---as you may have noticed. I find the form exquisitely musical and refined.
This sonnet songs sings its praises well.
Favorite part:
Romantic beauty weaves, like slender vine,
around and upward on angelic stairs
that rise into the heavenly abode
where harps enthrall all lovers who ascend.
O, rapture me on this celestial road.
Beloved notes please help me to transcend
Awesome rhyming...lovely imagery.
Bravo dear JO.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 17-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Awww you're so sweet, dearest. I actually wasn't quite sure how this would go across, A Sonnet's Sonnet which I almost titled it, but I love the verse so much, ahh to walk a mile with those bards of old, I'd be in heaven for sure. Thanks darling for your wonderful and encouraging review.
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MWAH!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Absolutely lovely! This is real poetry. It is refreshing at times to get back to the true sonnet. Yours here is perfect in meter and rhyme. With beautiful imagery, it flows pleasantly along, flowing not only downward but upward: "around and upward on angelic stairs
that rise into the heavenly abode." Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2009
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Absolutely lovely! This is real poetry. It is refreshing at times to get back to the true sonnet. Yours here is perfect in meter and rhyme. With beautiful imagery, it flows pleasantly along, flowing not only downward but upward: "around and upward on angelic stairs
that rise into the heavenly abode." Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 17-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2009
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Oh Jeanie you must be one of those Angelic beings giving me this six. What a beautiful gesture, thank you so very much for your lovely words of review and those shining stars.
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You are most welcome. Every star was deserved! JM
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You are most welcome. Every star was deserved! JM
Comment from GregoryC
Delicate phrases, deep tones, a poetic voice which summons voices from the past. You take your time with the words encouraging the reader to slow down and listen for those voices from the past, "where harps enthrall all lovers who ascend."
By this measured pace, you're able to let the reader pause on the page to allow time for the words to sink in. The effect is very moving and intimate as if you are taking us into your confidence and compelling us to see things we might have overlooked - and so we can hear- "where bards from yesteryear sing in my ear / their tales of love, love lost, their tales of death;"
You've taken us there - "to walk the realm where ancient bards still sing?" The question has been asked and if we're patient enough we'll get an answer. Nice work.
Gregory
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2009
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Delicate phrases, deep tones, a poetic voice which summons voices from the past. You take your time with the words encouraging the reader to slow down and listen for those voices from the past, "where harps enthrall all lovers who ascend."
By this measured pace, you're able to let the reader pause on the page to allow time for the words to sink in. The effect is very moving and intimate as if you are taking us into your confidence and compelling us to see things we might have overlooked - and so we can hear- "where bards from yesteryear sing in my ear / their tales of love, love lost, their tales of death;"
You've taken us there - "to walk the realm where ancient bards still sing?" The question has been asked and if we're patient enough we'll get an answer. Nice work.
Gregory
Comment Written 17-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2009
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Outstanding review. You really detailed the read and listened to the tone. Appreciate you taking the time to do that.
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It was a pleasure to review.
Greg
Comment from tacklebox378
I loved the whole thing. But the end was just wonderful. It gave me goose bumps even. Powerful and final. The picture is such a trip in itself. Looks like angels having a sword fight. Great job. =-)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2009
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I loved the whole thing. But the end was just wonderful. It gave me goose bumps even. Powerful and final. The picture is such a trip in itself. Looks like angels having a sword fight. Great job. =-)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2009
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So glad you enjoyed, always nice to hear someone was given goose bumps, thanks for the smile and the review.
