Trapped
Don't try to run26 total reviews
Comment from Kathy58
I truly love this poem. The format is just perfect for making an easy read.Your words are very descriptive and the rhyming sequence is terrific. Your use of imagery makes me feel as if I am right there in the poem too, great work, Kathy58
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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I truly love this poem. The format is just perfect for making an easy read.Your words are very descriptive and the rhyming sequence is terrific. Your use of imagery makes me feel as if I am right there in the poem too, great work, Kathy58
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you Kathy, I loved writing it.
Pleased you enojoyed it.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
I love the subtle humor in this piece, and indeed, it does get the point across quite effectively! LOL! We used to have a lot of these type (shotgun) weddings in KY, but now nobody can find Daddy. I think he went down to the bar to get a pack of cigarettes. Hmmmm... That was three years ago. ;)
Great job and good luck in the booth!
Penny
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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I love the subtle humor in this piece, and indeed, it does get the point across quite effectively! LOL! We used to have a lot of these type (shotgun) weddings in KY, but now nobody can find Daddy. I think he went down to the bar to get a pack of cigarettes. Hmmmm... That was three years ago. ;)
Great job and good luck in the booth!
Penny
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much Penny, poor Daddy, couldn't cope any longer. You've made me laugh my friend. Cigarettes heh? I think he may have shot through with another woman!
Warmest regards and thanks
Marijke
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Don't you tell me she's smokin' my cigs! LOL! (hell, I don't smoke...)
Smilin' right backatcha!
Pen
Comment from melyuki
HI Marijke, this poem suits the contest requirements so perfectly. It is written with lots of passion and emotion and the pic compliments it really well. The words used to describe the scenario, do justice to this fine verse. Love the last 2 lines I've got you know..... great poetic piece of artworkalways a fun day. Take care and write on, smiles from Mel
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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HI Marijke, this poem suits the contest requirements so perfectly. It is written with lots of passion and emotion and the pic compliments it really well. The words used to describe the scenario, do justice to this fine verse. Love the last 2 lines I've got you know..... great poetic piece of artworkalways a fun day. Take care and write on, smiles from Mel
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Thanks again, and I had fun with this one too. Wasn't going to enter this one, then this thought came to me. (I think my muse Bruce was sitting on my shoulder).
So here it is, for better or worse (so to speak).
Warmest regards and more hugs
Marijke
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so glad you did, it was full of wit and charm of a different kind. ha ha. and very enjoyable.. smiling back, Mel
Comment from Joan E.
This seems like the same artist, with another model in a similar condition. Nothing like a shotgun wedding to get him to pay "attention." I liked the way you resolved this entertaining poem.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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This seems like the same artist, with another model in a similar condition. Nothing like a shotgun wedding to get him to pay "attention." I liked the way you resolved this entertaining poem.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thanks Joan, I enjoyed this piece. "Back in my time ...." as I tell the kids, this is what happened! Sex before marriage? Never!
Yes, he should have got the message, and she should have got her man.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from CCasetta
Hilarious (it's like an episode of Jerry Springer, except it rhymes...). I know that if this letter was presented to me, it'd hold some sway. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Hilarious (it's like an episode of Jerry Springer, except it rhymes...). I know that if this letter was presented to me, it'd hold some sway. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your generous review. I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem. I enjoyed writing it.
Thanks for those lovely stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading this and love the ending! This is like watching a movie, you tell a story here! The writing is excellent, great flow of verses and words. No revisions needed and you are a wonderful story teller.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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I enjoyed reading this and love the ending! This is like watching a movie, you tell a story here! The writing is excellent, great flow of verses and words. No revisions needed and you are a wonderful story teller.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you mermaids, I try! I had fun with this, and enjoyed writing it. It sort of grew as I wrote it.
Thanks for the generous review and ratings.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from leesm
Fionageorge, this is a great entry for this contest. Very clever, and very funny. The poem reads smoothly, the rhymes work nicely and the whole presentation is a winner.
Nicely done.
Warm regards,
-Lee
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Fionageorge, this is a great entry for this contest. Very clever, and very funny. The poem reads smoothly, the rhymes work nicely and the whole presentation is a winner.
Nicely done.
Warm regards,
-Lee
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you Lee, I had fun with this, and enjoyed writing it. It sort of grew as I wrote it.
Thanks for the generous review and ratings.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from sgalletti
I'm enjoyng reading these love letter entries. It is a very diverse group of entries with very different approaches--some funny, some serious. Most, well done! Very fun and funny entry here about a truth - capturing a man in marriage through a pregnancy! Loved your rhyming couplets. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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I'm enjoyng reading these love letter entries. It is a very diverse group of entries with very different approaches--some funny, some serious. Most, well done! Very fun and funny entry here about a truth - capturing a man in marriage through a pregnancy! Loved your rhyming couplets. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you Sue, I liked playing around with this one. Bit tongue in cheek.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Belinda
Now this is going to be exciting :) He will never take your love for granted again. Hurry up tell your Pa and brothers to finish up this business. This poem of unrequited love has a threat in it, good!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Now this is going to be exciting :) He will never take your love for granted again. Hurry up tell your Pa and brothers to finish up this business. This poem of unrequited love has a threat in it, good!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you Belinda, I enjoyed writing this, played around with it for a while.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from hotstuff
Oh, how sad that a marriage has to start this way with one partner feeling trapped. Your poem highlights this not so uncommon fact of life and although the marriage can work out it is hardly a good start in life. A good contest entry.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Oh, how sad that a marriage has to start this way with one partner feeling trapped. Your poem highlights this not so uncommon fact of life and although the marriage can work out it is hardly a good start in life. A good contest entry.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you hotstuff, I enjoyed writing this, played around with it for a while.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
