Karma Kite
Letting go95 total reviews
Comment from Xylok
not sure what dazzling picture you're referring to here because its gone whatever it was, but if you're talking about faith here in this poem, wow, brilliantly executed, and if you're not, lol, help me out again with an explication. but im running with the reading i took from it, as all readers ought do, lol, and im thinking you found a clever way of saying that now that you have found some form of a god, or a source of infinite comfort to that degree, your life and burdens are less detrimental to your spirit, your overall happiness, and that you feel almost like flying you are so entrenched in the rapture your Truth is providing you. That's a whole lot of love to string to a kite; and if i misread it, sorry, but what i read was beautiful.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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not sure what dazzling picture you're referring to here because its gone whatever it was, but if you're talking about faith here in this poem, wow, brilliantly executed, and if you're not, lol, help me out again with an explication. but im running with the reading i took from it, as all readers ought do, lol, and im thinking you found a clever way of saying that now that you have found some form of a god, or a source of infinite comfort to that degree, your life and burdens are less detrimental to your spirit, your overall happiness, and that you feel almost like flying you are so entrenched in the rapture your Truth is providing you. That's a whole lot of love to string to a kite; and if i misread it, sorry, but what i read was beautiful.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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I'm trying to get rid of my frustrations and burdens. They make me sick, as now, I am slowly recovering of a pnemonia. My immune system is weaked by some constant pressures in my life. I wrote this about letting it all go, a poem of faith.
Comment from smileycloud
hey
good naani
the content is vivid with the physical concept of flying a kite and the undertones of the emotional are well vivisble with the freedom of burden lifted when moving on from the past
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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hey
good naani
the content is vivid with the physical concept of flying a kite and the undertones of the emotional are well vivisble with the freedom of burden lifted when moving on from the past
have a smiley day
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you for the great review. Having a smiley day too.
Comment from CCasetta
Nicely metaphorical. The concrete-form is a nice touch, as well. "Go" as the last line reads wonderfully and conveys the perfect thought there. the image and the words work very well (I think it could even do without the word "when"). Very enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Nicely metaphorical. The concrete-form is a nice touch, as well. "Go" as the last line reads wonderfully and conveys the perfect thought there. the image and the words work very well (I think it could even do without the word "when"). Very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you for reading and reviewing this piece dear fellow writer.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Letting go is not always easy but opening one's hands and releasing the hold seem like a good place to start.
The image of the kite is a great symbol of the physical removal of whatever was weighing one down.
Good Naani poem and a great contest entry.
Juliette
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Letting go is not always easy but opening one's hands and releasing the hold seem like a good place to start.
The image of the kite is a great symbol of the physical removal of whatever was weighing one down.
Good Naani poem and a great contest entry.
Juliette
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you Juliette for the witty and thoughtful review to this Kite.
Comment from luna
Wow, amada, I really liked this. The kite could be used as a metaphor for problems...wonderful picture.
Note that this is not a fluff five or drive-by review. I've read your poem and truly consider it worthy of a full five star rating.
Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Jenny *smile*
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Wow, amada, I really liked this. The kite could be used as a metaphor for problems...wonderful picture.
Note that this is not a fluff five or drive-by review. I've read your poem and truly consider it worthy of a full five star rating.
Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Jenny *smile*
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
Comment from Josipher32
This was a wonderfully written poem for this "Naani" contest. I especially enjoyed the picture of the flying kite. Good luck my friend!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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This was a wonderfully written poem for this "Naani" contest. I especially enjoyed the picture of the flying kite. Good luck my friend!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you Josipher32 for reading and commenting in this one.
Comment from clawhammer
This is outstanding. I love the message and you have crafted such simple words into an extremely powerful poem. There is nothing to suggest. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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This is outstanding. I love the message and you have crafted such simple words into an extremely powerful poem. There is nothing to suggest. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you clawhammer for the delightful review.
Comment from misscookie
Now this poem has a mesage ithin it .I'm sure the readers will find it also i love the way your words floated so ferrly and you choose the perfect picture for your poem
good write.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Now this poem has a mesage ithin it .I'm sure the readers will find it also i love the way your words floated so ferrly and you choose the perfect picture for your poem
good write.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you misscookie for the gracious review and for reading my work.
your welcome
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Amada,
Nice naani. It is well constructed and contains a great message that is said in few words. You should be proud of this one.
Cheers,
Whizpurr ^-^
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Hi Amada,
Nice naani. It is well constructed and contains a great message that is said in few words. You should be proud of this one.
Cheers,
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you for the very insightful review.
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Thank you for the very insightful review.
Comment from sara-beth
Hello amada, that is quite a profound idea you phrased so well! I am reminded of a song I was actually just listening to.....the lyrics said, "free yourself from history, that is the key".......great job, and I wish you luck.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Hello amada, that is quite a profound idea you phrased so well! I am reminded of a song I was actually just listening to.....the lyrics said, "free yourself from history, that is the key".......great job, and I wish you luck.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you, sara-beth.
