Legal Tendencies
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5 total reviews
Comment from irishauthorme
Well told, and what an unexpected sortie of events!
Never expected Stevie boy to still be involved with old whats-her-name, but here he goes!
Good thing that she caught him before the nuptials, that would have been an expensive mistake!
Good reading!
Irish
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Well told, and what an unexpected sortie of events!
Never expected Stevie boy to still be involved with old whats-her-name, but here he goes!
Good thing that she caught him before the nuptials, that would have been an expensive mistake!
Good reading!
Irish
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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What a sad end I think. Steven make some HUGE mistakes so it will be interesting to see what the sequel brings......xoxo
Comment from MissMerri
This story seems to roar along in high gear, with no excess words or descriptive moments to slow things down. I saw a few things to correct, but very few. One: noise has a c where the s should be, Two: "... what I had heard (.)new sentence... "Keeping my distance.." Hope this is helpful. I must hurry to the next chapter now. ;^}
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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This story seems to roar along in high gear, with no excess words or descriptive moments to slow things down. I saw a few things to correct, but very few. One: noise has a c where the s should be, Two: "... what I had heard (.)new sentence... "Keeping my distance.." Hope this is helpful. I must hurry to the next chapter now. ;^}
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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thank you so much...............xoxo
Comment from Sasha
Now that was a real shocker. What a horrible way to find out he was cheating. Very well written, filled with lots of tension and anger. I found this a great twist and look forward to reading the next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Now that was a real shocker. What a horrible way to find out he was cheating. Very well written, filled with lots of tension and anger. I found this a great twist and look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Um glad you enjoyed this one. I hope you enjoy the final chapter equally as good. xoxo
Comment from utopian_dream_x
"My heart was sitting at the base of my throat trying to escape the pain." I found that line such a powerful description. It makes the reader feel Kim's pain.
I thoroughly enjoyed the chapter, having not read the others, I was still able to pick up what was going on in the story. Great job.
utopian_dream_x
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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"My heart was sitting at the base of my throat trying to escape the pain." I found that line such a powerful description. It makes the reader feel Kim's pain.
I thoroughly enjoyed the chapter, having not read the others, I was still able to pick up what was going on in the story. Great job.
utopian_dream_x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thak you so much my friend...I am please that you enjoyed this..................xoxo
Comment from c_lucas
A relationship is a two way street. Each has to have faith in the other and neither should betray the trust. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Error
talking on his cell which is most definately (definitely)
I will share with you my method of reviewing.
Five Questions:
1. Is the work well written?.
2. Is there any mistakes in mechanics.?
3. Can you place yourself into the story? (Good Imagery)
4. Can you visualize the story? (Descriptive Scheme)
5. Did you leave a word of encouragement?
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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A relationship is a two way street. Each has to have faith in the other and neither should betray the trust. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Error
talking on his cell which is most definately (definitely)
I will share with you my method of reviewing.
Five Questions:
1. Is the work well written?.
2. Is there any mistakes in mechanics.?
3. Can you place yourself into the story? (Good Imagery)
4. Can you visualize the story? (Descriptive Scheme)
5. Did you leave a word of encouragement?
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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You are still the best and my favorute friend on fanstory!!!!! Thanks so much.........xoxo
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Thank you, Heidi. I am glad I can be of help. Charlie
