Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Wow, Carol! The words of your lune poem and that absorbing artwork were made for each other. What a moving poem. Best wishes in the contest.
Indy :>)

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2009

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Indy

Appreciate the kind words. I had never heard of a lune but when I saw the contest this just popped out as being perfect for it. Pure luck I guess. Thanks for the review. Carol

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hey Carol.

Nice use of the rules, and short amount of syllables, along with the picture to convey a potent concept... especially for those who are unjustly accused.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2009

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turtle

Our criminal system needs an overhaul...how many people sit on deathrow and have been proven innocent by DNA tests. WE are too quick to proscecute in order to make a name for ourselves and then when we do get the right guy...we put them on the streets again. Crazy!

Carol

Comment from Helvi2

Excellent

Hi Carol,
Wow! This is frightening,sad and powerful. I can't imagine how one who is innocent can handle a situation like this when others are sooo sure the individual is guilty.
In a small poem like this your words really ring out because tour focused on one powerful thought. I think you did an excellent job expressing the innocent victim's cry for help.

Good Luck in The Contest
Helvi :o)

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2009

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Helvi

Greatly appreciate your kind review. I can't imagine another horror than being in prison and no one will believe you when you say you are innocent. Thanks for the review.

Carol

Comment from words

Excellent

You have chosen a very compelling picture for your verse.

Excellent use of the form.

I imagine many have asked this same question:

Unjustly accused
He cries out
Will anyone hear?


Sometimes the only one who hears is the Lord and that is, in the end, always enough.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2009

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Words

Great comments. Appreciate it very much. Carol

Comment from L.lora

Excellent

Hi Carol, it appears
that you've followed
all the rules for this
type of poetry. That
being said, your poem
does in deed say so
very much with so few
words. Excellent. Lora

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2009

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Lora

Never ever heard of a lune, but I thought the artwork screamed for a voice. Thanks, Carol

reply by L.lora on 07-Nov-2009

That makes two of us, but then there are quite a few things I've never heard of...LOL. Lora

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Eigth words that went together for a very powerful message. Good job. The artwork you chose goes with it so perfectly. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2009

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Barbara

Thanks...I read about these people who have been in prison 15, 20, 25 years for something they didn't do because someone said they did. DNA proves them innocent. How do you ever give these people back the life they lost? Thanks for the review. Smiles, Carol

Comment from melyuki

Excellent

Hi there big sis, my goodness ,where are you today. This is one deep source of emotion, made even bolder by the pic you have used Carol. It filled my heart with innocent pain and I am feeling the need to give you a big hug. the last line Will anyone hear? now this just fills me with doubt. calling out, speaking in vein. all those feelings.Energy lost, with no results forthcoming. I hope this isn't coming from where I think it is. talk soon luv little sis.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2009

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Mel

I'm not sure where the emotions came from. A few friends on this site are thinking about quitting because others are mean and unfair. I don't like how some of the things are done either. Guess I just wonder why things happen and if anyone is actually ever listening unless it happens to them.

Why do bad things always happen to the good people while the bad people seem to sail through life free. Like Joan for instance...Her son is about to get married, she's got friends like you who really care...why did she have to get so sick...Why not the guy down the street who doesn't give a shit about anyone? Crazy thinking I guess...

And then we have 13 people on death row who have spent years there...guess what a group of college students studying law proved them innocent through DNA. Where was our criminal system...if kids could do it...why didn't they

Mixed up world for sure.

LOve ya...Big Sis?

Comment from leesm

Excellent

This is a great contender in this Lune Poem contest. Very powerful, especially with the great picture you've chosen. Superb presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly,
-Lee

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2009

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lee

Thanks so much. I have never heard of a lune until today...but the picture and words seems to belong together. Thanks for the review. Carol

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

Hi creative friend. I don't even know about this contest, not to mention the form lune poetry. While you ... have written a strong entry to the contest. Your poem, the picture, the title and the tag above it have created something 'whole'...

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2009

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Belinda

I had never heard of lune poetry either but I decided to give it a shot. Glad you liked it. Carol

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

People are quick to judge. It is the old adage, "Where there is smoke, there is fire." I wonder how many innocent people are wrongly convicted and suffer. Very well written Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2009

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Charlie

Thirteen people were on death row and found innocent with DNA...cases college students pursued first. What's that tell you about our system? Carol

reply by c_lucas on 06-Nov-2009

You're welcome, Carol. Charlie