My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "No Nobler Gift"My collection of various sonnets.
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Comment from easyeverett
Thy heart shines bright inside these words tonight
Poetically romantic sonnet's soar
Above the other love poems you might write
For sonnet's force the fires of love to roar.
An excellent poetic Dawn
The air is filled with sonnet spawn. tom
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thy heart shines bright inside these words tonight
Poetically romantic sonnet's soar
Above the other love poems you might write
For sonnet's force the fires of love to roar.
An excellent poetic Dawn
The air is filled with sonnet spawn. tom
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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So write me a sonnet, darling!!!! ;)
No words speak louder than the sonnet's song
you hear the heart of romance through each line
it's for enchantment's music that I long.
I thirst for it, dear bard, poetic wine...
Comment from bnd-writenow
Although not my favorite poem, I like the concept of the mask. Indeed we all wear one at times - to protect ourselves, to be invisible in a crowd, to watch and learn...
You have a good sense of rhyme, the meter feels off in a place or two. However, when read aloud, it works fairly well.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Although not my favorite poem, I like the concept of the mask. Indeed we all wear one at times - to protect ourselves, to be invisible in a crowd, to watch and learn...
You have a good sense of rhyme, the meter feels off in a place or two. However, when read aloud, it works fairly well.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your time, much appreciated. When I read it the meter feels tight, if you would point those places out, I'd take a look at them. Thanks again.
Comment from Begin Again
Dawn of Tomorrow
A very beautiful and lovely poem you have written in dedication to someone who means a lot to you. It flows down the page and is an enjoyment to read. Well done.
Carol
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Dawn of Tomorrow
A very beautiful and lovely poem you have written in dedication to someone who means a lot to you. It flows down the page and is an enjoyment to read. Well done.
Carol
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Carol, really appreciate your time to read and review.
Comment from Lady & Louis
Beautiful, JL! A perfect tribute for someone dear to you, and for whom you are obviously very dear as well. Makes me think of Himself in his earthly days, if he'd had someone to see behind his mask, too. Caustic was definitely a word that applied to him back then!
I love the crafting of this; it has the grace of fuller, older usage (far removed from the wannabe-archaic of some writers who think sticking "do" or "did" in poems works, lol). The only minute suggestion I have is that "tis" should perhaps have an apostrophe in front, being a contraction. However that usage may be changing, I don't know.
Bravo and thank you for posting this lovely poem!
Louise xxxx
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Beautiful, JL! A perfect tribute for someone dear to you, and for whom you are obviously very dear as well. Makes me think of Himself in his earthly days, if he'd had someone to see behind his mask, too. Caustic was definitely a word that applied to him back then!
I love the crafting of this; it has the grace of fuller, older usage (far removed from the wannabe-archaic of some writers who think sticking "do" or "did" in poems works, lol). The only minute suggestion I have is that "tis" should perhaps have an apostrophe in front, being a contraction. However that usage may be changing, I don't know.
Bravo and thank you for posting this lovely poem!
Louise xxxx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Oh Louise, you dear, thank you for the six and for the catch, you are right about tis, should have that apostrophe and I did insert it post haste. Glad you enjoyed, hope Louis does as well.
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My pleasure! I'm glad I saw this when I had a couple of sixes floating around, lol. And yes, he does like it! In fact he's going to say so himself.
Louise :))
My friend, I took great pleasure in reading your poem. Your feeling for your friend spoke well in it, and I smiled, for as my lady has said, his mask is like mine, in my earthly days. I thank you for posting this, for your poetry is well written, you have a fine voice for it.
Louis
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That means a great deal to me. Thank you for that communication, Louis, so glad it touched both of you.
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You know, your comment the other day about his voice got me thinking! I didn't really know his voice in any sense, when I fell for him. I was in love with the man of more than three centuries ago - and how much he has changed since then! Strange, isn't it.
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No, not so strange really. You fell in love with him before you could reach him so the voice would have been missing. Does he serenade you now?
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Well, when we're at his place he does sing, yes! Not normally here, though he did a little bit of singing the other morning while we were walking through the park en route to work. I'm thinking of his voice in a broader sense too, as in his expression, and the personality being expressed.
Comment from fionageorge
This is a stunning poem, with deep meaning and a wonderful message. It is a delight to read, flows freely and has greath rhythm and rhyme. And the artwork is stunning, complementing the words.
Congratulations.
Warm Regards
Marijke
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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This is a stunning poem, with deep meaning and a wonderful message. It is a delight to read, flows freely and has greath rhythm and rhyme. And the artwork is stunning, complementing the words.
Congratulations.
Warm Regards
Marijke
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you so very much for the beautiful words of review, they are very much appreciated.
Comment from Diny
DANg I wish I had a six!- that was greatness!- this classical style is suited well for these thoughts- and I even thought of my own best friend while reading them- inspiring indeed-- Write on and ON!- Di
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DANg I wish I had a six!- that was greatness!- this classical style is suited well for these thoughts- and I even thought of my own best friend while reading them- inspiring indeed-- Write on and ON!- Di
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
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Oh wow, don't think I've heard greatness from you for sometime, finally nailed one, yippeeee. I know if you approve I've done a good job ;)
Comment from rama devi
Aw, this is soooooo sweet and tender---and also a very finely composed sonnet, dear Dawn! Would have made a strong contender in the love sonnet contest.
Fantastic artwork enhances the presentation, which is wonderfully artistic with color choices as well.
Not a nit in sight. Flawless iambs and well rhymed.
I am not usually one who prefers biblical diction like thine and thou---but it fits nicely here, regardless! :)
True love sees the inner core and ignores those silly masks.
You are indeed blessed.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Aw, this is soooooo sweet and tender---and also a very finely composed sonnet, dear Dawn! Would have made a strong contender in the love sonnet contest.
Fantastic artwork enhances the presentation, which is wonderfully artistic with color choices as well.
Not a nit in sight. Flawless iambs and well rhymed.
I am not usually one who prefers biblical diction like thine and thou---but it fits nicely here, regardless! :)
True love sees the inner core and ignores those silly masks.
You are indeed blessed.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Think I give up on contest, the one I did enter didn't get one vote, ahhh well such is life. Glad you enjoyed this one. I guess I feel a divine touch of love and that is why the use of the thee, thou and what not. I don't use it often but every now and again I feel it in order.
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Ah yes, the contests are often more of a popularity vote than a reflection of the best writing winning.
I join them because I like prompting my muse...but I never expect to win. that way, If I do win--it is a nice surprise and If I don't it is not a disappointment.
Lots of Love,
rd
Comment from Fireflyte
Beautifully done. Very tightly crafted, and the olden-phrasing (thee's, thou's, tis, etc.) is not awkward or distracting. An excellent choice of subject, and you don't wander off from it into any superfluous descriptives -- all lines tie directly and clearly to the subject.
A beautiful sentiment, beautifully crafted.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Beautifully done. Very tightly crafted, and the olden-phrasing (thee's, thou's, tis, etc.) is not awkward or distracting. An excellent choice of subject, and you don't wander off from it into any superfluous descriptives -- all lines tie directly and clearly to the subject.
A beautiful sentiment, beautifully crafted.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Oh what a very touching review. So honored to receive one of your six starts. I thank you greatly for that gift.
Comment from ArtGal
Wow, you have indeed found a friend not only for life, for throughout eternity, so well written! I can never just quote parts of your writings, I have to quote it all. But I love the ending, "Behind thy mask there dwells true chivalry. How blessed I am, thou shared this gift freely." This is beautiful! Once you find a friend like this, don't ever let go of he or she for that's a true friend and we don't find many of them, I enjoyed this so much!
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Wow, you have indeed found a friend not only for life, for throughout eternity, so well written! I can never just quote parts of your writings, I have to quote it all. But I love the ending, "Behind thy mask there dwells true chivalry. How blessed I am, thou shared this gift freely." This is beautiful! Once you find a friend like this, don't ever let go of he or she for that's a true friend and we don't find many of them, I enjoyed this so much!
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
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We are lucky if we find 1 or 2 to call a true friend I think and you are right, we should never let them go. Beautiful review and so glad you enjoyed.
Comment from MissMerri
The rhyme and meter are without flaw and the old English, quaintly pleasant. (I think there is a typo on the word "journeys" but just an apostrophe before the 's' showing the contraction, would fix it quickly.) This is a kind and loving tribute to a friend who must feel honored to be so appreciated. I enjoyed it.
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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The rhyme and meter are without flaw and the old English, quaintly pleasant. (I think there is a typo on the word "journeys" but just an apostrophe before the 's' showing the contraction, would fix it quickly.) This is a kind and loving tribute to a friend who must feel honored to be so appreciated. I enjoyed it.
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Oh thanks so much for the catch. You know how we sometimes get into a hurry. Really appreciate that and the wonderful words of review.
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You're most welcome. I knew you'd want to fix it.
