Trapped
Don't try to run26 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi fionageorge...what a delightful poem about and almost shot gun wedding. You rhyming is spot on and carries the lines down the page like liquid...well done and good luck in the contest....blessings...chey
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Hi fionageorge...what a delightful poem about and almost shot gun wedding. You rhyming is spot on and carries the lines down the page like liquid...well done and good luck in the contest....blessings...chey
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thanks Chey, enjoyed writing this one, a bit tongue in cheek.
Thanks for your kind words and generous rating.
Pleased you enjoyed it.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Abba Lin
Hi fiona, your poem was so cool. the wit the rhyme the all and all was great... What a great idea for this poem, good job.. I loved it... Love Lin
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Hi fiona, your poem was so cool. the wit the rhyme the all and all was great... What a great idea for this poem, good job.. I loved it... Love Lin
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thanks Lin, enjoyed writing this one, a bit tongue in cheek.
Thanks for your kind words and generous rating.
Pleased you enjoyed it.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
A great entry into this contest. It is serious, but very funny and light-hearted. Love it. One small typo:
isle (should be aisle)
Good luck in the contest...hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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A great entry into this contest. It is serious, but very funny and light-hearted. Love it. One small typo:
isle (should be aisle)
Good luck in the contest...hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you Susanne, for the pick up, and your kind review and generous ratings.
Loved putting this together, it just fell into place.
Warmest Regards - hugs and smiles
Marijke
Comment from adewpearl
walk down the isle - aisle
This is totally hilarious and sure should be a letter that gets this spurned lover closer to her objective!!!! I LOVE it - your quatrains in rhyming couplets tells a great story and features a most determined heroine :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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walk down the isle - aisle
This is totally hilarious and sure should be a letter that gets this spurned lover closer to her objective!!!! I LOVE it - your quatrains in rhyming couplets tells a great story and features a most determined heroine :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you Brooke, I have fixed the 'aisle' nit.
Appreciate your comments, and I had fun writing this.
Thanks for your generous review and rating.
Warmest regards and hugs
Marijke
Comment from rtrub
Your poem has some great humor. I can almost picture the father and brothers making sure he doesn't run away. Very creative and unique piece. I see you entered the writing prompt and it looked like great fun! Good luck on this piece. Take care RTR
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Your poem has some great humor. I can almost picture the father and brothers making sure he doesn't run away. Very creative and unique piece. I see you entered the writing prompt and it looked like great fun! Good luck on this piece. Take care RTR
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you RTR, for taking the time to read, and I am pleased, to enjoy, my bit of frivolity. And of course you nice comments and those lovely stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Your very welcome and thank you!
Take care
RTR
Comment from asma khan
This poem is very well written. I enjoyed it and The message given in it is very clear. It's a perfect trap and the person cannot out of it.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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This poem is very well written. I enjoyed it and The message given in it is very clear. It's a perfect trap and the person cannot out of it.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you asma, for taking the time to read, ad of course you nice comments and those lovely stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from NightWriter
Wow! "Trapped" is PERFECT! It is an outstanding poem in every sense. The prose, the message, the story within it. I was captivated from the start with it's smooth rhythm and perfectly rhyming lines. One of the best poems I've ever read. Bravo!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Wow! "Trapped" is PERFECT! It is an outstanding poem in every sense. The prose, the message, the story within it. I was captivated from the start with it's smooth rhythm and perfectly rhyming lines. One of the best poems I've ever read. Bravo!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Once again my friend, thank you. A nice way to wake up in the morning and receive such high praise.
That nice gold cross looks wonderful.
Warmest regards
Marijke
Comment from MissMerri
Hah! Got you now! What an original response to this writing prompt! I thought it was clever and amusing and well done. Certainly unique. I liked it a lot.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Hah! Got you now! What an original response to this writing prompt! I thought it was clever and amusing and well done. Certainly unique. I liked it a lot.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much Merri, I enjoyed writing it. One of those that just 'happened' to fall into thoughts (I think it must have been my muse, 'Bruce' at it again.)
Thanks and warmest regards
Marijke
Comment from phaedra
This letter will get his attention. He better head for the hill with no intention of going back fast, smile.
Phaedra
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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This letter will get his attention. He better head for the hill with no intention of going back fast, smile.
Phaedra
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much phaedra, I enjoyed writing this. One of those that just 'happened' to fall into thoughts (I think it must have been my muse, 'Bruce' at it again.
Thanks and warmest regards
Marijke
Comment from RebelRose
Boy, this letter should surely get his attention. It may not make him fall in love but he can't deny or run from DNA. Good contgest entry.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Boy, this letter should surely get his attention. It may not make him fall in love but he can't deny or run from DNA. Good contgest entry.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you RebelRose, yes, I think it might. Can just see Pa and brothers coming after him if he doesn't do the right thing.
Thanks for reveiwing and generous rating.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
