Legal Tendencies
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Trials & Depositions"Two attorney's fall in love....
9 total reviews
Comment from Lisha L
OK This chapter did not seem as refined as your previous chapters. I think it is in the lack of details. You are not painting the picture you normally do. I do like the idea of the flirtaious secretary, but instead of telling us about it, show it being overheard with the secretary and Steven
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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OK This chapter did not seem as refined as your previous chapters. I think it is in the lack of details. You are not painting the picture you normally do. I do like the idea of the flirtaious secretary, but instead of telling us about it, show it being overheard with the secretary and Steven
Comment Written 17-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your advice and comments. I truly appreciate that a lot..........xoxo
Comment from wrdtrctr
Short chapter so I don't have much to use for the review. At this point it reads as romance as much as mystery, so I'm not sure which direction you're headed. It seems that this chapter was only to set up the following ones so I won't make any judgment yet, it would be unfair to you.
Hopefully I catch your next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Short chapter so I don't have much to use for the review. At this point it reads as romance as much as mystery, so I'm not sure which direction you're headed. It seems that this chapter was only to set up the following ones so I won't make any judgment yet, it would be unfair to you.
Hopefully I catch your next chapter.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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This is towards the end but if you ever get a chance, please read the rest ad it would make more sense. This is an erotic romance contest so hope you enjoy. Thanks for stopping by to read...xoxo
Comment from dancechick1
i found this story very entertaining and liked the use of character in the story. It is slightly provocutive, which i enjoyed and i look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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i found this story very entertaining and liked the use of character in the story. It is slightly provocutive, which i enjoyed and i look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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thank you so very much!! truly appreciate this. xoxo
Comment from tamra_lb
I like the story and am very interested to see where it goes. You have my attention in the story, but sometimes your sentences get a little wordy. I think you could make your points a little more concise and clean so the story flows better. I also think you should break up ideas into stand alone paragraphs to make them stand out more. I like where your story is headed and would definately keep reading it.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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I like the story and am very interested to see where it goes. You have my attention in the story, but sometimes your sentences get a little wordy. I think you could make your points a little more concise and clean so the story flows better. I also think you should break up ideas into stand alone paragraphs to make them stand out more. I like where your story is headed and would definately keep reading it.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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thank you xoxo
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written, it too late to think about pentalties once the deed is done. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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This is very well written, it too late to think about pentalties once the deed is done. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Good scheme huh?? Im glad and pleased that you enjoyed this.......Thank you.
xoxo
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You're welcome, Heidi. Charlie
Comment from Mark Nolan
It wasnt until I got to this line that I thought that this could have some reality attached to it...then it hit me. Oh this is the line.....I kept thinking I would take a peek inside the first chance I got. So the very second he got up to take a shower, I looked. Well done
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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It wasnt until I got to this line that I thought that this could have some reality attached to it...then it hit me. Oh this is the line.....I kept thinking I would take a peek inside the first chance I got. So the very second he got up to take a shower, I looked. Well done
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you very much.....I am pleased you liked this. xoxo
Comment from annienolan
Well written, quite graphic, but enjoyable just the same. Creatively worded, imagination going wild. I enjoyed this piece of work.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Well written, quite graphic, but enjoyable just the same. Creatively worded, imagination going wild. I enjoyed this piece of work.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Graphic because it is an erotic/romance story. I am honored and pleased you stopped in to read and comment. I truly appreciate that.....xoxo
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and good chapter you have penned. It seems to be a lot of excitement coming up. Good job. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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This is a very interesting and good chapter you have penned. It seems to be a lot of excitement coming up. Good job. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Thank you very much.....there is excitment to come and I happy you are continuing to read. xoxo
Comment from Sasha
This is excellent. Great cliffhanger too. You leave the reader hanging in the air. Very good writing about the internal politics at the office and the concern over how they would react to Kim and Steven getting engaged. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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This is excellent. Great cliffhanger too. You leave the reader hanging in the air. Very good writing about the internal politics at the office and the concern over how they would react to Kim and Steven getting engaged. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2009
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Glad you enjoyed this as well. I am hoping that this major twist in the story adds excitment and proved to be a good move. xoxo
