rondels and rondeaus
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Comment from Nicnac
What a lovely lullaby, Brooke.
I especially like the lilting refrain.
The thought of sprites dancing around the bed and fairies catching tears in their threaded webs and leaving rose petals instead is DELIGHTFUL!
I love this poem. Love the alliteration. Loved the imagery. :)
Nic
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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What a lovely lullaby, Brooke.
I especially like the lilting refrain.
The thought of sprites dancing around the bed and fairies catching tears in their threaded webs and leaving rose petals instead is DELIGHTFUL!
I love this poem. Love the alliteration. Loved the imagery. :)
Nic
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Nic. What lovely things to say about this lullaby :-) Brooke
Comment from rtrub
A very loving and beautiful poem! Your form is excellent! I love this piece, it really portrays the innocence of a child!How we want to protect someone so little and fragile. You really created that feeling with this piece. Your imagery is vivid making this poem very special.
Take care RTR
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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A very loving and beautiful poem! Your form is excellent! I love this piece, it really portrays the innocence of a child!How we want to protect someone so little and fragile. You really created that feeling with this piece. Your imagery is vivid making this poem very special.
Take care RTR
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Thank you, RTR, for your lovely review of my lullaby :-) Brooke
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Your very welcome and take care!
Comment from perunest
I could hear a gentle lullaby as
I read these words, so soft and
caring. It seems you've written this
with a special person in mind and heart.
Lovely! Carolyn
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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I could hear a gentle lullaby as
I read these words, so soft and
caring. It seems you've written this
with a special person in mind and heart.
Lovely! Carolyn
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Carolyn, thanks so much for your kind words about my lullaby :-) Brooke
Comment from Mitzi
Oh my Brooke...what a coincidence. I just read this lovely lullaby prayer(because that's what it is to me) and was shocked at how much the content has in common with my Sweet Sue and the Dream Fairy. Of course yours is much more sophisticated and graceful, but it seems to be a telepathy thing. Fairies, dreams, sweet child...your Sleep Well Sweet Child is absolutely beautiful. This is a real keeper and should be put to music. Jeanne xo
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Oh my Brooke...what a coincidence. I just read this lovely lullaby prayer(because that's what it is to me) and was shocked at how much the content has in common with my Sweet Sue and the Dream Fairy. Of course yours is much more sophisticated and graceful, but it seems to be a telepathy thing. Fairies, dreams, sweet child...your Sleep Well Sweet Child is absolutely beautiful. This is a real keeper and should be put to music. Jeanne xo
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much, Jeanne. Yes, I consider this much like a prayer, too :-) You are most generous in your response - I will have to look at your poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh, Brooke, this is the most beautiful rondeau! I so wish I'd had a Mommy like you! The love for a child pours from the words. this is absolutely wonderful.
Hugs and warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Oh, Brooke, this is the most beautiful rondeau! I so wish I'd had a Mommy like you! The love for a child pours from the words. this is absolutely wonderful.
Hugs and warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Kat - I so wish you had had a loving mother too - my daughter is the most precious part of my life (along with her brother), but this poem was inspired by her fairy-loving self. :-) Brooke
Comment from Queenise
Brooke this is such a wonderfully sweet and encouraging piece. I love every bit of it. The baby is precious and the picture goes so well with your poem. It is marvelous, darling. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Brooke this is such a wonderfully sweet and encouraging piece. I love every bit of it. The baby is precious and the picture goes so well with your poem. It is marvelous, darling. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Queenise. I'm so glad you enjoyed this lullaby :-) Brooke
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My pleasure. Queenise
Comment from honeytree
Beautiful, creative words written about a baby, and how precious this baby is. I love the picture of the baby presented in the picture.
I love everyword written here.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Beautiful, creative words written about a baby, and how precious this baby is. I love the picture of the baby presented in the picture.
I love everyword written here.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Annie, and good Sunday morning! :-) Brooke
Comment from Colin Douglas
Very sweet and innocent with lovely imagery, oh reaper of polar bears.
You never cease to amaze me with your words.
Thank you for sharing and never forget to keep writing.
Colin
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Very sweet and innocent with lovely imagery, oh reaper of polar bears.
You never cease to amaze me with your words.
Thank you for sharing and never forget to keep writing.
Colin
Comment Written 15-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Colin, for this gracious review of my lullaby. Brooke :-)
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Brooke, I've been so busy lately--got a daughter's wedding coming up--so I just pop on when I can and cherry pick. Ans what a cherry I've picked this time!
This is absolutely beautiful. The images are startling in their simplicity and complexity--contradiction intended. The poem is so warm, tender, and beautiful, truly capturing the innocence and miracle that a baby is.
I love it.
John
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Brooke, I've been so busy lately--got a daughter's wedding coming up--so I just pop on when I can and cherry pick. Ans what a cherry I've picked this time!
This is absolutely beautiful. The images are startling in their simplicity and complexity--contradiction intended. The poem is so warm, tender, and beautiful, truly capturing the innocence and miracle that a baby is.
I love it.
John
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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John, thank you. The wedding of a daughter trumps Fan Story any day!!! :-) Thank you so much for this lovely and generous review, and may your daughter's marriage bring you grandbabies to sing lullabies to :-) Brooke
Comment from Jmercer
The rondeau is a form that can be hard to write well because of its strong rhyme scheme. It works best in lullabies and nursery rhymes and you have used it well here. I like that you managed to vary your word choice quite a bit, despite the restrictions.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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The rondeau is a form that can be hard to write well because of its strong rhyme scheme. It works best in lullabies and nursery rhymes and you have used it well here. I like that you managed to vary your word choice quite a bit, despite the restrictions.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2009
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Thank you, my friend :-) I'm so glad you like my use of this form! Brooke
