Dining Without, Tony
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "George's Farm Market"A book highlighting poetry about Baltimore's food.
11 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
This is great Mike and you really challenged yourself with this one, including so many fruits and veggies, right up to the final line ... you couldn't forget the pears!! well done and interesting author's notes. I've had serious computer problems, so it's good to be back on line again. Jude
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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This is great Mike and you really challenged yourself with this one, including so many fruits and veggies, right up to the final line ... you couldn't forget the pears!! well done and interesting author's notes. I've had serious computer problems, so it's good to be back on line again. Jude
Comment Written 02-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
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I couldn't resist paying a little homage to you as your pair of pear poems remains in my mind. It's great having you back on line and I have wondered and worried. This poem took a month or two to work up in my mind. Unfortunately they closed the stand the day before it was completed, but I will mail it to them. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review, also I welcome you back too. Mike
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hi ya Mike! What a wonderful poem. I hope George and his family continue to lure customers and continue this wonderful family owned small business. We have the same kind of family-owned market about a mile from my house and it's always so much fun to rummage through the veggies. They always treat each customer like they are part of their family, and like you said...I always leave with lots of stuff.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Hi ya Mike! What a wonderful poem. I hope George and his family continue to lure customers and continue this wonderful family owned small business. We have the same kind of family-owned market about a mile from my house and it's always so much fun to rummage through the veggies. They always treat each customer like they are part of their family, and like you said...I always leave with lots of stuff.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I agree and loved this reivew. I thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from L.lora
Well done, and most
enjoyable. I enjoyed the
gentle rhyme pattern and
the easy flow. However, I
do think that possibly the
line with "that can be got."
may have been a bit forced, but
I did enjoy the read anyway.
I don't believe I've ever met
anyone who can make so much
easy to read enjoyable poetry
from the subject of gastromomic
pleasures. No suggestions, other
than try to make sure your rhymes
flow easily and don't feel forced.
Perhaps, reading aloud a few times
will help to discern that, although
I'm sure you probably already do that.
Anyway, I enjoyed your poem and notes.
No nits.. :)Lora
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Well done, and most
enjoyable. I enjoyed the
gentle rhyme pattern and
the easy flow. However, I
do think that possibly the
line with "that can be got."
may have been a bit forced, but
I did enjoy the read anyway.
I don't believe I've ever met
anyone who can make so much
easy to read enjoyable poetry
from the subject of gastromomic
pleasures. No suggestions, other
than try to make sure your rhymes
flow easily and don't feel forced.
Perhaps, reading aloud a few times
will help to discern that, although
I'm sure you probably already do that.
Anyway, I enjoyed your poem and notes.
No nits.. :)Lora
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I put, "That can be got." in " as it is more a slang phrase anyway. I appreciate the review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wonder if life wouldn't be better if we went back to those simpler ol' fashioned way. I think so the family values were instilled in the children by numerous adults. You did a great job with this poem.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I wonder if life wouldn't be better if we went back to those simpler ol' fashioned way. I think so the family values were instilled in the children by numerous adults. You did a great job with this poem.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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An interesting thought, much work and no computer, but it does benefit one to include a bit of those ol'fashioned ways back into one's life. I really enjoyed the review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from TimidView
What a great 'ode'. I loved your descriptions and how you worked the story of your grandmother in to the thread of the tale. I think it's a great poem filled with an appreciation for a store I may never visit, but would frequent if it was near where I lived. Great job!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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What a great 'ode'. I loved your descriptions and how you worked the story of your grandmother in to the thread of the tale. I think it's a great poem filled with an appreciation for a store I may never visit, but would frequent if it was near where I lived. Great job!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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That aspect is strange as I really didn't plan on doing it, but there is so much that is personal with food, it kind of makes for an interesting ice breaker and also stirs about similar emotions in the reader. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Writeaway...
Excellent poem Mike K2, I was inspired by your creativity and imagination. I found no spags what so ever, the background and picture also blended in well, excellent job well done.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Excellent poem Mike K2, I was inspired by your creativity and imagination. I found no spags what so ever, the background and picture also blended in well, excellent job well done.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Laidy
i thought this was a great write and i thought you wrote this well and with great detail. this was a great poem and i loved the colors and the picture you chose. it was a nice read
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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i thought this was a great write and i thought you wrote this well and with great detail. this was a great poem and i loved the colors and the picture you chose. it was a nice read
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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These poems are interesting to write and it takes a while for the mind juggling to let the story settle in. Many aspects are unintended to be included such as mentioning each vegatable and fruit that they grow, it's just that people always ask when they will be in. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Catherin Elizabet Belle
The poem is an interesting story. The punctuation and line breaks are so well place, one hardly notices the irregular number of lines in the verses. The rhyme scheme works well and enhances the story being told. I'm giving you a rating of five. Just because I find the irregular number of lines in the poem somewhat distracting, the work is well written.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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The poem is an interesting story. The punctuation and line breaks are so well place, one hardly notices the irregular number of lines in the verses. The rhyme scheme works well and enhances the story being told. I'm giving you a rating of five. Just because I find the irregular number of lines in the poem somewhat distracting, the work is well written.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I find out that with story poems, it is best to let the lines fall where they may. I did double check and on my computer, the lines break and the end, however with other computers, the lines might wrap a bit, which happened when I printed it out. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from irishauthorme
Hi Mike, a great poem backed up by a piece of history! I shop at all of the family owned businesses in and around our small town, I don't care if it costs a bit more. Family owned businesses are closing every year, succuming to the big super markets. We have only one family owned farm left that sells from a roadside stand. Quite a few down further into the valley but you have to drive 20 miles. We have a local butcher shop that has excellent meat and sausages, and they sell seasoned prime ribs on Thanksgiving and Christmas.
I like reading your home-spun stories, keep them coming!
Irish
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Hi Mike, a great poem backed up by a piece of history! I shop at all of the family owned businesses in and around our small town, I don't care if it costs a bit more. Family owned businesses are closing every year, succuming to the big super markets. We have only one family owned farm left that sells from a roadside stand. Quite a few down further into the valley but you have to drive 20 miles. We have a local butcher shop that has excellent meat and sausages, and they sell seasoned prime ribs on Thanksgiving and Christmas.
I like reading your home-spun stories, keep them coming!
Irish
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I use both big stores and small family businesses, but the pickings are fairly small. I know the supermarkets try to compete with a small health food store, but she is holding her own as the supermarket products are either more expensive or intermittently or occasionally available. I regret that I don't have a butcher shop in the area as their meats and sausages are alway much better. I thank you very much for sharing with me, the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Mike ...
I have read and reviewed this as free-thought writing rather than as a poem because in so many places, you do not have a good, regular metre which provides the rhythm.
There are just two small corrections indicated ...
* You have - That's days fresh produce ... this should be - That day's fresh produce ...
* You have - in a place the is friendly and warm ...
this should be - that is friendly ....
You are very fortunate to have such a shop where fresh vegetables are available - straight from the farm.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed it.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Hullo Mike ...
I have read and reviewed this as free-thought writing rather than as a poem because in so many places, you do not have a good, regular metre which provides the rhythm.
There are just two small corrections indicated ...
* You have - That's days fresh produce ... this should be - That day's fresh produce ...
* You have - in a place the is friendly and warm ...
this should be - that is friendly ....
You are very fortunate to have such a shop where fresh vegetables are available - straight from the farm.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed it.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Good finds and I made the corrections as soon as I saw this, unfortunately thanking you some time later. Thank you very much for the corrections, the compliments and this review. Mike
